fear it self part 1 [not a beyblade story but a reality story]

bruh this was cringe
Lol, realistic but poor grammar and spelling...
Plus we cant tell who is speaking...

But seems like a story that echoes what happens in school life. I like it
read the spoilers cos i dont even know why i made this O.o someone close it
It's good but you need to improve your grammar and creativity. If you send me this chapter and the next then I will improve the grammar for you.
as i said it was 5 am and no sleep.....Tired
If u need help pm me I have a bunch of great Ideas
...Okay, let me say this. If you do PM someone for ideas, PM a member you know can write, not some guy who CLAIMS to have ideas. Everyone THINKS their ideas are great, and yet we have a bunch of crappy stories with terrible pretenses and are based on a bad idea in general.
(Sep. 05, 2011  2:28 PM)Temporal Wrote: ...Okay, let me say this. If you do PM someone for ideas, PM a member you know can write, not some guy who CLAIMS to have ideas. Everyone THINKS their ideas are great, and yet we have a bunch of crappy stories with terrible pretenses and are based on a bad idea in general.

^^^^^THIS is the guy you should PM Wink

Couldn't agree more with your post, Temporal.
^^ Sorry to say, but I totally agree with those two.
They are like the masters of story writing (and criticism) on the WBO.