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Orso: Energy Ring Draft [Added to wiki]

Dec. 19, 2015  10:14 PM
 
Energy Ring: Orso

The Orso Energy Ring is comprised up of four main sections, two of which easily resemble bear claws. These can give extra recoil, and, even though Energy Ring contact is unlikely, it is still a distinct disadvantage. The other two sections are sloped, akin to the Leone series Energy Rings, but with Hexagonal shapes covering it's surface. While the slopes give defense to the ring, they do not cover the entire Energy Ring. Due to its light weight, high recoil, poor weight distribution, and low aerodynamic properties, it is easily outclassed for defense by Leone, Leone II, and even lynx. Even if none of the before mentioned Energy rings are available, it should never be used in competitive play.

Weight: 3 grams. (lighter than many spin tracks.)
Dec. 20, 2015  3:23 AM
 
nice, might want to add more, though.
Dec. 20, 2015  5:46 AM
 
I think this is actually a good enough draft for a Clear Wheel. However, it definitely needs to mention these two things :
- bad weight distribution should be added to the list near the end of the description;
- Orso is not even an alternative to consider, so the last sentence should be removed altogether and the before-last sentence should be reworded slightly to say that there are multiple much better Clear Wheels that exist and that outclass Orso, rendering it useless.


EDIT : Hm, we had several drafts already posted for Rock Orso. Thankfully, none of them really developped on the Clear Wheel, so this is not a vain effort. However, I like this description from Shabalabadoo's draft, so could you try to use the terms he used ?
Shabalabadoo Wrote:The Orso Clear Wheel is of a translucent Brown colour, and consists of five "Bear Claws", adjacent to several polygonal shapes of different sizes.

And of course, the weight will have to be added.
Dec. 20, 2015  5:54 AM
 
Also, it has to be referred to as "Clear Wheel".
Dec. 20, 2015  5:57 AM
 
(Dec. 20, 2015  5:54 AM)J.I.N.B.E.E! Wrote: Also, it has to be referred to as "Clear Wheel".

Well, for Beyblade Wiki, at the moment we will follow their use of dub names while we are exploring ways to switch the terms around without affecting rankings and all.
Dec. 20, 2015  5:21 PM
 
Thank you all for the constructive criticizm. once done, i will edit the OP.
Dec. 20, 2015  5:23 PM
 
Cool, then this is just a message to make sure you are able to post again once it is edited, so that I can know.
Dec. 20, 2015  5:28 PM
 
OP edited to reflect criticizm.
Dec. 20, 2015  6:55 PM
 
Hm, but you did not mention the poor weight distribution or that the two sections that are not bear paws are comprised of hexagons ?
Dec. 20, 2015  7:17 PM
 
op now fixed.
Dec. 20, 2015  7:48 PM
 
OK, here is just a slightly corrected version :

Quote:Energy Ring: Orso
Weight: 3 grams

The Orso Energy Ring is comprised of four main sections, two of which easily resemble bear claws. These can give extra recoil, and, even though Energy Ring contact is unlikely, it is still a distinct disadvantage. The other two sections are sloped, akin to the Leone series Energy Rings, but with hexagonal shapes covering its surface. While the slopes give defense to the ring, they do not cover the entire Energy Ring. Due to its light weight, high recoil, poor weight distribution, and low aerodynamic properties, it is easily outclassed for defense by multiple Energy Rings like even Leone, Leone II, and Lynx. For these reasons, it should never be used in competitive play.


With that done, congratulations for a good draft. You can add the version I just corrected to Beyblade Wiki right ahead in an "Energy Ring - Orso" article. Make sure to follow the sort of template you can see on this page : http://beyblade.wikia.com/wiki/Energy_Ring_-_Libra

The weight should be added directly in the description though, within what gets imported for the full-Beyblade articles.
Dec. 21, 2015  2:51 PM
 
Added to the wikia. Thanks Kai-V!
Dec. 21, 2015  3:02 PM
 
Thank you to you, actually, but could you just rename it as "Energy Ring - Orso" ? The hyphen is very important, it should really not be a :.
Dec. 21, 2015  7:08 PM
 
it won't let me change the title.
Dec. 21, 2015  7:12 PM
 
Create a new page with the correct title and ask for the previous to be deleted perhaps? The hyphen let's the article be tagged in the article's of beyblades that have the part.
Dec. 21, 2015  7:19 PM
 
Thanx m8! all done!
Dec. 21, 2015  7:20 PM
 
Alright, I deleted the Energy Ring: Orso page. However, you needed to use the same template as the other Energy Ring - articles. Could you edit the Energy Ring - Orso page to look more like this, with all the sections too ? http://beyblade.wikia.com/wiki/Energy_Ring_-_Libra
Dec. 21, 2015  7:26 PM
 
Hey bud, if you need help uploading it correctly shoot me a PM, I can either upload it for you or show you how in detail.
Dec. 21, 2015  7:38 PM
 
alright, now i'm done. most likely. i think.
Dec. 21, 2015  7:41 PM
 
You just added some categories; the rest of the page looks identical and not like the Libra Energy Ring page. Have you checked that ?
Jan. 19, 2016  3:56 AM
 
OK I finally fixed this ...