Beyblade: A hero's battle for humanity!!

Poll: Should I keep writing this story??

YES!!!
50.00%
2
NO!!
50.00%
2
Total: 100% 4 vote(s)
Prolouge

Chapter 1 "The salvation of the pentagon"
Chapter 2: A new mission
Reply if you liked it or not. If I messed up on something, tell me, don't hide it forever. Speak out.
Just a few spaces were there should be spaces and there arent but otherwise pretty good. How did you know my name was Alec?
Your name is Alec, I didn't even know (just kidding!!!! It was said on your thread on the "Introduce Yourself" forum).
Oh yah, that was so long ago i forgot Xd!
Hah, can't believe you actually forgot where you put personal information.
Hmmm, yoir dialogue is formattrd wrong.

Ex.

"I'm awesome," I say.
"Shut up Shirayuki!!!" you reply.
You slap me across the face.
Hmm...
Interesting plot, few grammatical mistakes, and it's all bunched up.
(Example: You put "safe" instead of "save" in the last line of the prolouge.)
Try to fix that.
Good luck. Smile
where?? I can't see where I messed up.
Second line in chapter 1
seriously, i cant find it
Dialogue needs its own seperate line!

Like I said, read my dialogue guide... I am on my phone and I dun want to dig into the chapter and fix the mistakes.
OK, I'll fix some stuff. Not everything though.