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[Fan Fiction]  Story Of Lane's Sister: Athena (BBB OC Story) (Completed Until Further Notice)

Nov. 13, 2020  5:22 AM
 
(Nov. 13, 2020  5:20 AM)BeybladeManiac0 Wrote:
(Nov. 13, 2020  5:16 AM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: This here is menacing https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=P4vLsgb4tRk there’s a big difference in the tone of the two

That's just... wow...
That DOES sound menacing.
I was only suggesting Megalovania because to me, it fits the description. But everyone has their preferences.

I can find a theme for almost anything. There’s a reason why my alternative themes were selected as the main themes for 2 characters.
Nov. 13, 2020  5:22 AM
 
(Nov. 13, 2020  5:10 AM)BeybladeManiac0 Wrote:
(Nov. 13, 2020  5:07 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Im actually not a smash player. I didn't even know Sakurai was a Smash Reference.

That's a pretty funny coincidence. Masahiro Sakurai is the creator and developer of Super Smash Bros, and my favourite Nintendo Developer. Here's a picture of him:
[Image: Sakurai_745.jpg]
BTW, what do you think of Megalovania as Chiki's theme?

Chiki has a ominous yet daring personality so the theme i posted earlier just fits that.
Nov. 13, 2020  5:24 AM
 
(Nov. 13, 2020  5:22 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:
(Nov. 13, 2020  5:10 AM)BeybladeManiac0 Wrote: That's a pretty funny coincidence. Masahiro Sakurai is the creator and developer of Super Smash Bros, and my favourite Nintendo Developer. Here's a picture of him:
[Image: Sakurai_745.jpg]
BTW, what do you think of Megalovania as Chiki's theme?

Chiki has a ominous yet daring personality so the theme i posted earlier just fits that.

I would like to disagree. The theme you posted before displays daring, but not ominous. That’s why Chiki should have 2 themes, one ominous and one daring.
Nov. 13, 2020  3:58 PM
 
(Nov. 13, 2020  5:24 AM)6Jupiter5 Wrote:
(Nov. 13, 2020  5:22 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Chiki has a ominous yet daring personality so the theme i posted earlier just fits that.

I would like to disagree. The theme you posted before displays daring, but not ominous. That’s why Chiki should have 2 themes, one ominous and one daring.

https://youtu.be/3P7jmxh0YiE What about this?
Nov. 13, 2020  4:26 PM
 
ok guys enough theme suggestions.
(Nov. 04, 2020  4:12 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: i guess since ive confirmed an Evolution to Adeona (doesnt actually mean it will actually break) i guess i will reveal more about it in detail.

Chip - Adeona II: has an Adeona motif, the goddess who guides children back home. Has metal core similar to Lucifer. Has Sun aesthetics like Helios/Hyperion/Uranus and Lucifer. (unlike Adeona I, the face of Adeona II is side facing while Adeona I is front facing)

Ring 1 - Heaven: a very bulky ring featuring 6 blades. when the Limit Break System activates, 2 of the the wings extend some and become spring loaded (akin to God Valkyrie).

Ring 2 - Royal: features 12 blades meant for Attack. when the Limit Break System activates, the 12 blades become Spring Loaded like Volcano

Disk: Ou

Driver: Charge Metal'

Owner: Athena Valhalla

Special Moves: Limit Break Heaven, Limit Break Royal, Heaven Slash, Heaven Bound Attack, Royal Crash, Royal Shield, Limit Break Slash, Limit Break Crash


Edit: Heaven is Right Spin and Royal is Left Spin

made an adjustment to Royals Gimmick. instead of Free Spin its gonna have a spring loaded gimmick similar to Volcano

an adjustment might be made to Lucifer Destruction
Nov. 14, 2020  6:17 AM
 
Story Of Lanes Sister: Athena will end with a wholesome, heart-warming and a sweet epilogue after 51 chapters.

Epilogues title will go along the lines of "Aftermath"
Nov. 14, 2020  6:26 AM
 
(Nov. 14, 2020  6:17 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Story Of Lanes Sister: Athena will end with a wholesome, heart-warming and a sweet epilogue after 51 chapters.

Epilogues title will go along the lines of "Aftermath"

Better have everyone die by a meteor.
Nov. 14, 2020  6:35 AM
 
(Nov. 14, 2020  6:26 AM)6Jupiter5 Wrote:
(Nov. 14, 2020  6:17 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Story Of Lanes Sister: Athena will end with a wholesome, heart-warming and a sweet epilogue after 51 chapters.

Epilogues title will go along the lines of "Aftermath"

Better have everyone die by a meteor.

I- i have no words..
Nov. 14, 2020  6:38 AM
 
(Nov. 14, 2020  6:35 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:
(Nov. 14, 2020  6:26 AM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: Better have everyone die by a meteor.

I- i have no words..

Words an’t describe the genius ness that is my ideas.
Nov. 14, 2020  2:03 PM
 
(Nov. 14, 2020  6:38 AM)6Jupiter5 Wrote:
(Nov. 14, 2020  6:35 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: I- i have no words..

Words an’t describe the genius ness that is my ideas.

Yes.
Nov. 14, 2020  9:45 PM
 
Posted this on Wattpad so ima post it here as well

Sorry the new chapter of Story Of Lanes Sister: Athena is taking so long. Recently ive been really stressed and had been severely depressed for the past couple days and that has destroyed my motivation to write anything. I kept it all to myself because I didn't want anyone to worry and bombard me with questions.

Im sorry for no story updates but just know I'm trying my best in my current mental state.
Nov. 14, 2020  9:49 PM
 
(Nov. 14, 2020  9:45 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Posted this on Wattpad so ima post it here as well

Sorry the new chapter of Story Of Lanes Sister: Athena is taking so long. Recently ive been really stressed and had been severely depressed for the past couple days and that has destroyed my motivation to write anything. I kept it all to myself because I didn't want anyone to worry and bombard me with questions.

Im sorry for no story updates but just know I'm trying my best in my current mental state.

Take your time to heal
DeltaZakuro I wanted to draw Heaven. How are the blades shaped? Are they triangles or what? Also what color is it?
Nov. 15, 2020  2:36 AM
 
(Nov. 14, 2020  9:49 PM)6Jupiter5 Wrote:
(Nov. 14, 2020  9:45 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Posted this on Wattpad so ima post it here as well

Sorry the new chapter of Story Of Lanes Sister: Athena is taking so long. Recently ive been really stressed and had been severely depressed for the past couple days and that has destroyed my motivation to write anything. I kept it all to myself because I didn't want anyone to worry and bombard me with questions.

Im sorry for no story updates but just know I'm trying my best in my current mental state.

Take your time to heal
DeltaZakuro I wanted to draw Heaven. How are the blades shaped? Are they triangles or what? Also what color is it?

I'll draw Heaven. I dont exactly trust anyone drawing my beys unless it's for a design contest, and I have no intentions on doing a design contest anytime soon.
Nov. 15, 2020  3:29 AM
 
(Nov. 15, 2020  2:36 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:
(Nov. 14, 2020  9:49 PM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: Take your time to heal
DeltaZakuro I wanted to draw Heaven. How are the blades shaped? Are they triangles or what? Also what color is it?

I'll draw Heaven. I dont exactly trust anyone drawing my beys unless it's for a design contest, and I have no intentions on doing a design contest anytime soon.

This isn’t so much as something I wanted to do for you, but for myself. In other words I just want to draw it as to what I think it would be like for myself and nothing more nothing less.
Nov. 15, 2020  11:24 PM
 
(Oct. 01, 2020  4:24 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: I guess since Athena is the main character of this story, here is some info about her

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There is actually another new character coming so be ready for that.

Adjustments have been made to Athenas Character Bio.
Nov. 15, 2020  11:26 PM
 
(Nov. 15, 2020  11:24 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:
(Oct. 01, 2020  4:24 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: I guess since Athena is the main character of this story, here is some info about her

Spoiler (Click to View)
There is actually another new character coming so be ready for that.

Adjustments have been made to Athenas Character Bio.

can i ask something i hope its ok C: cute smiley face
Nov. 15, 2020  11:34 PM
 
(Nov. 15, 2020  11:26 PM)beykid44 Wrote:
(Nov. 15, 2020  11:24 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: Adjustments have been made to Athenas Character Bio.

can i ask something i hope its ok C: cute smiley face
What is it?
Nov. 15, 2020  11:35 PM
 
(Nov. 15, 2020  11:34 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:
(Nov. 15, 2020  11:26 PM)beykid44 Wrote: can i ask something i hope its ok C: cute smiley face
What is it?

i made a second fanfic could you check it out and tell me ur opinion and which of them is better pls
Nov. 15, 2020  11:39 PM
 
(Nov. 15, 2020  11:35 PM)beykid44 Wrote:
(Nov. 15, 2020  11:34 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote: What is it?

i made a second fanfic could you check it out and tell me ur opinion and which of them is better pls
You asked me if you could ask a question for that?! 

I'll do it later, im kinda busy right now.
Nov. 15, 2020  11:41 PM
 
(Nov. 15, 2020  11:39 PM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:
(Nov. 15, 2020  11:35 PM)beykid44 Wrote: i made a second fanfic could you check it out and tell me ur opinion and which of them is better pls
You asked me if you could ask a question for that?! 

I'll do it later, im kinda busy right now.

Ok Thank ye C:
Nov. 16, 2020  4:45 AM
 
Chapter 5
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Nov. 16, 2020  4:58 AM
 
Why is everyone doing my boy Rantaro dirty.
Nov. 16, 2020  4:59 AM
 
(Nov. 16, 2020  4:58 AM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: Why is everyone doing my boy Rantaro dirty.

Dont worry, Rantaro is gonna get some love this series.
Nov. 16, 2020  5:03 AM
 
(Nov. 16, 2020  4:59 AM)DeltaZakuro Wrote:
(Nov. 16, 2020  4:58 AM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: Why is everyone doing my boy Rantaro dirty.

Dont worry, Rantaro is gonna get some love this series.

If he doesn’t Piplup is going to have something to say about that.
Nov. 16, 2020  5:07 AM
 
if harry dies im going to cri
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