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Beyblade: Generations (Story) - TheSX - Feb. 28, 2013

*This is a fan-fiction beyblade story I made up whiling taking an algebra final. XD
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Beyblade: Generations
A Brand New HMS Beyblade Story!
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The story takes place 100 years after the events of Beyblade: G-Revolution
Need some characters for future chapters! PM me, if you wanna help out!
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Chapter 0 - Prologue to Battle!
Chapter 1 - The Reminiscent Dream
Chapter 2 - Triple Trouble!



RE: Beyblade: Generations (Story) - TheSX - Mar. 03, 2013

The second half of Chapter 0 has been added!


RE: Beyblade: Generations (Story) - Dual - Mar. 03, 2013

Hmm the script like dialogue is interesting...
Ok a few things.
1. Don't use text talk in a story please. It seems very unprofessional and looks kinda bad.
2. It seems like the humor is strained. Everyone getting po'd at the dj is just weird. Plus the math teacher bit was kinda rude...
3. The overall writing is quite good, just try not to force the humor, use full words, and you'll be good to go!
Overall- Good, just touch up on the things I said and you'll have a good story.
I'm not trying to be rude, because it is a good story.


RE: Beyblade: Generations (Story) - LMAO - Mar. 03, 2013

It's a pretty good story do far! I really like it, keep up the good work!


RE: Beyblade: Generations (Story) - TheSX - Mar. 08, 2013

shaun the Sheep - Thanks for your comment. The "text talk" has been heavily reduced while making CH.1 Smile

LMAO - Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. I hope you look forward to the next chapter Smile
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The first half of Chapter 1 has been added!


RE: Beyblade: Generations (Story) - TheSX - Mar. 10, 2013

The second half of Chapter 1 has been added! Chapter 1 is completed!
Chapter 2 will be released next week!