why couldn't you take my word for it.
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midnightSky231  

 

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Since this is disconntinued, before I request this thread to be closed, I summon the story critic. Also, here were some planned beys and key for current names before the critic arrives,

Name key
Dread Pheonix (aka Dead pheonix)
Glyph (Gran)
Lord Spryzen (Axe Spryzen)
Sword Valtryek (Slash valtryek)
Zone Luinor (Slash/Sword Luinor)

Beys planned before discontinuation (aka plenty of months ago) (in the order of appearance)
Union Achillies
Imperial Dragon
Perfect Pheonix
Wizard Fafnir
Master Devolos
And lastly,
Zone Luinor (bey made of full metal)

After the story critic reviews this, close this, thank you.

If your talking about Dt20000, he left the WBO.

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"If I ignore a friend I have the ability to help, wouldn't I be betraying him?" -Killua Zoldyck

Since this is disconntinued, before I request this thread to be closed, I summon the story critic. Also, here were some planned beys and key for current names before the critic arrives,

Name key
Dread Pheonix (aka Dead pheonix)
Glyph (Gran)
Lord Spryzen (Axe Spryzen)
Sword Valtryek (Slash valtryek)
Zone Luinor (Slash/Sword Luinor)

Beys planned before discontinuation (aka plenty of months ago) (in the order of appearance)
Union Achillies
Imperial Dragon
Perfect Pheonix
Wizard Fafnir
Master Devolos
And lastly,
Zone Luinor (bey made of full metal)

After the story critic reviews this, close this, thank you.

If your talking about Dt20000, he left the WBO.

Oh,

If your talking about Dt20000, he left the WBO.

Oh,

You might want to add a few more words to that post, as you aren't supposed to make a one word post.

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"If I ignore a friend I have the ability to help, wouldn't I be betraying him?" -Killua Zoldyck

Oh,

You might want to add a few more words to that post, as you aren't supposed to make a one word post.

My bad dude.

You might want to add a few more words to that post, as you aren't supposed to make a one word post.

My bad dude.

I'm not mad or anything, I'm just trying to help you out.

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"If I ignore a friend I have the ability to help, wouldn't I be betraying him?" -Killua Zoldyck

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Here were the planned events for ark 3

UA vs A, R, and GD (Achillies Breaks Dragon)

WF vs UA (0-3)

pP vs. UA (1-3)

Imperial Dragon is made

UA vs. SV (3-1)

LS vs. UA (2-3 with 3 ties)

Imperial Dragon Crash is made and perfected

ZL vs UA (10-9 with 139 ties)

Luinor gets cracked

MD vs ID (3-5)

ZL vs ID (Luinor breaks)

27 years pass

ZL (Full Metal) vs. ID (4-0)

The end.

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Wait a Minute, Idea! Instead of disconntinuing the story, #Fafnir, will you finish ark 3?

I would like to, but I have a lot of school stuff going on.

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"If I ignore a friend I have the ability to help, wouldn't I be betraying him?" -Killua Zoldyck

Here were the planned events for ark 3

UA vs A, R, and GD (Achillies Breaks Dragon)

WF vs UA (0-3)

pP vs. UA (1-3)

Imperial Dragon is made

UA vs. SV (3-1)

LS vs. UA (2-3 with 3 ties)

Imperial Dragon Crash is made and perfected

ZL vs UA (10-9 with 139 ties)

Luinor gets cracked

MD vs ID (3-5)

ZL vs ID (Luinor breaks)

27 years pass

ZL (Full Metal) vs. ID (4-0)

The end.

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Wait a Minute, Idea! Instead of disconntinuing the story, #Fafnir, will you finish ark 3?

I would like to, but I have a lot of school stuff going on.

 School does matter more, I was messing around anyway.

Since I took the place of new Story critic, I decided to grade my own story. Don't worry, it won't be Biased.

Character Development: C-
Diologue: B-
Grammar: A-
Exciting moments: B-
Chapter Length: C+
Story Juiciness: B

Opinion: I made an ok-ish fan fict, crossing over 2 famous shows. There was little character development, a little diologue, the grammar was great though, few exciting moments, some very short chapters, and medeocre Juiciness. So, I give this a 42/100.

Overall score: 42