Great story, like all the others I have read by you. I like how you describe the surroundings as well (that is something that many stories here fail to do well). I feel proud to have made you that sig, and if you ever want a knew one come back. Sad to see you may now write any new stories, they are all fantastic...

Haha, ok thank you .

dude i m sad because it's ur last but i like this story and loved ur stories too hope u change ur mind soon

Yeah, sorry about that guys. It's not like I'm going to stop updating my current stories on here, but I need a break for a while to rest and take it easy-and that means no new stories for at least a year or so . I apologize if I'm letting you all down...

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"Life isn't about how hard you can hit;
it's about how hard you can get hit, and keep moving forward"
{[YT]} [|BEYBLOG|] (â—ŠSoG-My Bookâ—Š)/<DA>\

nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
a whole year before you write another story

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thank you otthelog for sig and ga hoo leone and quetz and king cephues for my sigs i will alteratte them every week

pokemon trainer card

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I posted some of the next chapter to hold you guys off for now. Read and review, if it pleases you.

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"Life isn't about how hard you can hit;
it's about how hard you can get hit, and keep moving forward"
{[YT]} [|BEYBLOG|] (â—ŠSoG-My Bookâ—Š)/<DA>\

good chapter but you might what to describe the new chacter that has appeaared. like what he looks like and the same for the 2 chacter in chapter 1

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thank you otthelog for sig and ga hoo leone and quetz and king cephues for my sigs i will alteratte them every week

pokemon trainer card

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Ok, finished the first chapter. Critique tastes good, and I'm really hungry, so please review!

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"Life isn't about how hard you can hit;
it's about how hard you can get hit, and keep moving forward"
{[YT]} [|BEYBLOG|] (â—ŠSoG-My Bookâ—Š)/<DA>\

Okay. I have a lot of things to say:
1. Thank you for all your great stories on the WBO. I think you've honored every reader on this site. It is a pleasure reading your stories. Thanks a lot.
2. I love how you describe. It's so vivid. Almost perfect word choice. You have the force, my son.
3. Writing from a point of view you've never done before. It's...... well...... good
4. I'm not happy or sad. Well I'm both. Disappointing that you're leaving but great you are going off to a better place. Good luck in the real world as a professional. You'll go far.

EDIT: Read my BeyStory. I need tips on description

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Thanks to Synth for the sig and the avatar
PM me for Mario Kart Wii, Brawl or Pokemon. My Pokemon FC is 2365 6466 0001
Before you read a story, go to Renagade Reviews. If you have a story, then ask us for a review: http://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-Renegade...#pid729778

“I thought the devil was a goat-man with a curly beard and horns. I was wrong. Now I know the devil has no face… Literally.”
Read my new story Faceless. It's promised to be bigger and better than my last one.
http://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-Faceless...pid1080518

Okay. I have a lot of things to say:
1. Thank you for all your great stories on the WBO. I think you've honored every reader on this site. It is a pleasure reading your stories. Thanks a lot.
2. I love how you describe. It's so vivid. Almost perfect word choice. You have the force, my son.
3. Writing from a point of view you've never done before. It's...... well...... good
4. I'm not happy or sad. Well I'm both. Disappointing that you're leaving but great you are going off to a better place. Good luck in the real world as a professional. You'll go far.

EDIT: Read my BeyStory. I need tips on description

Haha, ok. I'll check it out, and thanks for the advice.

Any errors? Something I should fix?

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"Life isn't about how hard you can hit;
it's about how hard you can get hit, and keep moving forward"
{[YT]} [|BEYBLOG|] (â—ŠSoG-My Bookâ—Š)/<DA>\

There were my edits!..... Er, yeah. The only one you used was the tuna-smelling one.

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"In many ways, the work of a critic is easy. We risk very little, yet enjoy a position over those who offer up their work and their selves to our judgment. We thrive on negative criticism, which is fun to write and to read. But the bitter truth we critics must face, is that in the grand scheme of things, the average piece of junk is probably more meaningful than our criticism designating it so. But there are times when a critic truly risks something, and that is in the discovery and defense of the new. The world is often unkind to new talent, new creations. The new needs friends. Last night, I experienced something new: an extraordinary meal from a singularly unexpected source. To say that both the meal and its maker have challenged my preconceptions about fine cooking is a gross understatement. They have rocked me to my core. In the past, I have made no secret of my disdain for Chef Gusteau's famous motto, "Anyone can cook." But I realize, only now do I truly understand what he meant. Not everyone can become a great artist; but a great artist can come from anywhere."

-Anton Ego/Peter O'Toole (1932-2013)

again like i said before describe what they look like but other then that its amazing

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thank you otthelog for sig and ga hoo leone and quetz and king cephues for my sigs i will alteratte them every week

pokemon trainer card

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There were my edits!..... Er, yeah. The only one you used was the tuna-smelling one.

And the line spacing. I stopped being lazy hooray for actually getting off my lazy bum and doing something with my life!

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"Life isn't about how hard you can hit;
it's about how hard you can get hit, and keep moving forward"
{[YT]} [|BEYBLOG|] (â—ŠSoG-My Bookâ—Š)/<DA>\

School ends tuesday (as in a week from today) and homework has calmed down, so once I finish my next few finals (I.E. Honors English 1, Honors World History, and Geometry) I can update. Hooray!

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"Life isn't about how hard you can hit;
it's about how hard you can get hit, and keep moving forward"
{[YT]} [|BEYBLOG|] (â—ŠSoG-My Bookâ—Š)/<DA>\

Okay. I have a lot of things to say:
1. Thank you for all your great stories on the WBO. I think you've honored every reader on this site. It is a pleasure reading your stories. Thanks a lot.
2. I love how you describe. It's so vivid. Almost perfect word choice. You have the force, my son.
3. Writing from a point of view you've never done before. It's...... well...... good
4. I'm not happy or sad. Well I'm both. Disappointing that you're leaving but great you are going off to a better place. Good luck in the real world as a professional. You'll go far.

EDIT: Read my BeyStory. I need tips on description

Haha, ok. I'll check it out, and thanks for the advice.

Any errors? Something I should fix?

ga'hooleone took all mine. XD but i think you need to add a few short scentences for effect

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Thanks to Synth for the sig and the avatar
PM me for Mario Kart Wii, Brawl or Pokemon. My Pokemon FC is 2365 6466 0001
Before you read a story, go to Renagade Reviews. If you have a story, then ask us for a review: http://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-Renegade...#pid729778

“I thought the devil was a goat-man with a curly beard and horns. I was wrong. Now I know the devil has no face… Literally.”
Read my new story Faceless. It's promised to be bigger and better than my last one.
http://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-Faceless...pid1080518

Okay. I have a lot of things to say:
1. Thank you for all your great stories on the WBO. I think you've honored every reader on this site. It is a pleasure reading your stories. Thanks a lot.
2. I love how you describe. It's so vivid. Almost perfect word choice. You have the force, my son.
3. Writing from a point of view you've never done before. It's...... well...... good
4. I'm not happy or sad. Well I'm both. Disappointing that you're leaving but great you are going off to a better place. Good luck in the real world as a professional. You'll go far.

EDIT: Read my BeyStory. I need tips on description

Haha, ok. I'll check it out, and thanks for the advice.

Any errors? Something I should fix?

ga'hooleone took all mine. XD but i think you need to add a few short scentences* for effect

*Sentences

But yeah, ok. I see where you're coming from. I'll do that.

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"Life isn't about how hard you can hit;
it's about how hard you can get hit, and keep moving forward"
{[YT]} [|BEYBLOG|] (â—ŠSoG-My Bookâ—Š)/<DA>\

Today is officially the first day of summer for me, and because of that I'm in a great mood! To kick my summer off write (get it?) I'm going to write the next chapter today!

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"Life isn't about how hard you can hit;
it's about how hard you can get hit, and keep moving forward"
{[YT]} [|BEYBLOG|] (â—ŠSoG-My Bookâ—Š)/<DA>\

Hooray! I can't wait. I really liked the first chapter and I do hope Tsubasa finds his best friend.

Um just a question... Will Tsubasa take part in Beybattles with Earth Aquila or will it only be Tsubasa doing
agent activities??

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Dancing Rayquaza...will never get old :3

Today is officially the first day of summer for me, and because of that I'm in a great mood! To kick my summer off write (get it?) I'm going to write the next chapter today!

lucky you. up here summer is ages away

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Thanks to Synth for the sig and the avatar
PM me for Mario Kart Wii, Brawl or Pokemon. My Pokemon FC is 2365 6466 0001
Before you read a story, go to Renagade Reviews. If you have a story, then ask us for a review: http://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-Renegade...#pid729778

“I thought the devil was a goat-man with a curly beard and horns. I was wrong. Now I know the devil has no face… Literally.”
Read my new story Faceless. It's promised to be bigger and better than my last one.
http://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-Faceless...pid1080518

Hooray! I can't wait. I really liked the first chapter and I do hope Tsubasa finds his best friend.

.....I don't mean to burst your bubble, but Aquilla is dead....

Um just a question... Will Tsubasa take part in Beybattles with Earth Aquila or will it only be Tsubasa doing
agent activities??

Both, at the same time. His missions will involve beybattles

Today is officially the first day of summer for me, and because of that I'm in a great mood! To kick my summer off write (get it?) I'm going to write the next chapter today!

lucky you. up here summer is ages away

are you in canada, with year round school or something?

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"Life isn't about how hard you can hit;
it's about how hard you can get hit, and keep moving forward"
{[YT]} [|BEYBLOG|] (â—ŠSoG-My Bookâ—Š)/<DA>\

-Looks at first part of comment-

WHAT?!RXDCFTGVBHJNKLM

Guess that helps create his personality during MFB season 1, and those flashbacks during season 2, huh?

Oh boy, Sin-hunter (insert facebook-style tags here) will be crying in her room somewhere...

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"In many ways, the work of a critic is easy. We risk very little, yet enjoy a position over those who offer up their work and their selves to our judgment. We thrive on negative criticism, which is fun to write and to read. But the bitter truth we critics must face, is that in the grand scheme of things, the average piece of junk is probably more meaningful than our criticism designating it so. But there are times when a critic truly risks something, and that is in the discovery and defense of the new. The world is often unkind to new talent, new creations. The new needs friends. Last night, I experienced something new: an extraordinary meal from a singularly unexpected source. To say that both the meal and its maker have challenged my preconceptions about fine cooking is a gross understatement. They have rocked me to my core. In the past, I have made no secret of my disdain for Chef Gusteau's famous motto, "Anyone can cook." But I realize, only now do I truly understand what he meant. Not everyone can become a great artist; but a great artist can come from anywhere."

-Anton Ego/Peter O'Toole (1932-2013)

-Looks at first part of comment-

WHAT?!RXDCFTGVBHJNKLM

Guess that helps create his personality during MFB season 1, and those flashbacks during season 2, huh?

Oh boy, Sin-hunter (insert facebook-style tags here) will be crying in his room somewhere...

You mean her room ^^"

.....I don't mean to burst your bubble, but Aquilla is dead....

Awwww, poor Aquilla. Tsubasa is alone now with no best friend. I wonder what happened now I really can't wait for the next chapter.

2nd chapter is up!

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"Life isn't about how hard you can hit;
it's about how hard you can get hit, and keep moving forward"
{[YT]} [|BEYBLOG|] (â—ŠSoG-My Bookâ—Š)/<DA>\

-Looks at first part of comment-

WHAT?!RXDCFTGVBHJNKLM

Guess that helps create his personality during MFB season 1, and those flashbacks during season 2, huh?

Oh boy, Sin-hunter (insert facebook-style tags here) will be crying in his room somewhere...

You mean her room ^^"

.....I don't mean to burst your bubble, but Aquilla is dead....

Awwww, poor Aquilla. Tsubasa is alone now with no best friend. I wonder what happened now I really can't wait for the next chapter.

Haha, sorry. There is good news, but it comes in file 3. For now, you'll just have to mourn...

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"Life isn't about how hard you can hit;
it's about how hard you can get hit, and keep moving forward"
{[YT]} [|BEYBLOG|] (â—ŠSoG-My Bookâ—Š)/<DA>\

Erm, just one correction for the 2nd chapter...
All I noticed is that you wrote "nothing exited me"
while it should be "nothing excited me". Just a typo on your part I guess.

It's a brilliant story, it grabbed my attention straight away, 10/10. I can't wait for Part:3. Keep up the good work dude.

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Erm, just one correction for the 2nd chapter...
All I noticed is that you wrote "nothing exited me"
while it should be "nothing excited me". Just a typo on your part I guess.

Fixed that and a few other things.

It's a brilliant story, it grabbed my attention straight away, 10/10. I can't wait for Part:3. Keep up the good work dude.

Thank you . Any suggestions?

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"Life isn't about how hard you can hit;
it's about how hard you can get hit, and keep moving forward"
{[YT]} [|BEYBLOG|] (â—ŠSoG-My Bookâ—Š)/<DA>\