Beyblade Story: The Rise of Bushi

It might mean that you have to change bushi in your story too.

Were instead of losing to gabe, he wins against gabe

From how strong his pure blader spirit is.
(Jan. 29, 2020  10:23 PM)Staron Wrote: It might mean that you have to change bushi in your story too.

Were instead of losing to gabe, he wins against gabe

From how strong his pure blader spirit is.

No way. Every blader has his ups and lows. You have to bond with your bey over time. If you get your bond super fast, then you’re basically Aiga, which isn’t as liked of a protagonist as someone like Valt.
But this pure blader spirit will be activated when ifrit is about to lose. But bushi will control it as soon as he becomes better, but he's overconfident, so he's more like zero from shogun steel. Like father, like son.
Even though this is random, bushi will have a little blue in his hair. Completely random comment here folks.
The True Beginning! Let's go Ifrit!

A bey bursted when ifrit clashed with it.

"Inferno Ifrit with a burst finish, Bushi wins." Said the ref

"That was pretty fun Gabe, good match" It was 3 months until the local tournament.

"Man, two years ago, you didn't even knew what blading was, its surprising how fast you get to know things." Gabe picked up Gaia and put him back together

I still don't know how I unlocked that power the first time, but I will unlock it again, don't worry ifrit. Bushi said in his head.

"Let's keep going Gabe." Said Bushi.

"You got it." Said Gabe

"Ready, Set!"

"3..2..1.. Let It Rip!" The both pulled off there signature launches.

Ifrit and Gaia head for the center and Ifrit takes it.

"Inferno Defence!" Gaia started to attack, but Ifrit was keeping his ground.

"Gaia!" Gaia then broke through the defence.

"Now bad Gabe, but it's time to show you something! Burning Slash!" Ifrit strikes Gaia and sends him into the wall.

Then Gaia paused and went to Ifrit and a flash of light happened.

Gaia knocked out Ifrit and Bushi grabs Ifrit as it was flying.

"What was that?" Bushi was confused about what happened.

"I think Gaia learned a new move, I'll call it Swing Counter." Gabe said.

"That's what I needed to hear." Said Bushi.

"What do you mean?"

"I'm going to leave the academy, but I wanted you to learn a new move, Gabe, you will be the new captain."

"I understand that you have to leave bushi, I'll see you around."

"See ya" Bushi leaves the academy.

After the school day, Bushi went to the roof to the stadium.

"So your Bushi Kurogane." It was one of the strongest bladers in the world, Lúi Shurosagi.

That's the end of chapter 1 everyone.
(Feb. 02, 2020  6:14 PM)Staron Wrote: Chapter 1 preview:

The True Beginning! Let's go Ifrit!

A bey bursted when ifrit clashed with it.

"Inferno Ifrit with a burst finish, Bushi wins." Said the ref

"That was pretty fun Gabe, good match" It was 3 months until the local tournament.

"Man, two years ago, you didn't even knew what blading was, its surprising how fast you get to know things." Gabe picked up Gaia and put him back together

I still don't know how I unlocked that power the first time, but I will unlock it again, don't worry ifrit. Bushi said in his head.

"Let's keep going Gabe." Said Bushi.

"You got it." Said Gabe

"Ready, Set!"

"3..2..1.. Let It Rip!" The both pulled off there signature launches.

Good chapter preview! Is Gabe not a member of the Supreme Four at this time in your story?
Not yet, also you said gabe being one of the members of the supreme 4, who is he replaced by?
(Feb. 02, 2020  6:25 PM)Staron Wrote: Not yet, also you said gabe being one of the members of the supreme 4, who is he replaced by?

What do you mean? In the first season of the anime, Lui, Shu, Gabe, and Zac were the Supreme Four members, and there were no other members before them.
(Feb. 02, 2020  6:27 PM)Staron Wrote: You forgot Xander

Wait a minute, that means Gabe wasn’t ever a member of the Supreme Four.....oh well, too late to go back on it for my story now.
Stupid, stupid, stupid
(Feb. 02, 2020  6:30 PM)Staron Wrote: Stupid, stupid, stupid

That’s...very rude. You shouldn’t talk like that to anyone.
(Feb. 02, 2020  6:42 PM)Staron Wrote: Sorry about that
Well don’t do it again. You don’t want to get in trouble here right?
(Feb. 02, 2020  6:47 PM)Staron Wrote: No way dude.

Good ?, now lets get back on topic.
Do you have any characters that you want in this chapter?
(Feb. 02, 2020  6:50 PM)Staron Wrote: Do you have any characters that you want in this chapter?

Ugen Senoku, but put him in when you would like. No rush to put him in the first chapter unless you want to.
Besides ugen, I will put ugen in this chapter
(Feb. 02, 2020  6:51 PM)Staron Wrote: Besides ugen, I will put ugen in this chapter

I’d prefer not any other characters than him, as then you get a crossover more than your own story.
Maybe we can talk about the story instead of messaging like this, ya mind if you give me your number?

If you have a phone
Chapter one is done

Finally decided to finish it
(Mar. 01, 2020  7:39 PM)Staron Wrote: Chapter one is done

Finally decided to finish it

When are you going to post it?
(Feb. 02, 2020  6:14 PM)Staron Wrote: The True Beginning! Let's go Ifrit!

A bey bursted when ifrit clashed with it.

"Inferno Ifrit with a burst finish, Bushi wins." Said the ref

"That was pretty fun Gabe, good match" It was 3 months until the local tournament.

"Man, two years ago, you didn't even knew what blading was, its surprising how fast you get to know things." Gabe picked up Gaia and put him back together

I still don't know how I unlocked that power the first time, but I will unlock it again, don't worry ifrit. Bushi said in his head.

"Let's keep going Gabe." Said Bushi.

"You got it." Said Gabe

"Ready, Set!"

"3..2..1.. Let It Rip!" The both pulled off there signature launches.

Ifrit and Gaia head for the center and Ifrit takes it.

"Inferno Defence!" Gaia started to attack, but Ifrit was keeping his ground.

"Gaia!" Gaia then broke through the defence.

"Now bad Gabe, but it's time to show you something! Burning Slash!" Ifrit strikes Gaia and sends him into the wall.

Then Gaia paused and went to Ifrit and a flash of light happened.

Gaia knocked out Ifrit and Bushi grabs Ifrit as it was flying.

"What was that?" Bushi was confused about what happened.

"I think Gaia learned a new move, I'll call it Swing Counter." Gabe said.

"That's what I needed to hear." Said Bushi.

"What do you mean?"

"I'm going to leave the academy, but I wanted you to learn a new move, Gabe, you will be the new captain."

"I understand that you have to leave bushi, I'll see you around."

"See ya" Bushi leaves the academy.

After the school day, Bushi went to the roof to the stadium.

"So your Bushi Kurogane." It was one of the strongest bladers in the world, Lúi Shurosagi.

That's the end of chapter 1 everyone.

(Mar. 01, 2020  7:42 PM)BuilderROB Wrote:
(Mar. 01, 2020  7:39 PM)Staron Wrote: Chapter one is done

Finally decided to finish it

When are you going to post it?

Here. I guess he/she edited the preview post.