Beyblade: Generations (Story)

Poll: How's the Story so far?

Wow, it's too cool! I love it! Keep it up!
It's Good..needs some work, but overall it's nice
Not really my type
Total: 100% 5 vote(s)
*This is a fan-fiction beyblade story I made up whiling taking an algebra final. XD
Beyblade: Generations
A Brand New HMS Beyblade Story!
The story takes place 100 years after the events of Beyblade: G-Revolution
Need some characters for future chapters! PM me, if you wanna help out!
Chapter 0 - Prologue to Battle!
Chapter 1 - The Reminiscent Dream
Chapter 2 - Triple Trouble!
The second half of Chapter 0 has been added!
Hmm the script like dialogue is interesting...
Ok a few things.
1. Don't use text talk in a story please. It seems very unprofessional and looks kinda bad.
2. It seems like the humor is strained. Everyone getting po'd at the dj is just weird. Plus the math teacher bit was kinda rude...
3. The overall writing is quite good, just try not to force the humor, use full words, and you'll be good to go!
Overall- Good, just touch up on the things I said and you'll have a good story.
I'm not trying to be rude, because it is a good story.
It's a pretty good story do far! I really like it, keep up the good work!
shaun the Sheep - Thanks for your comment. The "text talk" has been heavily reduced while making CH.1 Smile

LMAO - Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. I hope you look forward to the next chapter Smile
The first half of Chapter 1 has been added!
The second half of Chapter 1 has been added! Chapter 1 is completed!
Chapter 2 will be released next week!