The Last King- A beyblade story (Accepting character requests.)

Hey! This is my first beyblade story. I accept character requests, and I will try to add every character in as much as I can. I will also try to upload a new chapter every 1-3 days or less because I don't like anyone who likes this story to have to wait soooooo long for newer results. You can also expect each chapter to be fairly long so it is worth the wait( Because most other stories make it a paragraph per story. Pf lazy writers. ) This is a MFB beyblade story, so no Zero-G beyblades. This story takes place inbetween the events of Metal Fury and Zero-G, but before Zero-g battles or zero-g beyblades were invented.


HEY GUYS I'M BACK! I apologize for the very long wait, but wait no longer, the awesome Leone guy is back to kick some bey-butt and you can surely expect more writing from me baby! Beleive it or not, the story is actually already finished with a kicker cliffhanger, but dont fret, I will start book 2 instantly!
Chapter 1:
Chapter 2( Warning fairly short.):
Chapter 3 :
Chapter 4 :
Chapter 5(Warning fairly short):
Chapter 6(Short cliff-hanger)
PS: The timing for me to start righting a new chapter will probably depend on how long it takes me to edit grammar mistakes. I'm young so grammar is not always my best ability. I will still attempt to make new chapters in 1 day- 3 days if not less (And sometimes I will do less.)
There are grammar mistakes, but its pretty good!
I like it. Has grammar mistakes. I look forward to reading the story. Grin

EDIT: Beat!
Ty for your replies. I am sorry about my grammar mistakes, I will try to go back and fix as much as possible in my spare time.

I was so pumped to make this story. I will go ahead and work on Chapter 2 now, so we can at least get the plot of the story out of the way.
I would like to make a Character Request:
Name: Emma Rozoni (Is it okay if I could make a girl Pegasis_Wink)
Beyblade: Flash Blaze TR145RDF
Age: 12
Gender: Girl
Special Moves: Burning Blaze Assault, 5 Flames of Fury, Sol Emerald Blast
Biography: Orphan girl. Seeking for a family. Otherwise she is a happy energetic girl who controls fire.
Bey Description:
Face: Depicts of the Sun.[Real Face]
Clear Wheel: From Sol Blaze but color is Purple
Metal Wheel: Burn- Color is Red with White stripes
Spin Track: White with Red wheels.
Performance Tip: Color is purple.
When Emma gets mad her bey catches fire and her hair, clothes, and eyes turn into fire.

(Aug. 07, 2013  1:47 AM)Sorablader Wrote: I would like to make a Character Request:
Name: Emma Rozoni (Is it okay if I could make a girl Pegasis_Wink)
Beyblade: Flash Blaze TR145RDF
Age: 12
Gender: Girl
Special Moves: Burning Blaze Assault, 5 Flames of Fury, Sol Emerald Blast
Biography: Orphan girl. Seeking for a family. Otherwise she is a happy energetic girl who controls fire.
Bey Description:
Face: Depicts of the Sun.[Real Face]
Clear Wheel: From Sol Blaze but color is Purple
Metal Wheel: Burn- Color is Red with White stripes
Spin Track: White with Red wheels.
Performance Tip: Color is purple.
When Emma gets mad her bey catches fire and her hair, clothes, and eyes turn into fire.
I will attempt to add your beyblade character to the story. Sorry I took so long, was making chapter 2. And yes, it can be girl or a boy I don't care as long as your beyblade request makes sense and it does so I don't mind. I might be able to make a chapter with her today. But can you describe the special moves more? And what type is her beyblade, attack, defence, stamina, or ballence?

chapter 2 is up

(Aug. 07, 2013  2:33 AM)Themeeny7 Wrote:
(Aug. 07, 2013  1:47 AM)Sorablader Wrote: I would like to make a Character Request:
Name: Emma Rozoni (Is it okay if I could make a girl Pegasis_Wink)
Beyblade: Flash Blaze TR145RDF
Age: 12
Gender: Girl
Special Moves: Burning Blaze Assault, 5 Flames of Fury, Sol Emerald Blast
Biography: Orphan girl. Seeking for a family. Otherwise she is a happy energetic girl who controls fire.
Bey Description:
Face: Depicts of the Sun.[Real Face]
Clear Wheel: From Sol Blaze but color is Purple
Metal Wheel: Burn- Color is Red with White stripes
Spin Track: White with Red wheels.
Performance Tip: Color is purple.
When Emma gets mad her bey catches fire and her hair, clothes, and eyes turn into fire.
I will attempt to add your beyblade character to the story. Sorry I took so long, was making chapter 2. And yes, it can be girl or a boy I don't care as long as your beyblade request makes sense and it does so I don't mind. I might be able to make a chapter with her today. But can you describe the special moves more? And what type is her beyblade, attack, defence, stamina, or ballence? Add those changes and then I will include her into chapter 3, and maybe have a battle.

chapter 2 is up
Balance
Burning Blaze Assault-Sends down Meteors from the air
5 Flames of Fury-Hits the bey five times in a row. On final strike Blaze hits with flaming matal Wheel.
Sol Emerald Blast-Hits with the power of the Sol Emeralds and blasts the bey out the stadium.
(Aug. 07, 2013  2:57 AM)Sorablader Wrote: Balance
Burning Blaze Assault-Sends down Meteors from the air
5 Flames of Fury-Hits the bey five times in a row. On final strike Blaze hits with flaming matal Wheel.
Sol Emerald Blast-Hits with the power of the Sol Emeralds and blasts the bey out the stadium.

Alright thank you. I am writing chapter 3 as we speak. I will split it into two parts so you can see your character inrtoduced, however. Is it okay if I make her a blader and a mechanic at the same time?
As long she keeps her flame temper. lol Grin
(Aug. 07, 2013  3:20 AM)Sorablader Wrote: As long she keeps her flame temper. lol Grin

Oops Tongue_out Read chapter 3, she actually used it lol Tongue_out
Edit: I thought you said keeps her flame temper in controll :l Sorry about that rofl Tongue_out
I hope she uses it alot. I like flames. Grin By the way she has a short temper.
(Aug. 07, 2013  3:29 AM)Sorablader Wrote: I hope she uses it alot. I like flames. Grin By the way she has a short temper.

Ah okay thanks for telling me that Tongue_out I will try to make her use it as much as possible without it being too overused.
Probably in a beybattle.
(Aug. 07, 2013  3:35 AM)Sorablader Wrote: Probably in a beybattle.

Yeah. My character is sort of annoying at times though so probobally at him too xD
i would like to add a character but don't rush to put him in if you don't want to
name:Kobe K. Ulinzi
beyblade: if zero-g is allowed, samurai genbull bd145r2f/if not basalt "xuan wu"(dark green orso) bd145r2f
age:15
gender:male
special move: turtle distortion, zero ver.: bey speeds up and circles around the edge causing gravity to to distort and makes all light beys lose traction to be hit later. normal ver.: instead of just going in coircles it ticks in the middle of the stadium.
bio:a pretty normal guy who smiles and taunts most of the time but knows when to retreat inside his shell.
face: genbull
normal bey
clear wheel:N/A or dark green
fusion wheel: nothing special
track and bottom: black and dark green
zero g
chrome wheel:green camo hexagon stickers
crystal wheel: dark green
track and bottom:same as above
(Aug. 07, 2013  3:43 AM)Ifrit Wrote: i would like to add a character but don't rush to put him in if you don't want to
name:Kobe K. Ulinzi
beyblade: if zero-g is allowed, samurai genbull bd145r2f/if not basalt "xuan wu"(dark green orso) bd145r2f
age:15
gender:male
special move: turtle distortion, zero ver.: bey speeds up and circles around the edge causing gravity to to distort and makes all light beys lose traction to be hit later. normal ver.: instead of just going in coircles it ticks in the middle of the stadium.
bio:a pretty normal guy who smiles and taunts most of the time but knows when to retreat inside his shell.
face: genbull
normal bey
clear wheel:N/A or dark green
fusion wheel: nothing special
track and bottom: black and dark green
zero g
chrome wheel:green camo hexagon stickers
crystal wheel: dark green
track and bottom:same as above
Sure I can put him in. I dont understand the shell thing though. Is he a teenage mutant ninja turtle or something ? xD I am still going to start writing chapter 4 so I can easily put him in as one of the members of Team Flame Universe. Also, can I shorten it's energy ring name to xuan?

Chapter 3 is done
yes you can shorten it to xuan. and the shell is supposed to represent introvertedness(if you know what i mean)
i was impossing that he is bi polar since he uses an attack defense mix beyblade
(Aug. 07, 2013  3:59 AM)Ifrit Wrote: i was impossing that he is bi polar since he uses an attack defense mix beyblade

That's called anti attack, and having a anti attack beyblade doesn't make you bipolar :l I don't really want to add any disorders or diseases into the story either because it may offend readers with that disorder/disease.
dude if i can deal with it they can deal with it but i respect your decision
but offense and defense are supposes to be [b]polar[b] opposites and i know it is called anti attack but i was trying to make the point that they are on opposite spectrems in pop culture
Edit: I am dropping this subject. I am also declining your character request due to the posts you have sent, only because I don't want to include negative things like such :I
bipolar is defined by bursts of hysteria followed by dips of depression(but sometimes this causes anger, i would know) throughout the day and it isn't so much his type but i wanted him to have a duality/nature/balance theme in general because some turtles act aggressively but are still defensive.
but i agree this is going to go on for a while so lets just stop here ok but just know i understand where you are coming from and respect your views
Alright ty. You can make a new character request, just nothing related to disorders and no Zero-g if you read the story :l

Hey guys, I'm going to finish typing chapter 4 and then I'm going to call it quits :l It's late and I'm sort of tired at the moment- sorry.
I included two versions one for zero-g and one for normal,
instead of giving him bi polar give him
a personality of mania, really upbeat and intense and pretty irratible
fixed Grin
Alright ty. Can you edit your request and take away the Zero-g part though? it makes it harder for me to find what I need to include for the story when you do it that way :l
EDIT:
name:Kobe K. Ulinzi
beyblade: basalt "xuan wu"(dark green orso) bd145r2f
age:15
gender:male
special move: turtle distortion,normal ver.: instead of just going in circles it ticks in the middle of the stadium.
bio:a pretty energetic guy who smiles and taunts most of the time but can get iritated quickly
face: genbull
normal bey
clear wheel:N/A or dark green
fusion wheel: nothing special
track and bottom: black and dark green