So
finally from stopping my extreme laziness and writing, I managed to make a more complete version of episode 1, please give
honest feedback, so no fake compliments since I need to know if my episode needs improvements or if it's decent.
Quotation marks indicate someone talking, none quotation marks are actions and bolded actions are for the multiples of people.
Mecha Sentoki Beyblade Episode 1:
(The camera shows the background scenery of the city and then slowly scrolling to the soccer field)
Player 1: -He runs fiercely whilst dribbling the soccer ball, aiming it towards player 2.-
"Make sure you do not pass it to the other player!"
Player 2: "Do not worry, I've got this all under control. This shouldn't be so hard."
Player 1 kicks the ball off to Player 2.
Other Player 1: -He smiles sinisterly while narrowing his eyes, then he runs towards Player 2 and slide tackles him.-
"Think again!"
Player 2: He trips over and falls frontwards.
"Damn! (-Grits his teeth-) Looks like its up to our goal keeper. Its up to you to save the match Kenichi-san!"
Kenichi Sora: "Got it!"
Kenichi shows determined look.
"All right! Here it goes!"
Kenichi attempts to catch the ball but the ball hits his stomach and slips inside the goal.
Player 1: Player 1 sternly stares at Kenichi while clenching his fist.
"Hey, what were you doing out there? You were obviously not suitable to be our goal keeper!"
Kenichi Sora: -He looks offended whilst also clenching his fists.-
"Thats not true! Those guys just got lucky!"
Player 1: -Player 1 points at Kenichi to another player he wants as a goalie.-
"Maybe we were unlucky to have you as our goal keeper...perhaps you should switch to defense presuming you won't mess up, right?"
Both teams look determined for the final point.
Other Player 1: "He narrows his eyes while looking at Kenichi."
"If Kenichi-san messes this up, this will be our victory!"
Player 3: "Remember Kenichi, this is our last chance. Don't do anything stupid to mess this up."
The teams fight for the ball but the Other Player 2 catches it first and shoots the ball towards Kenichi whilst Kenichi flinches)
Player 1: "WATCH OUT!!!"
Kenichi accidentally kicks the ball in his own goal.
Player 2: "ARGH!!! You idiot! You blew the whole match!"
Other Player 1: "Nice job guys! Well looks like we've won, right?"
-They all walk away and smile evilly.-
Player 1: "Your useless! Your totally incompetent!"
Player 2: "Hey! Maybe if your lucky, you can tap the ball! Your out of our team Kenichi!"
The Team ditches Kenichi whilst Kenichi looks upsettingly at his team and them walks home still upset.
Mrs Sora: "Home already!"
Kenichi Sora: Kenichi slowly looks up to his mother with a blank stare.
"Huh?"
Mrs Sora: "Whats wrong? You look upset!"
Kenichi Sora: "My soccer team kicked me out...they could have done better without me..."
Mrs Sora: "Oh nevermind son. I have something that might cheer you up...
She takes out a Beyblade set
Kenichi Sora: He looks interested while pointing at the set.
"What is that?"
Mrs Sora: "I think its called a 'Beyblade'. From what I saw, its popular towards other children."
Kenichi Sora: "How come I've never heard of it...?"
He looks at the set with amazement.
He then walks upstairs and in his room; he unboxes the Beyblade set. He looks at each seperate parts confused and starts constructing them.
Kenichi Sora: "So this is Beyblade?"
He stares at his Beyblade blankly.
Kenichi Sora: "So according to the instructions, I insert this winder into his launcher and then I pull it...alright! I'll give this a test shot!"
Kenichi launches the Beyblade with low accuracy and the Beyblade ends up flying around his room demolishing his vase. It then stops spinning in an instant.
"Uh Oh..."
"My mother is going to kill me! Perhaps I will sweep the broken vase later, right now I'm getting rid of this!"
He runs outside onto the top of a bridge and is about to throw the Beyblade into the river, then he discovers a building and decided to take a look, what he finds is a school full of people using the same kind of tops he was using.
Kenichi: "Hey, what is this place? It's like some sort of academy for playing spinning tops?"
He looks down and thinks for a second.
"Wait a minute, this could be a good way for me to ask how this thing works."
Beyblade Student 1: "Hey! What are you doing here? Your not a student, leave at once!"
While pointing towards the exit door.
Kenichi: "I have a good reason to be here, I want to practice this game or else this would be a waste."
Principal: "So, you would like to be a pupil of my Beyblade Academy? It is much harder than you think, but if you follow our instructions then I am sure you can keep up with the rest of us."
Kenichi: "Of course, I will try my best...
...I hope I can make it."
My Cho-Z Reaper Deathscyther .12.Cr concept render, click below to see!
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No I don't plan on doing more yet.
I should probably go back to making fan custom Zero G beyblade concepts again
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