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Student Short Film - Deceitful Bliss

Apr. 29, 2017  12:01 AM
 
A man suffering with withdrawal syndrome struggles to overcome his inner demons when faced against the physical manifestation of temptation.

I shot, wrote, edited, and directed this piece so all feedback is greatly appreciated! Smile 

Apr. 29, 2017  12:12 AM
 
I definitely appreciated that short film. I found that there were some good decisions taken. The only clear thing I would have changed is when Titu(?) saw flashes and then withdrew his hand from the apple. Perhaps the camera could have shaken or light could have been used to accentuate the gesture, because it seemed somewhat banal.
Apr. 29, 2017  12:47 AM
 
(Apr. 29, 2017  12:12 AM)Kai-V Wrote: I definitely appreciated that short film. I found that there were some good decisions taken. The only clear thing I would have changed is when Titu(?) saw flashes and then withdrew his hand from the apple. Perhaps the camera could have shaken or light could have been used to accentuate the gesture, because it seemed somewhat banal.

Yeah that's a good point, thanks for the feedback! Smile