Thermal Lacerta Draft (NEAR PERFECT?)

hey Guys,
this is my Thermal Lacerta article draft and my second article =)
the first one, bun fireblaze, I ignored cause I was busy... ^^
anyways here it is:

Face: Lacerta
The face on this beyblade depicts Lacerta, one of the 88 constellation in space.

Clear Wheel: Lacerta
Weight: 2.8 grams
The color of this clear wheel is a bright pink translucent color. It has two lizard molds on each end of the wheel, representing a lizard. There are also two pink/blue clumps on each end, and when you observe it more closely, it spells out the word:
L-A-C-E-R-T-A

Metal Wheel: Thermal
Weight: 30.5 grams
The Thermal Metal Wheel consists of two large wings which are pointed at their respective beginnings and ends. Thermal is heavily based on the Metal System Pisces, and as such, the three notches on the Wheel are representative of a shark's gills. Although it has relatively sharp contact points, they do not protrude far out enough to provide any significant Smash Attack. The Wheel does however possess moderate Stamina capabilities due to its relatively round shape, although it is considered outclassed by Earth, Burn and Hell in conjunction with BD145.

Track: Wing Attacker 130
Weight: 2.2 grams
WA130 is a 130-height track with two aerofoil-shaped “wings” that rotate freely around the track. WA130 features a large two-winged structure which rotates freely around the Track. The purpose of these wings is to provide Smash Attack, but due to their free-spinning nature, this is nullified completely. The Track is also weak from a defensive point of view, as not only does its large wingspan mean that it is easily struck, its free-spinning properties mean that Stamina is significantly reduced when it comes into contact with other Beyblades, as the friction of the Track against its wings depletes the Beyblade's rotation. The direction of these wings can be swapped by removing the “wing” piece, flipping it over, and placing it back on the shaft of the track, which is part of the gimmick of the track, though the effect is negligible. This Track serves no competitive use.


Use in Attack Customization:

Although S130 is better, WA130 is a good substitute in the Attack custom MF Fang Leone WA130RF.

Bottom: Hole Flat
Weight: 0.5 grams
The HF flat and the Flat tips both have very close movement speed, but the difference is that the HF tip has a hole in the middle or base of the tip which then would increase the tip stamina by a bit. However, this would make it have less grip to the stadium floor than F and would increase fragility.

Overall:
Thermal Lacerta is a Beyblade that comes with outclassed parts. The only part that is worth buying this beyblade for is its track, WA130, which can be used as a substitue of S130 in some Attack customs. However, 130 just as good comes with a better Beyblade, so there is really no reason to purchase this beyblade, aside from collection purposes.

LET THE SECOND BATCH OF CRITICISMS BEGIN =D
First things first, use the TT names. Energy ring, Fusion wheel, Spin track, those shouldn't be in here. There are multiple grammatical errors too, and this should be a more formal article in terms of writing style (and if you inspect it closely, etc.). It's okay for a newbie writer though. I will edit this post later with a full revision of your article.
okay I fixed the hasbro names to TT names
I will do my best to fix the way to say it up!
(Jun. 05, 2011  7:05 PM)SlayerlvX Wrote: Face: Lacerta
The Face on this Beyblade depicts Lacerta, one of the 88 constellations in space.

Clear Wheel: Lacerta
Weight: 2.8 grams
The color of this Clear Wheel is a bright pink translucent color. It resembles a lizard, the lizard molds, and also has two blue/pink clumps on each end of the Clear Wheel, also when inspected closely, it spells out the word:
L - A -C -E - R - T - A

Metal Wheel: Thermal
Weight: 30.5 grams
The Thermal Metal Wheel consists of two large wings with one small gap in between each one. On each wing has three notches which represents a shark's fins, and eventually leading toward to a slope which then leads to a thicker center. The Thermal Wheel may look like it has some attack potential, but doesn't have any at all. This wheel though does possess some moderate stamina capabilities, but has been outclassed by Earth and Burn.

Track: Wide Attacker 130
Weight: 2.2 grams
The WA130 track is a one of a kind track and can only be found on Thermal Lacerta, aside from Burn Serpent from Random Booster Vol. 5. This track is free-spinning and the wings can be flipped so that it faces either clockwise or counter-clockwise directions. It also possess very minimal Defense capabilities and can lose Stamina when the opposing Beyblade hits the track, causing the track not to make a full rotation, slowing down the Beyblade quite a bit. However, its height is useful for some wheels for Attack like Fang.

Use in Attack Customization

Although S130 is better, WA130 is a good substitute in the Attack custom MF Fang Leone WA130RF.

Bottom: Hole Flat
Weight: 0.5 grams
The HF flat and the Flat tips both have very close movement speed, but the difference is that the HF tip has a hole in the middle or base of the tip which then would increase the tip stamina by a bit. However, this would make it have less grip to the stadium floor than F and would increase fragility. Both have been outclassed by other Bottoms like WF, XF, RF, R²F, LRF and MF.

Overall:
Thermal Lacerta is a Beyblade that comes with outclassed. The only part that is worth buying this beyblade for is its track, WA130, which can be used as a substitue of S130 in some Attack customs. However, 130 just as good and comes with a better Beyblade, so there is really no reason to purchase this beyblade, aside from collection purposes.

I just cleaned it up a bit, but I'm not the best article writer.
BTW, the notches represent a shark's gills, and delete that first sentence of the WA130 section.
W105 doesn't relate to WA130. And can't make spin in another direction, you can only chace the points where it is heading at. Uncertain
Oh okay, so you want me to change it so WA130 is not related to W105 and that that no matter which way you flip the wings, it will still spin in the same direction?
Wait,ain't WA130 is actually Wing Attacker?
Yeah I am still unsure so that Is why I put the er in (). Need to be more sure before actually putting it in the draft
Try reading the Thermal Lacerta topic or even looking on Beywiki ... You should not even be asking this.
You totally did not look on the Beyblade Parts List on Beywiki ...
In the conclusion, you should say that 130 is just as useful as WA130, and comes with a more useful beyblade.
Kai-V
okay changed it to Wing Attacker 130
rock L-Drago
Okay changed it!!!
I improved it a bit towards the top of the page.
okay, I took some of your pieces from your article Mr.N and put it into the draft above, thanks =)
Okay, I seriously just found out that my Burn Fireblaze article had way more criticsm than this thermal lacerta article in even more shorter amount of time...? What's up with that? Is this article not important at all?!
Well,I have nothing to criticize.Pretty good.However,WA130 part is a bit bad.Maybe you could mention which combo WA130 is good with
okay, I already put the WA130 is a good alternative to S130, so yeah =)
and I will fixing it as good as possible
Okay so I am assuming that if there are no more criticsm, the title will be
"Thermal Lacerta Draft NEAR PERFECT"
???
unless everyone is jus busy and think this is unimportant...
okay, since there isn't more criticism, I am assuming this is PERFECT!?
since there ain't more criticism for the last past few days, I would like a admin of WBO to check this article out and see if anything needs to be changed before being on WBO