"3,2,1 go shoot" a group of children screamed. a boy,who's bey was crystal Draco 105 gf (grip flat) screamed "go Draco freezing blast" Draco goes around stadium very fast and with a big blast the stadium became iced and only Draco was spinning."hah! just like before!" all bladers went back with a sad face. "battle with me.." a dark figure came out of nowhere ".. Tyler!" "huh how do you know my name" Tyler said and fix his bey in his launcher."3,2,1 go shoot" TO BE CONTINUED.[/font]

This could be a good story, you know, if it was longer and more developed... Having a chapter this long shows that you didn't put any effort into this, and writing this length and calling it a chapter is an insult only to yourself. First things first, this is way too cliché, and second, it's way too short. This is pretty pathetic honestly, and I'm trying to be nice here.

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"In many ways, the work of a critic is easy. We risk very little, yet enjoy a position over those who offer up their work and their selves to our judgment. We thrive on negative criticism, which is fun to write and to read. But the bitter truth we critics must face, is that in the grand scheme of things, the average piece of junk is probably more meaningful than our criticism designating it so. But there are times when a critic truly risks something, and that is in the discovery and defense of the new. The world is often unkind to new talent, new creations. The new needs friends. Last night, I experienced something new: an extraordinary meal from a singularly unexpected source. To say that both the meal and its maker have challenged my preconceptions about fine cooking is a gross understatement. They have rocked me to my core. In the past, I have made no secret of my disdain for Chef Gusteau's famous motto, "Anyone can cook." But I realize, only now do I truly understand what he meant. Not everyone can become a great artist; but a great artist can come from anywhere."

-Anton Ego/Peter O'Toole (1932-2013)

"go aura hydra" the unknown figure screamed. the bey started to follow Tyler's bey. "GO Draco freezing.." he was about to use the special move but just then.."not so fast go hydra ultimate aura strike" suddenly the bey was covered with a purple shine. the bey stroked Tyler's bey and his bey went flying to the sky. "huh! only this much power you have got?" the figure came out of dark and said "but it will work for my bey Go hydra power absorbing bite" as Draco was about to fell hydra stroked Draco's tip with it's energy ring's rubber part absorbing all the spin and Draco fell on the ground.TO BE CONT.