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Scavenger-Hunt-2015-until-January-4th event draft : Enter The Termibeytor

Dec. 14, 2015  12:06 AM
 
This is my draft of Enter The Termibeytor: There were 13 bladers that made it to Enter The Termibeytor. It was a limited format tournament hosted on August 1, 2015. The 1st place winner was raiyanblader with Libra 230CS, scythe aquario 230sd, and earth pegasis 90RS , coming in close 2nd was angry face with MF Omega Kerbecs CH120RF, Libra BGrin, MF-L Scythe Escolpio W105MF , and 3rd was TitanTactic7 with Scythe Bull 100RS. Here is a list of the people who attended:

Angry Face
TitanTactic7
X-Monster
Tanker
Lightkidd
mario07
IOnlyUseQuake
raiyanblader
draco1116
StormKing
Jett2015
minecraft84
tronn64

The tournament started at 11:00 and ended at around 3:00. The battles were done in a sonokong BB10 Attack type stadium. Angry Face was hosting the tournament and he had extra parts the bladers could borrow and he was selling some PHWs. It was a very hot day, and all the bladers were exausted from battling in the grueling heat.
Dec. 14, 2015  1:47 AM
 
Oh damn, this definitely stopped way shorter than what we expect. You can look at this article to see the sort of details we are looking for : http://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-BeyDays-Fever-Draft

We do not expect every tournament article to go into such detail, but it is very important to try to describe what the atmosphere of the event was, if anything exciting or interesting happened, how each round went by, etc.
Dec. 14, 2015  11:10 PM
 
ok understood ill fix it asap
is this better or need more detail still
Dec. 14, 2015  11:39 PM
 
It is a very choppy read. Try and make your sentences flow, and organize it a bit more. Like Kai-V already said, check out Wombat's thread for a reference point.
Dec. 14, 2015  11:45 PM
 
We already have a list of results, so a tournament article needs to go a bit deeper than just saying who played what against who. It has to establish a kind of narrative, more like an article written covering a sports event. I would check out the example Kai-V linked to again.

Still, super appreciate your efforts on this Smile
Dec. 15, 2015  1:05 PM
 
ok Grin ill keep trying