Poison-Shaking off Some Rust

I haven't written anything in a while, so I wanted to brush off some of the rust and try my hand at the craft again. So, I came up with this.

"It's over," She said, blinking the snow out of her eyes. They were turning a deep blue, and a glistening tear rolled down her cheek. I searched inside myself, trying to find the right words to say. I had always been able to make it better, been able to fix whatever was wrong with her. Now there was nothing. I had been the cure; now I was the disease. There was nothing to say. I stared into her troubled eyes and didn't move. She brushed her auburn hair away from her face and licked her lips. I could tell she was searching for words, too. My heartbeat was pounding in my ears; pulsing and throbbing with heartache. My mind flashed every memory I had with her: those summer nights we shared eating ice cream and watching the stars; the autumn carnival and kissing her in the dark when the ferris wheel broke down; wrapping my arms around her and keeping her warm; Her crying into my shoulder and holding her tightly, telling her everything would be alright...I would make it better.

Now that meant nothing. It was ending, right here and now. My mind was trying to wrap itself around the concept. This was really happening? This wasn't a dream? I finally unfroze and motioned my mouth. I was about to say something, but nothing came out. I had to say something, get her back, keep this from ending. I needed her, she completed me...

Without another word, she turned around and walked away. Disappearing into the darkness of the night, and out of my life forever.

My strength gave out, and I crumpled to my knees, crying and sobbing into the falling snow.

C+C?

brilliant, it's nice to see you back and writing again Sparta!
Thanks! Did you see anything I could work on or...
I don't really think you could work on anything more about it, maybe adding in a few more emotional feelings during the main part, but no I think you've improved since recently.
Hm..It's nice but you could add semi-colons. Tongue_out
Ah, semi colons. My enemy; they used to be one of the major things I had to work on. And now they're back!
:p thanks BP, I'll look through and fix them.
brilliant! I love it. You know, the reason why i made epic beginnings in my stories was because i aspired to be like you, Sparta!
Great job. But like BP said. Just a few punctuation errors.
Not a massive fan of the title but im guessing later on in the story "Poison" will become more appropriate
Alright, think I fixed some semi colons. Thanks for the advice guys. Did I miss any?

And thanks for the support Bunnii...still call you that, sorry haha.