Writings and Drawings - New story added!

I'm not good at drawing much and my writing you can see for yourself if it's bad or not. Well here's one I did a few weeks ago though I don't have a name for it. Then again this poem or rather prophecy that I wrote goes along with a fanfiction that I'm trying to write as I procrastinate on it.

The Giants (Click to View)
So what dose everyone think and leave some critique if need be.
hmm, the poem/prophecy is ok, but if you want to go with this method I would use a more varied vocabulary, and use some more poetic techniques. Try and make it a bit deeper, because right now you're basically just writing out a story, in free verse anyway.
Ok I'll try, not sure if I can pull it off though.
it's all good =P you can take your time, and if it's for a manga it doesn't need too much depth. Probably just throw in a recurring metaphor or something.
you are really good i could never do that
It just takes so inspiration and some imagination really. But thank you.
Here's another poem I wrote some weeks ago. It's a poem describing Three Gods that I weaved into my imagination.

A huge giant covered in dancing sea of red flares
It’s two sets of eyes surveying the earth below
A beast of compelling power which all the other
Giants quake in fear of rejection.

Though it’s shape is like a concoction between
A dog, wolf, coyote and every canine known.
There are two others that are like he only instead
Of red one is a dancing sea of white and the other is
Dancing sea of black.

These giants rule all together in unison
All in a realm all to their own,
Each realm corresponded with their colors
But they all worked together
To protect.

The vigor these giants have are immeasurable
The growls alone send shivers down the spines
Of young and old gods,
The stares alone to stop one from breathing

These giants are the Flame Lords
Rulers of Flame Heavens, Heaven and Earth
The creators of the universe
The one’s who’s name and knowledge forever unknown
this is my drawing, I finished it just a couple of minutes ago.
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(Jun. 02, 2010  4:29 AM)Sin-hunter Wrote: I'm not good at drawing much and my writing you can see for yourself if it's bad or not. Well here's one I did a few weeks ago though I don't have a name for it. Then again this poem or rather prophecy that I wrote goes along with a fanfiction that I'm trying to write as I procrastinate on it.

The unignored sleeps
as the dragon awakes
time for the ignored
one to awake soon.

The white steed will
fight and lose against
the dragon. The dragon
will grow in power.

As time goes the dragon
will go on the rampage.
The white steed will fight
again and win to save another.

When the dragon is defeated
the unignored is awakened.
As the ignored is released
to do what is to be done.

The land rich in spirit
will be surrounded in darkness
as the curse of the ignored
sets in motion.

Thus the unignored must
sacrifices precious things
to unset the motion
to prevent the curse of the ignored.

Thus both light and Dark
return back to their beginnings
and start their new lives
all over again without fail.

So what dose everyone think and leave some critique if need be.

if its ur 1st then its agood stuarting
(Feb. 24, 2011  1:12 PM)eddic Wrote: this is my drawing, I finished it just a couple of minutes ago.
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I don't appropriate having your drawing in my thread. If you wanted me to see your drawing could make your own thread and send a pm to me to look at it not advertise it on this thread which I made only for my writings and drawings. But anyways it's drawn pretty good.

(Feb. 24, 2011  1:31 PM)prakhar1004 Wrote: if its ur 1st then its agood stuarting

This isn't my first poem I have quite of other poems as well but they aren't published onto the net cause I don't see them all that worthy to be seen. But thank you.
After two months of writing this short story of mine that I slaved away at I finally finished it. Though I haven't finished the revision as of yet I thought I should share this story of mine. Before I start, this is an Metal fight beyblade fan fiction in a Alternate Universe staring my Oc Natsuki Miyu and Ootori Tsubasa. The setting is the Edo period of Japan. The idea was inspired by Rurouni Kenshin and Hakuoki Shisengumi Kitan. It's rather long so I made it in to two parts. Without further notice lets get the story on the road.

The Bonds Made



*1863
**Heavenly Justice
Bakumatsu - It's known as the final years of Edo period when the Tokugawa Shogunate came to a end. Literally translated "end of the curtain".
Ishin Shishi - men of high purpose and group who are anti Shougunate
Bakufu – literally means house of the general and is it’s English term is Shoguate. Sort of like a private government.
Saya - Scabbard
Juban – the underwear of the Kimono and usually white.
Wakizashi – a smaller version of a katana sizes between 12-24 inches.
Kodachi –Literally translated small or short sword. It’s similar to a wakizashi, but with key differences. It’s about 23 inches.