The world end with you(beyblade version)Chapter 7 coming soon so stay tune

Poll: How good was my story

Awsome
46.15%
6
Really good I love it
7.69%
1
GOod but could use a litle bit of work
30.77%
4
My eyes are bleeding!!!!
15.38%
2
Total: 100% 13 vote(s)
Note*This is my first story so please be honest on what i have to work on and I will be doing stories on weekends so here we go
I am taking character request but in order to get in the story if have to be good but yiur character maybdie depending on the outcomedepending on the out come
Character format
Name:
BeybladeUnhappysome parts have to be real and if there not give a description)
Personality:
looks
Psych(special move up to 3)
Entry fee precious thing character gave up to be in the reaper game)

Proulouge

Chapter 1:Beginning of the end!? part 1
Chapter:2 The beginning of the end!? part 2
Chapter 3:Chris vs Clay!! Rage of the eclipse
Chapter 4:Attack of the heart
Chapter 5Grinance of the moonlight
Chapter 6Grinrake final fight!?The bull lives on(Drake point of view)




















Cool story!you spelled which wrong,and there is no poll to vote!this story sounds like the hunger games!
Thanks I edited my story
Beyblade version of the Reaper's game Tongue_out

Some 'i's are un-capitilized. Also, put spaces after your punctuation.
(Aug. 29, 2012  5:36 AM)Insomniac Wrote:
Beyblade version of the Reaper's game Tongue_out

Some 'i's are un-capitilized. Also, put spaces after your punctuation.
Thanks also I know a character that probably fit right in there

I am taking character request on the third chapter to a certain point.
Nice story. Keep making chapters
Name: Drake Utori
Bey: Grand Bull AD145EWD
Personality: Discreet, Sneaky, Dark, Agressive
Appearance: Blue Eyes, Gray/Silver Hair, 5"6'-8', Male
Special Move: Grand Raging Stampede: Summons a large amount of bulls that charge at such opponent. (Like "Running of the Bulls")
Entry Fee: Deceased Mothers' Ring (Last possesion of hers)

Hope thats a good character...
I also have a character request.
Name: Clay Milton
Beyblade: Stone Eclipse 145EWD (both left and right spin. Happy=Right and Mad=Left)
Personality: He acts tough, but really he has a heart of gold and is determind to help his friends in need.
Looks: Tall, Brown long hair, Brown eye with a big scar going throught the left one, a black muscle shirt with white pants. He wears brown chucks (Converse) and s kinda big.
Special move: Total Eclipse- Like Star Bringer, but instead of the air flowing up, it forces the air down, crushing the opponent.
Stone Hedge- It bounces off both sides of the stadium, while crashing into it's opponent's bey
Lunar Rock Dance- Circles around it's opponent's bey with super speed and quickly runs into the opponent's be ith no mercy.
Entry fee: His little sister's charm bracelet before she died of young age.Crying

So how's that?
Good character I try to put masterblader-X character and Torontosbest vharacter either in the third or 4th chapter
Thanks and I really can't wait for the next chapter. This story have really caught my eyeStupid
nice story really liked the start
nice story really liked the start
Chapter 2 is up
Awe my character is in the story nowX Stupid
Third chapter up
I try to do chapter 2 chapters a day so i try to do chapter 4 later on
Thanks man :'D Great story too! Its based of the video game, right?

And if you havent begun the chapter with my character, can he be villanous at first, THEN join Chris and Clays alliance?
(Aug. 29, 2012  6:24 PM)TorontosBest Wrote: Thanks man :'D Great story too! Its based of the video game, right?

And if you havent begun the chapter with my character, can he be villanous at first, THEN join Chris and Clays alliance?
You'll see

I need character to join chris and the resistance
What the Heck, time for a Bad Guy
Name: Grim
Beyblade: Corrupted Silence E230MB (Left Spin)
Personality: "I am cold-hearted, ready to kill anyone in my way."
Looks: Green Eyes, Black Hair, sharp teeth, a long trenchcoat that covers his whole body, black industrial boots, a chainsaw on his back, and when he is on disguise, he puts on a gas mask that covers his whole face and disguises his voice.
Special Move:
Normal Dark Move- Vengence of the Lost: He tortures his opponent by putting up visions of decesed family memebers, driving his opponent insane, until he snaps, then the opponents bey snaps in half, ending the battle.
Ultra Dark Move- Song of the Reaper: A shrill song plays in the ear of his opponent, then slowly, the Reaper appears, first smashing the Bey into a million pieces, then taking the opponent by the neck, and stabs him/her with the Reaper's Scythe.
Entry Fee: His murdered family's picture
(Aug. 29, 2012  7:00 PM)Shi Wrote: What the Heck, time for a Bad Guy
Name: Grim
Beyblade: Corrupted Silence E230MB (Left Spin)
Personality: "I am cold-hearted, ready to kill anyone in my way."
Looks: Green Eyes, Black Hair, sharp teeth, a long trenchcoat that covers his whole body, black industrial boots, a chainsaw on his back, and when he is on disguise, he puts on a gas mask that covers his whole face and disguises his voice.
Special Move:
Normal Dark Move- Vengence of the Lost: He tortures his opponent by putting up visions of decesed family memebers, driving his opponent insane, until he snaps, then the opponents bey snaps in half, ending the battle.
Ultra Dark Move- Song of the Reaper: A shrill song plays in the ear of his opponent, then slowly, the Reaper appears, first smashing the Bey into a million pieces, then taking the opponent by the neck, and stabs him/her with the Reaper's Scythe.
Entry Fee: His murdered family's picture
Finally i have an evil chracter for the Reapers
Hey, you need a character to join with chris and the resistance?

There she is:

Name: Virgínia de Souza
Beyblade: Grand Gil T145SW
Personality: She is very quiet, but fierce in a battle. Is very addict to coffee. Likes to draw people in her notes. She is a adopted daughter of a arts teacher.
Looks: She have chesnut long hair with two braids in the head and have black eyes. She is very short than other bladers. Her outfit is composed in a green dress with red ties. In her shoes she uses a pair of black and blue sneakers.
Special move: Earth diving: Gill dives under the ground and counters the opponent bey
Entry fee: A paintbrush of her art teacher.

Keep going with your story.
Another Bad/Good Guy

Name: Jeff

Bey: Faded Devil 90SF

Personality: silent, multi-personalities. (sometimes believes was a surviving victim of the noise and that the blood on his shirt is his, sometimes a reaper. Joins Chris and brother in the victim
stage.)

Description: Blonde, tuxedo with jeans, shiny blue shoes. Blood stains on shoes and handkerchief and shirt. Stitching where mouth should be.

Special Move (Good): Crushing Truth: 2 Red halos squish the opponent's bey.

Bloody End (Bad): The devils tale drags the opponent and opponent's bey underground into lava.



This story is good how about whenever someone loses they get eliminated from earth and know one knows where they go so basically last man standing
(Aug. 29, 2012  7:40 PM)emman798 Wrote: This story is good how about whenever someone loses they get eliminated from earth and know one knows where they go so basically last man standing
There basicly all dead have you played The World End With You that were the story originated from


Chapter 4 up also the story will be slightly grim
I lost Unhappy lol