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Night Story 0: Mes Moordenaar Gang

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Oct. 24, 2010  12:09 AM
 
There's a great gang called the Mes Moordenaars, a group of bladers from a small town called Shushi. Their name was African for Blade Killers. They had illegally customised beys that were built to destroy normal ones. And believe it or not, the protagonist is indeed...

Part of this team.

His name is Siel. His friends in the Mes Moordenaars call him Wrecker. His bey is Evil Aries ED145JB with a HMS Circle Heavy Weight Disk and a Metal Driger Attack Ring. He calls it...

Evil Driger Aries.

One morning, Siel woke up to his mother. She told him that there was a visitor at the door. Siel quickly brushed his teeth and went down with his bey-wallet To his surprise, it was a kid around his age, holding a launcher with a Homemade beyblade.
"You're not the only one who makes Illegal Beys!!"
Siel laughed.
"Dude, you can't compare that sugarpuff to the hardcore beys we make!!"
Siel got out his Evil Driger Aries and the visitor's confidence took a wid turn.
"Hey, uh... I was kidding. You know us kids. Like, you know! I- I was wondering if I could join you... uh, want some money? Pl- Ju-Just Please don't damage my bey, Please!!" The boy started pleading like a lost dog. Siel got out his phone.
"What's your name?"
"What- ME?!"
"Who else."
"Tyler"
"OookieDokie. It's official. Our battle. 4:00."
"What?"
"Oh, and by the way I just posted news on our battle on the blog so if you don't show up, you'll be shown up infront of the whole city."
"You can't do that!"
"Come on! Just because I have a Bey Destroying Bey, doesn't mean I'm gonna win!"
Siel closed the door and pleasured himself to some hot coco...

The time was 3:56 and Siel had just noticed that he had only 4 minutes to get to the park.
"Holy Viking Monkeys! I'm gonna be late!"
Siel put on his cap and jacket. He also put the bey tool (The thing that you assemble your bey with) on his ring finger. He always does that in battles. That's just his style. Siel ran to the bus stop at breakneck speed when he found that even the bus was earlier than him. Blading is such an important sport in Shushi, so there was a whole stadium for it. So there was even a bustop named after it. When he got off, he saw Tyler with a smile on his face. Tyler must have been hoping that he wouldn't make it. Unfortunately for him, Siel did make it, and just in time for the party. Instantly, Tyler's smile went upside down.
"THREE-TWO-ONE-GO-SHOO-!!" Screamed Tyler
"Wait, wait... gotta catch my breath." gasped Siel
After a few wasted seconds, the battle started and they ripped their beys without even counting to one.
"SHING" Was all you could hear as Siel's bey, Evil Driger Aries sliced through Tyler's Home-made bey. You could hear a rattling sound inside Tylers bey as if it were a loose Rock Leone 145WB.
"Special Move!!" Chanted Siel.
"Eternal Defeeeeense!!" A somewhat hybrid between a ram and a tiger came out of the bey. It was a ram with stripes and spiky hooves and horns. It's horns began to spin around and then it Drilled into -and through- Tyler's bey.

In the middle of the stadium were shattered peices of metal and Evil Driger Aries. The bey leaped back into Siels arms and Siel walked in a different direction from where he came. He was going to the Mes Moordenaars base. Awaiting him was a tall, dark figure...clapping.
"Well done, Siel" Came a deep, calm voice.
"It's 4:05. Here's your pay."
The dark figure threw 50 Nia at Siel.

"Now..." Said the mysterious voice to all the members of the crew,
"Let's get down to business."

The Bionicle at the bottom of the Images (My DA Avatar) proves I did this

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Oct. 24, 2010  12:38 AM
 
Good job!
I'm hoping to hear more... Smile
Oct. 24, 2010  12:41 AM
 
Thanks!
Oct. 24, 2010  4:55 PM
 
Episode 2:

All 60 members of the Mes Moordenaars stood still while they listened to their leader speak... Similar to a pack of snow wolves listening to their master.
"We need to get this group, more known..."
"Yes, Sir!" Chanted the Members.
"More Sinister"
"Yes, Sir!"
"More Organized..."
"Yes, Sir!"
"But the only way were gonna do that is by having co-leaders."
"Yes, Sir!"
"So we're gonna spice things up a bit."
"Yes, Sir!"
"You know what we're gonna do!?"
"No, Sir!"
"We're gonna have 3 Co-Leaders. But the only way we can sort that out is by having 3 tournaments. Being 60 of you, there must be 20 members in each tournament. You'll be put with random opponents, then when the winners of those matches win, there'll only be 10 people in each tournament. And then 5. After that, you'll get a 5 way match up. The winner of that will be a Co-Leader, and since there's 3 Tournies, there'll be 3 Co-Leaders."
The room was filled with chatter, people had already began training for the Tournaments. Whilst the rest of the gang walked out of the building, Siel stared at his
Evil Driger Aries and waited.
"You're still here, Siel. Why is that?" Smirked the dark figure.
"What is your plan? Why the sudden tournaments?" Asked Siel.
The dark figure walked forth and so his face could be seen. It was a young man not many years older than Siel.
"You'll know all I do, when you win your third of the Tournament."
"Why do you show your face to me, but not the others!?"
"Because they are not in the same league as you, Siel. You are special."
"Special..."
"Special..."
"Sp..c..l..."
The word echoed in Siel's mind as he walked home. He didn't feel like taking the bus. He needed some fresh air and time to think alone.
"Sieluitik! You left the house without alerting me!" His mother cried.
"Damn, I hate it when she calls me that..." Soul thought.
"From now on, you must be home by seven.
"Mum! But it's only 4:20! What did I do to deserve that?"
Just at that moment, Siel's pocket started glowing. It was glowing a bright orange!
"Mum! Can you see this!!"
"See what? Don't try and change the subject!"
Siel reached for his pocket and pulled out his beyblade.
"Mum... My beyblade's glowing...!"
"What are you talking about! I bet that gang of yours gave you drugs!"
Siel noticed something. He was the only person who could see this glow. He knew that the Beast had chosen him as a host. Before he knew it, he was inside an orange void. His mother had dissappeared. His house had dissappeared. Shushi town had dissappeared. All he saw was a ram, with stipes and spiky, curled horns.
"What? Is that a sheep? A goat, maybe?" Siel was trying to be scared, but something wouldn't let him. In fact, he felt more calm than ever.
"Ba-a-a-a...Ba-a-a-a..."
Siel didn't know who this Ram was, but he felt like he knew it all his life.
"Who are you?"
"It's me, your mother." Siel found himself lying on his bed and his mother was sitting sideways on his lap.
"Ahh. I had the most dodgy dream..."
"Sieluitik. Tell me the truth. Did they drug you?"
"NO!! Anyway, there was an orange light coming out of my Beyblade. Th-Then I saw a Ram. It started saying, 'Baa, baa' Then I woke up here."
His mother had a shocked expression.
"That's exactly what your dad said before he went touring around the world. When you were only two, your dad used to tell you bed time stories of how he met a phoenix named "Dranzer" in his dreams. When we were kids, he used to Beybattle with a friend of mine, called Tyson... With the HMS Beyblades. But now, kids only play with the new Metal Fusion ones..." Siel tried to cheer his mother up.
"Uh, I customised my bey with a HMS Weight Disk."
"OH! The old and new ones are compatible!?"
"No."
"Then how did you do it?"
"I drilled some shaped so that it will fit in."
"And exactly who gave you all those tools."
"I'm capable of buying stuff myself, you know."
The two started laughing, and then his mother un-grounded him, knowing that he had the same dreams his father.


Siel got out his tool box, put his Bey tool on his ring finger and went out of the house. The sky was orange, and it reminded him of the Dream he had. Siel pulled his bey out of his pocket and he was looking at a totally new beyblade. The beyblade had no scratches on it and instead of it being random colours, it turned orange and blue. The colour Orange made Siel feel awfully dizzy, so he wasn't walking straight. A fellow member of the Mes Moordenaars came walking past and just as Siel fell over, he caught him.
"Hey, dude, what's wrong."
Siel looked up.
"Hey, I know who you are, dude!! you're Siel aren't you! Lovin' the special move! I saw that Ram come out of your bey and Drill through that other bey. Awesome, dude."
Already, Siel did not like this person. He didn't seem to be able to shut up.
"Hey, I'm like you! We're both members of the Mes Moordenaars, aint it!? Ja know what? I had a dream, today!"
"Did you see your bit-beast!?" Interupted Siel.
"Yeaaaaaaaaaaaah!!! How'd you know?"
"I happened to have that dream too. And my bey changed colour!"
"O . M . G . DOOOOOD!!! Same here. My Rock Draciel Leone D125WB here changed Purple and Green, and now my ears ring when I see Green stuff."
"Hmm..." Siel thought, "So, the colour orange makes me feel dizzy and green makes his ears ring? We must have had the same dream. I remember in my dream... My Bit-Beast looked as if it were trying to tell me something. Maybe--"
"HEY LET'S BATTLE" Demanded the kid. "So you're nickname is Wrecker, right? I'm JAMMER!! Last one to the stadium grounds is a Holy Viking Monkey!!"
Siel made it last to the stadium and Wrecker mocked him by calling him a Holy Viking Monkey. There were already people battling in the defense stadium, so they chose the attack stadium.
"Three! Two...!" Wrecker ran up a wall like the prince of persia and flipped off. Whilst in mid-air, he said:
"Let it Shoot!" and landed on his feet.
Siel was baffled.
"Let it shoot?" He said.
"I like to combine the Japanese with the American. Go babes!!"
"Who's 'babes'!?"
"Oh, I was talking to my Bit-Beast. She's a Female."
"Anyway, can we start now? Evil Driger Aries, Stay!!" Evil Driger Aries was spinning in one spot.
"Rock Draciel Leone! Move very slowly."
Rock Draciel Leone moved extremely slow, it would take ages before it could hit into Evil Driger Aries.
"Lean over, Aries!" Aries leaned forward and it's metal customised attack ring and Eternal Defense145 smashed into the stadium floor, causing the bey to force backward. Being an Attack Stadium, the walls and floor slope smoothly, so Evil Driger Aries went up the slope and and was in midair.
"Float!" Called Siel. Aries' Eternal Defense Spintrack started spinning 20x faster than the beyblade and so it started floating in midair.
"New Special Move! Soaring Wind, Burning Earth!!" Aries' Spintrack was spinning so fast that the Beyblade itself gained more RPM from it and then a small cyclone rose up from the moist air. Rock Draciel Leone got caught inside it aswell.
"What!! How and where did you learn this technique!! Jammer began to panick.
"It's not finished yet!" Said Siel. Then Aries lowered down to the ground whilst Leone was still caught in the cyclone. Aries started drilling into the ground and you could see the bitbeast's spiky horns digging through. You could also see the stadium floor turning red. It was melting!! The cyclone started drawing towards the Burning Hole and so was Leone. The cyclone was becoming too powerful. So powerful that Jammer was getting consumed by it. More and more people gathered round the stadium.
"Ahh!" Cried Jammer,"It's dragging me in!!" Jammer grabbed onto a stadium wall as the cyclone tugged him in. He was near death.
"A-a-a-aaahh!" Weeped Siel,"Stop it, Hybrid Aries! Enough!!" Siel walked into the stadium and struggled towards his beyblade. A civilian said:
"Hey! Is this guy crazy! That thing is outta control!! If he tries to touch that, his life is over!!" Siel ignored that comment and continued to walk towards his beyblade. He saw a ram drilling into the ground and he stroked it on the back.
"It's okay, Hybrid Aries..." The Ram turned around and stopped drilling into the ground. Siel then picked it up. It was hot. Really hot.
"Your Bey almost killed me..." Said Jammer whilst picking up his Rock Draciel Leone. "How'd you do that?"
"I don't... know..." Pondered Siel,"Maybe the dream gave me access to Hybrid Aries Full power. No. Not maybe. Definately. In fact... I don't think those dreams we had weren't dreams at all. They were really our beasts speaking to use in a realm with no time or space."
"Yeah, man..." Huffed Jammer, still shaken from the battle,"Atleast it's all over..."
"Nuh-uh." Said Siel. "I've tamed my Bit-Beast. You've still got to tame yours."
From that day, the two became more mature and conscious of their Bit-Beasts. And also, a new friendship was born.

Episode Two. End.

BIONICLE AT BOTTOM OF PICTURES IS MY D.A AVATAR.

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Oct. 24, 2010  10:30 PM
 
Nice work. Again
Oct. 24, 2010  11:09 PM
 
Episode 3

Two weeks later and the two are best friends. But one friend knows more than the other...

The two friends stared at eachother whilst sitting on opposite benches at the stadium ground.
"I'm a mage." Said Jammer.
"I'm a Rogue." Said Siel.
"I'ma use my magic void attack on you."
"I'ma throw a lvl 1 knife in the void so that it closes on it."
"I'ma escape the battle and find a lvl 3 guy to kill"
"I'ma kill a lvl 10 Dragon"
"What are we doing, dude. We should be conducting research on Bit-Beasts.
"Left my laptop at home."
"Your home's 3 stops away..."
"Whatever. You comin'?"
"No. I'ma go get us some smoothies. I'll pay for yours."
"Uh, thanks, Jammer. Say, what's your real name?"
"C'mon, Wrecker. You didn't tell me yours."
"I told you when we met!"
"Go and get the laptop, already."
Siel went to the bus stop and the bus came crashing through. The bus had stopped, but it didn't look like a normal stop. It looked more like it broke down. The bus had scratches all over it and just then, a boy Siel's age jumped off.
"You scratched up the bus pretty bad..." Giggled Siel.
"Who are you?" Said the boy.
"You destroy a bus with your bey and you're asing me who I am?"
"You got a bey?"
"Yes, and it's illegally customised."
"Oh? You must be in the Mes Moordenaars too. We're cool."
"Not quite... You just destroyed the bus which I take home, and they're gonna have to close down the stop."
"My bad... The driver... harassed me. Anyway, how long have you been in the Gang?"
"A few months..."
"Heh... A newbie, eh?"
"23 months."
"Oh... Well you should've said so!"
Since the bus was broken and the stop was closed down, Siel walked back to where he was sitting and he found Jammer typing on his phone.
"Where's the smoothies?"
"Where's the laptop?"
"Touché. Who were you talking about?"
"Who's that behind you?"
Siel turned around and saw the bus-destroying menace standing behind him and turned back to Jammer.
"Touché, again." Siel went to sit next to Jammer, then the other kid came to sit next to Siel.
"Can I help you?" Siel began to get annoyed.
"Yes..."
The two stared at eachother, then Siel got uncomfortable.
"Wwhhat!?" Said Siel in a low pitch whilst grunting his teeth.
"I saw your battle with him the other day."
"I thought you said you didn't know me!"
"I lied." Just then, Siel looked up and saw that Jammer had dissappeared, and he also got a text from him. It said this. Siel walked on and laughed. He looked behind him and no-one was there. The mysterious follower was gone. Siel arrived at the base of the Mes Moordenaars. There was no-one in. Siel took a few steps and the door closed behind him. There was a huge stadium in the middle of the room. It had always been there but was never seen in use.
There were little holes all around and inside the stadium. Siel walked towards it and when he got near it, fire blew up from all the holes.
"This is the Ring of Elements Stadium!" cried a voice. The fire died down a little and the speaker could be seen. It was the boy who destroyed the bus!
"Siel! Beneath this stadium is a bunch of wires, and cables! They program this stadium and allow it to randomly shoot out Fire, Water, Air or Earth through the tiny holes."
"How can a stadium shoot out Earth!?" Asked Siel.
"Be quiet! I'm talking. I, the Rogue of the Flame or ROTF am a Fire Type Blader, and therefore I have set the stadium to operate with only FIRE! You, are an Electric Type Blader, so I have the upper hand! I'll prove to the Boss that you aren't the special guy the he thinks you are!!" ROTF got out a left spin launcher and a 100% Custom Beyblade. It was made fully out of Metal and had a large circle around it, like Trypio.
"Three! Two! One! Let it Rip!" The two shot their beys and they span in to different directions and clashed into eachother.
"This gang is for bladers with customised beys, built to destroy ordinary beys! I see, that your sharp metal allows you to do that, but my bey has a more... Fun method."
There's four holes inside ROTF's bey, and they produce fire, then as fire came whirling out of his bey, it latched onto the large circle and so it looked like a beyblade with a ring of fire around it.
"How is your bey not melting?!"
"The circle is coated in flame-proof plastic, meaning that only YOUR bey will melt.
Hybrid Aries backed off but then a flame just popped out of the stadium.
"Hahahahahahhaahahahahaahhaahaha!" ROTF had a psychotic laugh,"This stadium origionally has no walls, but fire will be the stadium walls in this match!!"
Siel was defensless and so he looked around at his surroundings.
"Hey, wait a minute..." Siel thought,"He said he was the Rogue of the Flame. Then I can be the Mage of Electricity. New Special Move, Discharge!!" Hybrid Aries began to vibrate and then a wave came out of it. Thus, all the lights went off, and so did the stadium's power. The fire walls instantly dissappeared.
"Now float and use your other special move, Soaring Wind, Burning Earth!!" The cyclone produced by Hybrid aries was unbelievable. It simply sucked in the flames from ROTF's bey.and then smashed into the stadium floor, using the flames to help Melt the stadium. The stadium cables couldn't withstand the heat and so the whole stadium exploded. The explosion lasted more or less 3 seconds before the cyclone simply consumed it. Hybrid Aries continued drilling into the ground even though the stadium was gone. ROTF's bey was being smothered beneath Siel's.
"OKAY, OKAY!! YOU'VE WON!! JUST STOP!!" Cried ROTF. Then Hybrid Aries leaped and Siel caught it, and he quickly put it in his tool box before it burnt his hand.
"I don't know why you want the boss' approval so badly, and even worse, I can't believe Jammer framed me like he did!"
"It wasn't Jammer..." ROTF admitted, "He wanted a new face bolt because he said he didn't want his old Bit-Beast. So I said if he wanted a new beast, he'd have to help me."
"No... Jammer's gonna throw away his bitbeast!! Gotta go!!"

Episode 3. End.
Oct. 25, 2010  12:15 AM
 
awesome i just checked out your deviant art your gallery is cool.
Oct. 25, 2010  12:40 AM
 
awesome stories
Oct. 25, 2010  8:42 AM
 
Thanks, guys!
Oct. 25, 2010  9:12 AM
 
Hah, what's with all the sudden Beyblade stories ? =P
By the way, it's quite good though there are a few errors.
When it's ["......" cried someone], the word after the dialogue does not start with a capital unless it's a name. etc.
Sorry, just had to point that out. ^^
Oct. 25, 2010  9:59 AM
 
Thanks. I'll keep that in mind.
Oct. 25, 2010  3:37 PM
 
Episode 4:

Siel ran to Jammer's house, hoping to find him before he throws away his bit-beast. It was getting late and the sky was orange. Siel began to feel dizzy, again. He staggered towards the door and pulled the golden knob in an effort to knock, but when he pulled it, the door unexpectedly swayed open.
"Either he left his house and left the door open..." thought Siel,"or he went in and left it open." Siel went into the living room and the television was on. The TV was left on a Japanese comedy reality programme called "You are what you eat", where people go through trials of "levels" to get special keys from people who are using an obstacle to help them. Then you must use the obstacle their using against them in order to get the key. For example, a woman on the show had to fight a large man dressed as a potato. The obstacle he was using was the weight of the costume. If she tried to get near him, he would simply drop on her. The woman walked slowly towards the man and he dropped, but she quickly jumped back just in time. Since the costume was so big, the man could not get up again so the woman took the key from him and advanced to the next level.
"Japanese shows are funny." laughed Siel,"Wait... I should be looking for Jammer." Siel walked slowly upstairs. He was scared. But can you blame him? Jammer's house is more intimidating than the Mes Moordenaar Base! His mother and father wear large tattoos of snakes and when they fold their arms over eachother, it looks as if the snakes are wrestling eachother!! The windows of his house were always cracked, but Siel never asked why, and to top it off...
The lights were off.

Siel walked up the stairs. Every step he took would make a creeking noise...
"This house is less scary..." thought Siel,"when Jammer is here, listening to loud music that disturbs the neighbours." Siel skipped the last step and leaped to the second floor. He saw three rooms. One was a room that had a guitar sign on the door and said,"DO NUT FUDGING ENTER!!!" presumably Jammer's. Another was a room with a plain door, most likely his parents. His parents were close together, and were never seen arguing. The last room was a toilet with a sign of an infant urinating in a vase.
"Ugh" thought Siel,"My house has one of those as well..." The toilet door, being the closest to Siel was the first one he knocked on.
"Anyone home?" Siel asked,"He-e-lloooooooooooooooooooo-oooo!!"
Silence. Siel noticed the toilet door was locked, so he knew that someone was in there.
"Do you know where your son is?" Siel cried. Instantly, the door opened. Siel saw the terrible state that Jammer's mother. She had tears running down her face and there was black make-up leaking down her cheeks.
"D-Do you know where Leu is?" She cried.
"Leu is Jammer's real name, right"
"Yes. Leu's spinning top went out of control, then it wrecked the whole house. The-Then a huge, green lion leaped out and tried to kill me."
"Do you have any Idea where he went?"
"He likes going to the smoothie bar."
"I doubt he went there."
"Never mind. I think I know. Stay here and don't call the police! They will die if they tried to fight him, anyway."
Siel saw that the toilet window had been smashed by Leu's Hybrid Leone so he ran into the toilet and did the most reckless thing. He jumped out the window! Siel then landed on a tree, jumped onto the fence and saw that the bus was already leaving, so Siel jumped off the fence, onto the bus stop and on top of the bus. Siel was very agile for his age. But not as agile as Leu, the one who ripped a beyblade, upside down in mid-air. The bus was moving very fast and Siel was losing balance. Siel got out his tool box, which was attached to his pouch and he took out a spare string launcher. He cut off the string, attached it to his beyblade, jumped off the roof of the bus and in midair, he launched his beyblade. Being the powerful beyblade it is, Hybrid Aries blew off to another dimension and Siel got dragged behind.
"AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHH!!!" Siel was flying at Mach 5 speed and he was about to land, he didn't know what to do, but then he just remembered the ability of Hybrid Aries' spintrack.
"Hybrid Aries!! Float!!" Hybried Aries ED Spintrack started spinning extremly fast, so they stop flying at supersonic speed, and started floating in midair... calmly...
"Whew..." Siel was still in shock from the flight. He landed directly infront of the Mes Moordenaar base.
"Behind You." said a voice. Siel turned around, only to get punched in the face by Leu. Siel dropped on the floor and looked up at him. Leu had a purple aura flowing around him and his eyes and mouth turned purple too.
"That's not Hybrid Leone's power consuming you, is it?" asked Siel.
"Correcto!! I am Leu's new bit-beast called Nostalgio. This is just me, taking control of your friends body. So... what was it that you wanted?"
"I want Jammer to get his old bit-beast back." said Siel. The beast taking control over Leu's body picked up a face bolt from Leu's pocket. It was Hybrid Leone's.
"Is this what you want?" laughed Nostalgio,"Come get it." Just then, Nostalgio opened a massive portal.
"This is the void. I control it. And now, I'm throwing Hybrid Leone's face bolt inside!! Infact! Forget this body!! I'll throw it inside as well!!!"
Then a huge gunmetal blue ram with shiny hooves, purple horns and one skinless wing came out of Leu.
"A-a beast in... the real world!?!?" Siel backed off a bit but then he remembered that his friend was in danger. Who must have gave Leu the beast?
"I remember now!" gasped Siel,"The Rogue of the Flame said that he's give him a new bit-beast. That's why this is happening! He set the both of us up." Then Siel turned around and looked at Nostalgio.
"Hybrid Aries...Give me your strength!!" he cried. Then an orange aura went around him. He dashed towards Nostalgio and punched him into the void and caught Leu and Leone's face bolt. But Nostalgio simply came back out and went inside Leu's beyblade.
"Hey, Leu. Are you back to normal." Siel already knew the answer to this question...
"Three..." grunted Leu,"Two..." This time, he never ran up any walls because he was stll being possessed by Nostalgio.
"One."
"Boooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooom!!!!" Was all you could hear. Nostalgio was the most powerful beast Siel had ever fought.
"It's true." said Siel,"The attributes of the bey do matter, but the beast inside of it matters even more. Nostalgio is more powerful than Hybrid Leone, even though they fight using the same bey." After saying this, the possessed Leu said:
"Special move!! Black Hole Smash!!" Nostalgio smashed into Hybrid Aries and went straight through it, then a black hole appeared in front of Aries.
"This is the end for you and your Hybrid Aries!!" laughed Nostalgio.

Episode 4. End.
Oct. 26, 2010  3:59 PM
 
Episode 5

Siel watched as his bey was being mauled by Nostalgio. Siel looked around and noticed something was wrong. All he could hear was the sounds of the battle. He saw a little boy crying whilst his mother was taking him to the dentist, but he couldn't hear him cry. People walked past the battle like it was never there. Sparks came out from the battle and one large spark almost hit Siel. Siel backed off and hit into a trespasser. He was about to turn to say sorry but then he noticed that he didn't bump into the person. He fell right through them!
"Have you realised where you are...?" Said the possessed Leu.
"Yeah..." laughed Siel,"the void."
"Why are you laughing!?"
"The mighty bit-beast, Nostalgio... I'd think he'd be more... sinister."
"What!?!? A mere child commenting on the Darkness of the Void Beast, Nosta--"
"Shut up for a second. So if I defeat you the void will open?"
"That information is classified, boy!!" Leu's bey rammed into Siel's. The surroundings slowly disappeared and Siel found himself standing on nothing. There was nothing above, nothing below, but even the beys were spinning where they were.
This meant that Siel could not do his two best special moves, he could only use the Eternal Defence Special move.
"Special move!!" chanted Nostalgio,"Spirit of the Void!!!" Leu's bey started to get a thick aura, so the bey itself could not be seen anymore, then it started bouncing around like crazy, smashing into Hybrid Aries every time.
"Duplicate!!" he shouted, then the bey started duplicating whilst bouncing on Hybrid Aries. Then, Siel heard a ram cry. He began to panic.
"What should I do..." he thought,"Think, think, think..." Siel remembered that Japanese program he watched where contestants had to use the opponent's advantage against them.
"Oh!" Siel began to smile,"His advantage is his void... and void is like the elements of Time, Space and Darkness put together..."
"Are you just gonna stand there, boy?" Nostalgio mocked him,"Look at the big, bad boy who came to battle me, chickening out!!"
"Void types must be weak to light!" Siel smirked,"This means my 'Discharge' Special move may come handy..." Siel put his hands together, harnessed his energy into Hybrid Aries and then an orange aura went around both of them.
"Discharge." Siel whispered. Then electricity started coming out of Hybrid Aries, then a Ram came out, winked at Siel and Started generating electricity form it's wool, spiky horns and hooves.
"That won't possibly work, boy." laughed Nostalgio.
"Maybe you should take a science lesson!!" Siel got more confident in his method,"Light can travel forever, if nothing got in it's way."
"So!?"
"Last time I checked, this void has round about absolutely nothing inside it. If Hybrid Aries used his Discharge Special Move as powerful as he could, the light would travel everywhere in this void, because nothing will be there to get in the light's way!!"
"Ack!!" Nostalgio cried,"That's impossible!! This is my void!! I-I decide what happens here!!" Nostalgio made ten objects from the real world appear in front of Hybrid Aries. A fridge, a house, a television, a lorry, a giant cinema screen, a 120 story building, a powerplant, and 3 hurricanes from different countries. This was the power of Nostalgio.
"Ahem," Siel smirked,"What are these?"
"I put these in your way, so the light won't be travelling anywhere." said Nostalgio. Just as Nostalgio gained his confidence back, rays of light poked out of the objects surrounding Hybrid Aries.
"H-how can this be happening!!!!" screamed Nostalgio.
"All the objects you surrounded Hybrid Aries with contain high amounts of electricity. You just made things worst for yourself." cackled Siel,"Discharge, Hybrid Aries!"
Hybrid Aries blasted through the objects with his horns, and now all that could be seen was a ram, coated in electric armour running at full speed. Hybrid Aries Smashed into Nostalgio, because both of them were rams, they forced against eachother with their Curved Horns. Then the electricity from Hybrid Aries dispersed and the light shone throughout the whole void, Nostalgio looked as if he tried to say something, but he was overpowered by the light. He only mouthed a few words.

After, they returned to the real world and all was the same.
"Hey" came a voice. Siel turned around and saw Leu."How's it?"#

Episode 5. End.
Oct. 27, 2010  3:02 AM
 
Good. BTW, I've finished a new part of my story, so check it out! I think it is a bit better than the other parts...
Oct. 27, 2010  12:55 PM
 
(Oct. 27, 2010  3:02 AM)Wraith Wrote: Good. BTW, I've finished a new part of my story, so check it out! I think it is a bit better than the other parts...

Yeah, I read it. It's really good, but it might cause confusion because dizzi isn't in the japanese version of beyblade.
Oct. 27, 2010  1:50 PM
 
Why do i have a feeling that this story was inspiered by me?
Smile
also nice storys!
Oct. 27, 2010  2:20 PM
 
(Oct. 27, 2010  1:50 PM)s200401150 Wrote: Why do i have a feeling that this story was inspiered by me?
Smile
also nice storys!

lol yeah it is.
Oct. 27, 2010  2:29 PM
 
Bravo man i love it
Oct. 27, 2010  2:49 PM
 
Nice story! Loved it!
Oct. 27, 2010  3:22 PM
 
Good stuff, I notice we're getting a lot of writers now.
Oct. 27, 2010  3:33 PM
 
Thanks, Guys. And yeah, the amount of writers are increasing
Oct. 27, 2010  3:34 PM
 
How long did it take you to come up with the main premise?
Oct. 27, 2010  3:40 PM
 
I found an Illegal Showcase and so I decided to base it off that. It's based on a gang of bladers who's beys were built to destroy normal ones. But it would be too cliché if I made the main character fight against that team, so I made him part of it instead.
Oct. 27, 2010  3:42 PM
 
Yeah, first Kai's team, then Kyouya's its too much.
Good twist. How far ahead are you? (I know that many anime-manga writers are chapters ahead.)
Are you? haha.
Edit: 1000th post.
Oct. 27, 2010  3:44 PM
 
Thinking of Ideas for new characters. I've thought of many already, just need to spit them into different episodes.
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