[Fan Fiction] Beyblade Burst: VS

GenesisBlader · Jul. 12, 2021 5:51 PM

(Jul. 12, 2021 11:28 AM)Valt Aoi01 Wrote:
(Jul. 12, 2021 11:27 AM)Demon Belial Wrote: Okay... But Fafnir should have give a fight against Baldur. I liked the chapters but still.... Anyways thanks for this overview.

Thnx for the feedback

Chapter 4 is here

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Beyblade Burst: Viking Showdown
Chapter 4 Pefecting the Launch!

Aiden: This is the first ever made VS bey, Viking Ares!!

Drake: That can't be...

Valt: Wait didn't you said you created this system?

Drake: I did! That guy is just lying...

Haruka: We weDrake: Aiden's lab.. He said he was only going to analyze Dragoon.. wait.. So he stole the blueprints from your bag!

Drake: I won't forgive him for what he did... I am going straight to his corporation right now!

Valt: Don't do that.

Drake: huh? But why?

Valt: It's a whole corporation, do you think you can stand up against them all by your own? Besides you don't have any proof to show as well.

Drake: Well I can't just sit here either!

Valt: We will get to them later. Why not we practice together?

Drake: Yeah why not

ValtSmiles)

Haruka: Yeah Drake does need to practice... He don't even know how to lau-

Drake That's enough Haruka! I can win, even if I don't know how to launch... I got this!

Valt: What? You don't know how to launch? You need to learn the basics. Ba-Si-Cs. I remember the day when I couldn't launch Valtryek properly... But know look how much I've grown! Not only me my partner has grown too!(Shows Turbo Vaktryek)

Drake: Partner huh...?

Haruka: Huh? Even you didn't knew how to launch. That means Drake can grow just like you?

Valt: He can even surpass me if he trains harder. But the most important thing is to believe in your bey.

Drake: Fine then. What I have to do first?

Valt: First of all you need to is 200 push-ups and 1000 launches.

(Drake got shocked by how many training he has to do on his first day, but he still agreed to do it)

Drake: F- fine then.... I'll do it! I'll do Whatever it takes to become the best!

(At El Santa, Free was leaving from but suddenly)

Lui: I can't believe this Free...

FreeLooks at Lui) Lui...

Lui: My old friend! You've become great at losing! Maybe even the best! [Laughs like he always laugh(Y'all know how Lui laughs)

Free: Maybe you should take him on, you might be able to put up a better fight against Ben.

Lui: A better fight? I will crush him! And it's been so long I haven't found a prey, Luinor will wreck Baldur!

(Free was leaving without saying a word)

Lui: Tell me one thing Free... Are you really gonna quit blading?

Free: I don't know..... It looks like I have forgotten my own path. I cannot keep up with others... I've forgotten why do I even battle. I just wanna be alone for a while, maybe I'll come back later...

Lui: heh, then I'll be waiting for you Free! Don't lose to anyone else before you battle me.

(Back at BC Sol, Drake completed his training, but it didn't help to improve his launch)

Drake: What am I doing wrong? I even trained as well...

Valt: Looks like you need a break.

Drake: I won't take any break! I have to learn how to launch!!!

Valt: Fine then, come sit with me

(Valt pulls out his phone and shows Drake Shu's picture)

Drake: That's...

Valt: He's Shu, he's my childhood friend!

Drake: I know, I've seen how he battles, Spryzen is an impressive bey...

ValtShows His battle with Lui(Season 1 battle)) He used his right hand and made his bey more stable and faster.

Drake: I see.... I feel like I'm ready Valt! I'm gonna battle you right now!

Valt: Alright then!

(Valt and Drake took their places at the stadium)

Drake: Don't hold back anything.

Valt: I won't!

Drake(thinking): If I can't launch my bey using my left hand, then I'll use my right hand).

Drake:3!2!1!

(Drake Copies Valt's Launch while holding the launcher with his right hand and then launches his bey Vertically, like Crux Boost)

Drake/Valt: Let it rip!!!

(Valtryek's Turbo Wings came out)

(Dragoon spins more rapidly than it usually spins and became more stable)

Drake: Alright! Now Dragoon, send Valtryek out of the stadium!!

(Dragoon heads towards Valtryek and hits it)

[To Be Continued]
I tried to make it a bit longer

Next Chapter's summary

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Explosive Sword! Valtryek!

Dragoon and Valtryek clashes for the first time! Valt shows Valtryek's true strength, Drake asks Dragoon to attack but it refuses!?!?

there's no problem with this chapter, except that it's one of the best i've read! lol

"If you fail to prepare, your prepared to fail." - Mark Spitz

Kiryu Kazuma · Jul. 12, 2021 7:27 PM

(Jul. 12, 2021 5:51 PM)BladeKingX Wrote:
(Jul. 12, 2021 11:28 AM)Valt Aoi01 Wrote: Thnx for the feedback

Chapter 4 is here

Spoiler (Click to View)

Beyblade Burst: Viking Showdown
Chapter 4 Pefecting the Launch!

Aiden: This is the first ever made VS bey, Viking Ares!!

Drake: That can't be...

Valt: Wait didn't you said you created this system?

Drake: I did! That guy is just lying...

Haruka: We weDrake: Aiden's lab.. He said he was only going to analyze Dragoon.. wait.. So he stole the blueprints from your bag!

Drake: I won't forgive him for what he did... I am going straight to his corporation right now!

Valt: Don't do that.

Drake: huh? But why?

Valt: It's a whole corporation, do you think you can stand up against them all by your own? Besides you don't have any proof to show as well.

Drake: Well I can't just sit here either!

Valt: We will get to them later. Why not we practice together?

Drake: Yeah why not

ValtSmiles)

Haruka: Yeah Drake does need to practice... He don't even know how to lau-

Drake That's enough Haruka! I can win, even if I don't know how to launch... I got this!

Valt: What? You don't know how to launch? You need to learn the basics. Ba-Si-Cs. I remember the day when I couldn't launch Valtryek properly... But know look how much I've grown! Not only me my partner has grown too!(Shows Turbo Vaktryek)

Drake: Partner huh...?

Haruka: Huh? Even you didn't knew how to launch. That means Drake can grow just like you?

Valt: He can even surpass me if he trains harder. But the most important thing is to believe in your bey.

Drake: Fine then. What I have to do first?

Valt: First of all you need to is 200 push-ups and 1000 launches.

(Drake got shocked by how many training he has to do on his first day, but he still agreed to do it)

Drake: F- fine then.... I'll do it! I'll do Whatever it takes to become the best!

(At El Santa, Free was leaving from but suddenly)

Lui: I can't believe this Free...

FreeLooks at Lui) Lui...

Lui: My old friend! You've become great at losing! Maybe even the best! [Laughs like he always laugh(Y'all know how Lui laughs)

Free: Maybe you should take him on, you might be able to put up a better fight against Ben.

Lui: A better fight? I will crush him! And it's been so long I haven't found a prey, Luinor will wreck Baldur!

(Free was leaving without saying a word)

Lui: Tell me one thing Free... Are you really gonna quit blading?

Free: I don't know..... It looks like I have forgotten my own path. I cannot keep up with others... I've forgotten why do I even battle. I just wanna be alone for a while, maybe I'll come back later...

Lui: heh, then I'll be waiting for you Free! Don't lose to anyone else before you battle me.

(Back at BC Sol, Drake completed his training, but it didn't help to improve his launch)

Drake: What am I doing wrong? I even trained as well...

Valt: Looks like you need a break.

Drake: I won't take any break! I have to learn how to launch!!!

Valt: Fine then, come sit with me

(Valt pulls out his phone and shows Drake Shu's picture)

Drake: That's...

Valt: He's Shu, he's my childhood friend!

Drake: I know, I've seen how he battles, Spryzen is an impressive bey...

ValtShows His battle with Lui(Season 1 battle)) He used his right hand and made his bey more stable and faster.

Drake: I see.... I feel like I'm ready Valt! I'm gonna battle you right now!

Valt: Alright then!

(Valt and Drake took their places at the stadium)

Drake: Don't hold back anything.

Valt: I won't!

Drake(thinking): If I can't launch my bey using my left hand, then I'll use my right hand).

Drake:3!2!1!

(Drake Copies Valt's Launch while holding the launcher with his right hand and then launches his bey Vertically, like Crux Boost)

Drake/Valt: Let it rip!!!

(Valtryek's Turbo Wings came out)

(Dragoon spins more rapidly than it usually spins and became more stable)

Drake: Alright! Now Dragoon, send Valtryek out of the stadium!!

(Dragoon heads towards Valtryek and hits it)

[To Be Continued]
I tried to make it a bit longer

Next Chapter's summary

Spoiler (Click to View)
Explosive Sword! Valtryek!

Dragoon and Valtryek clashes for the first time! Valt shows Valtryek's true strength, Drake asks Dragoon to attack but it refuses!?!?
there's no problem with this chapter, except that it's one of the best i've read! lol

Thanks, I'm planning to make Chapter 5 more longer and there will be more improvements.

(Jul. 12, 2021 5:43 PM)Demon Belial Wrote:
(Jul. 12, 2021 11:28 AM)Valt Aoi01 Wrote: Thnx for the feedback

Chapter 4 is here

Spoiler (Click to View)

Beyblade Burst: Viking Showdown
Chapter 4 Pefecting the Launch!

Aiden: This is the first ever made VS bey, Viking Ares!!

Drake: That can't be...

Valt: Wait didn't you said you created this system?

Drake: I did! That guy is just lying...

Haruka: We weDrake: Aiden's lab.. He said he was only going to analyze Dragoon.. wait.. So he stole the blueprints from your bag!

Drake: I won't forgive him for what he did... I am going straight to his corporation right now!

Valt: Don't do that.

Drake: huh? But why?

Valt: It's a whole corporation, do you think you can stand up against them all by your own? Besides you don't have any proof to show as well.

Drake: Well I can't just sit here either!

Valt: We will get to them later. Why not we practice together?

Drake: Yeah why not

ValtSmiles)

Haruka: Yeah Drake does need to practice... He don't even know how to lau-

Drake That's enough Haruka! I can win, even if I don't know how to launch... I got this!

Valt: What? You don't know how to launch? You need to learn the basics. Ba-Si-Cs. I remember the day when I couldn't launch Valtryek properly... But know look how much I've grown! Not only me my partner has grown too!(Shows Turbo Vaktryek)

Drake: Partner huh...?

Haruka: Huh? Even you didn't knew how to launch. That means Drake can grow just like you?

Valt: He can even surpass me if he trains harder. But the most important thing is to believe in your bey.

Drake: Fine then. What I have to do first?

Valt: First of all you need to is 200 push-ups and 1000 launches.

(Drake got shocked by how many training he has to do on his first day, but he still agreed to do it)

Drake: F- fine then.... I'll do it! I'll do Whatever it takes to become the best!

(At El Santa, Free was leaving from but suddenly)

Lui: I can't believe this Free...

FreeLooks at Lui) Lui...

Lui: My old friend! You've become great at losing! Maybe even the best! [Laughs like he always laugh(Y'all know how Lui laughs)

Free: Maybe you should take him on, you might be able to put up a better fight against Ben.

Lui: A better fight? I will crush him! And it's been so long I haven't found a prey, Luinor will wreck Baldur!

(Free was leaving without saying a word)

Lui: Tell me one thing Free... Are you really gonna quit blading?

Free: I don't know..... It looks like I have forgotten my own path. I cannot keep up with others... I've forgotten why do I even battle. I just wanna be alone for a while, maybe I'll come back later...

Lui: heh, then I'll be waiting for you Free! Don't lose to anyone else before you battle me.

(Back at BC Sol, Drake completed his training, but it didn't help to improve his launch)

Drake: What am I doing wrong? I even trained as well...

Valt: Looks like you need a break.

Drake: I won't take any break! I have to learn how to launch!!!

Valt: Fine then, come sit with me

(Valt pulls out his phone and shows Drake Shu's picture)

Drake: That's...

Valt: He's Shu, he's my childhood friend!

Drake: I know, I've seen how he battles, Spryzen is an impressive bey...

ValtShows His battle with Lui(Season 1 battle)) He used his right hand and made his bey more stable and faster.

Drake: I see.... I feel like I'm ready Valt! I'm gonna battle you right now!

Valt: Alright then!

(Valt and Drake took their places at the stadium)

Drake: Don't hold back anything.

Valt: I won't!

Drake(thinking): If I can't launch my bey using my left hand, then I'll use my right hand).

Drake:3!2!1!

(Drake Copies Valt's Launch while holding the launcher with his right hand and then launches his bey Vertically, like Crux Boost)

Drake/Valt: Let it rip!!!

(Valtryek's Turbo Wings came out)

(Dragoon spins more rapidly than it usually spins and became more stable)

Drake: Alright! Now Dragoon, send Valtryek out of the stadium!!

(Dragoon heads towards Valtryek and hits it)

[To Be Continued]
I tried to make it a bit longer

Next Chapter's summary

Spoiler (Click to View)
Explosive Sword! Valtryek!

Dragoon and Valtryek clashes for the first time! Valt shows Valtryek's true strength, Drake asks Dragoon to attack but it refuses!?!?
No problem. And I am reading the chapter. So far looks good

I have one request don't make Lui lose to Ben. Lol

lol I'll try

Demon Belial · Jul. 13, 2021 6:08 AM

(Jul. 12, 2021  7:27 PM)Valt Aoi01 Wrote:
(Jul. 12, 2021  5:51 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: there's no problem with this chapter, except that it's one of the best i've read! lol

Thanks, I'm planning to make Chapter 5 more longer and there will be more improvements.

(Jul. 12, 2021  5:43 PM)Demon Belial Wrote: No problem. And I am reading the chapter. So far looks good

I have one request don't make Lui lose to Ben. Lol

lol I'll try

ok

Kiryu Kazuma · Jul. 13, 2021 7:38 AM

Viking Dragoon looks like this

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Demon Belial · Jul. 13, 2021 10:36 AM

(Jul. 13, 2021 7:38 AM)Valt Aoi01 Wrote: Viking Dragoon looks like this

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I tried drawing it on MS paint. I guess it's a lil bit bad

Nice try! The blades looks weird but the chip is cool!

Kiryu Kazuma · Jul. 13, 2021 3:29 PM

Next Chapter's titles:

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I changed chapter 6's name cuz I want to make it more longer

Demon Belial · Jul. 13, 2021 4:59 PM

(Jul. 13, 2021 3:29 PM)Valt Aoi01 Wrote: Next Chapter's titles:

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Chapter 5: Wielder of the Sword of Hope! Valtryek!

Chapter 6: Insanely Strong! Brutal Spiral!

Chapter 7: The Cursed Demon! Spector Satomb!

Chapter 8: Defeat Phi!
I changed chapter 6's name cuz I want to make it more longer

You changed Chapter 5 too. But I like the name of new Satomb

LegendJustice · Jul. 13, 2021 5:00 PM

Hmm look forward t9 it

"From this moment on... You shall be know as Darth Vader" - Palpatine probably

GenesisBlader · Jul. 13, 2021 5:12 PM

wow he's gonna be defeating or attempting to defeat phi! interesting

"If you fail to prepare, your prepared to fail." - Mark Spitz

LegendJustice · Jul. 13, 2021 5:25 PM

I did see some grammar problems in the chapters but this is good!

"From this moment on... You shall be know as Darth Vader" - Palpatine probably

Kiryu Kazuma · Jul. 13, 2021 6:31 PM

(Jul. 13, 2021 5:12 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: wow he's gonna be defeating or attempting to defeat phi! interesting

Yeah, Phi is gonna play a important role for Drake’s development.

Kiryu Kazuma · Jul. 14, 2021 10:15 AM

Chapter 5 is out! (I tried to make the best chapter I've ever posted. Do let me know your thoughts about it)

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This is Ares's Avatar

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Demon Belial · Jul. 14, 2021 12:11 PM

(Jul. 14, 2021 10:15 AM)Valt Aoi01 Wrote: Chapter 5 is out! (I tried to make the best chapter I've ever posted. Do let me know your thoughts about it)

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Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown

Chapter 5: Wielder of the sword of hope! Valtryek!

Drake/Valt: Let it rip!!

Valt: (In his thought): That shoot pose....

(Valtryek's Turbo wings came out)

(Dragoon lands perfectly and more stable and it was ever before and heads towards Valtryek)

Drake: Go! Go! Dragoon!!

(Dragoon clashes with Valtryek)

Valt: Break through, Valtryek!

(Valtryek sends Dragoon flying)

Drake: Hang in there, Dragoon!

(Dragoon hits the wall of the stadium and survived)

Valt: Now it's time for rush launch!

(Valtryek lands a barrage of attacks from the directions.)

Drake: S- so fast....

(Valtryek knocks Dragoon out from the stadium)

Drake: I- it's not over yet!

Valt: Yeah, this time I'm gonna burst Dragoon!

Haruka: Drake, you can do this just focus.

(Drake looks at Dragoon and suddenly he saw him right front of him)

Drake: Dragoon....?

Dragoon: Are you qualified to fight with this Viking Dragoon?

Drake: Qualified to..?

Dragoon: Only the strongest and invincible blader can make use of the Viking Layer.

Drake: I- I'm the strongest I'll prove you!

(Dragoon disappears, then Drake looks at Valt, he saw Valtryek behind him. Then he remembers Aiden's words that Valtryek is the strongest bey in the world despite Aiger being the world champion)

Drake: Valt, I'm gonna beat and prove that I'm the strongest blader!

Valt: Fine then let's do this.

Drake/Valt: 3!2!1! Let it rip!!

(Valtryek's Turbo Wings came out)

(Both Dragoon and Valtryek lands on the stadium and heads towards each other)

Valt: Valtryek, Rush launch!

Drake: I won't let you! Dash launch!

(Both Dragoon and Valtryek uses the slopes of the stadium to land a barrage of attacks. Dragoon and Valtryek keeps on clashing.)

Valt: Is he.... hitting the turbo blades on purpose?!

(Dragoon pushes Valtryek's turbo blades, removing the turbo awakening)

Drake: This time Dragoon is gonna win!

Valt: It's even faster than before...

(Dragoon hits Valtryek and sends it flying)

Drake: All right!

Valt: It's not over yet, Go! Valtryek!!

(Valt and Valtryek's aura shines and Valtryek appears Blazing out from the aura, then Valtryek hits the stadium walls and speeds up)

Drake: Dragoon, It's time to burst Valtryek! Let's go!

(Drake and Dragoon's aura shines and Dragoon appears Blazing out from the aura)

(Dragoon and Valtryek heads towards again)

Drake: Attack, Dragoon!

Valt: Turbo Jet Launch!

(Valtryek and Dragoon clashes and creates a havoc around the entire stadium. It looked like Valtryek's Sword had clashed with Dragoon's Claws)

(Dragoon bursts)

Drake: I- it can't be......(fells down)

Valt: That was such a great battle.

Haruka: Yeah Drake literally gave his best.

(Drake began to sleep while he was lying down)

Haruka: Is he sleeping?

Valt: Yeah, Training and this battle made him very tired.

(At Inferno Corporation)

(Aiden looks at Viking Ares)

Aiden: There's gotta be a secret on this layer.... Mastering this would be very hard. Don't you think so, Ben?

(Ben wasn't even paying attention)

Ben: I think so.

Aiden: What do you think? Of light and darkness... which one will prevail?

Ben: Who knows.

Aiden: I choose Darkness.... the one who can take darkness becomes stronger than anyone could even imagine it.

Ben: The real question is how dark have you gotten.

Aiden: Enough to destroy Valtryek in pieces...

Ben: Well... my ideals are different from yours.(He walks away)

Aiden: (Looks at Ares) Ares.... I'm gonna soon feed you as many darkness as you want. (Breacks into insane laughter)

(Ares screams behind him)

[To be Continued]
This is Ares's Avatar

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Nice and Ares's avatar looks great

Kiryu Kazuma · Jul. 14, 2021 1:32 PM

(Jul. 14, 2021 12:11 PM)Demon Belial Wrote:
(Jul. 14, 2021 10:15 AM)Valt Aoi01 Wrote: Chapter 5 is out! (I tried to make the best chapter I've ever posted. Do let me know your thoughts about it)

Spoiler (Click to View)

Beyblade Burst Viking Showdown

Chapter 5: Wielder of the sword of hope! Valtryek!

Drake/Valt: Let it rip!!

Valt: (In his thought): That shoot pose....

(Valtryek's Turbo wings came out)

(Dragoon lands perfectly and more stable and it was ever before and heads towards Valtryek)

Drake: Go! Go! Dragoon!!

(Dragoon clashes with Valtryek)

Valt: Break through, Valtryek!

(Valtryek sends Dragoon flying)

Drake: Hang in there, Dragoon!

(Dragoon hits the wall of the stadium and survived)

Valt: Now it's time for rush launch!

(Valtryek lands a barrage of attacks from the directions.)

Drake: S- so fast....

(Valtryek knocks Dragoon out from the stadium)

Drake: I- it's not over yet!

Valt: Yeah, this time I'm gonna burst Dragoon!

Haruka: Drake, you can do this just focus.

(Drake looks at Dragoon and suddenly he saw him right front of him)

Drake: Dragoon....?

Dragoon: Are you qualified to fight with this Viking Dragoon?

Drake: Qualified to..?

Dragoon: Only the strongest and invincible blader can make use of the Viking Layer.

Drake: I- I'm the strongest I'll prove you!

(Dragoon disappears, then Drake looks at Valt, he saw Valtryek behind him. Then he remembers Aiden's words that Valtryek is the strongest bey in the world despite Aiger being the world champion)

Drake: Valt, I'm gonna beat and prove that I'm the strongest blader!

Valt: Fine then let's do this.

Drake/Valt: 3!2!1! Let it rip!!

(Valtryek's Turbo Wings came out)

(Both Dragoon and Valtryek lands on the stadium and heads towards each other)

Valt: Valtryek, Rush launch!

Drake: I won't let you! Dash launch!

(Both Dragoon and Valtryek uses the slopes of the stadium to land a barrage of attacks. Dragoon and Valtryek keeps on clashing.)

Valt: Is he.... hitting the turbo blades on purpose?!

(Dragoon pushes Valtryek's turbo blades, removing the turbo awakening)

Drake: This time Dragoon is gonna win!

Valt: It's even faster than before...

(Dragoon hits Valtryek and sends it flying)

Drake: All right!

Valt: It's not over yet, Go! Valtryek!!

(Valt and Valtryek's aura shines and Valtryek appears Blazing out from the aura, then Valtryek hits the stadium walls and speeds up)

Drake: Dragoon, It's time to burst Valtryek! Let's go!

(Drake and Dragoon's aura shines and Dragoon appears Blazing out from the aura)

(Dragoon and Valtryek heads towards again)

Drake: Attack, Dragoon!

Valt: Turbo Jet Launch!

(Valtryek and Dragoon clashes and creates a havoc around the entire stadium. It looked like Valtryek's Sword had clashed with Dragoon's Claws)

(Dragoon bursts)

Drake: I- it can't be......(fells down)

Valt: That was such a great battle.

Haruka: Yeah Drake literally gave his best.

(Drake began to sleep while he was lying down)

Haruka: Is he sleeping?

Valt: Yeah, Training and this battle made him very tired.

(At Inferno Corporation)

(Aiden looks at Viking Ares)

Aiden: There's gotta be a secret on this layer.... Mastering this would be very hard. Don't you think so, Ben?

(Ben wasn't even paying attention)

Ben: I think so.

Aiden: What do you think? Of light and darkness... which one will prevail?

Ben: Who knows.

Aiden: I choose Darkness.... the one who can take darkness becomes stronger than anyone could even imagine it.

Ben: The real question is how dark have you gotten.

Aiden: Enough to destroy Valtryek in pieces...

Ben: Well... my ideals are different from yours.(He walks away)

Aiden: (Looks at Ares) Ares.... I'm gonna soon feed you as many darkness as you want. (Breacks into insane laughter)

(Ares screams behind him)

[To be Continued]
This is Ares's Avatar

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Nice and Ares's avatar looks great

Thanks

Plus Dragoon's Avatar

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Demon Belial · Jul. 14, 2021 3:20 PM

(Jul. 14, 2021 1:32 PM)Valt Aoi01 Wrote:
(Jul. 14, 2021 12:11 PM)Demon Belial Wrote: Nice and Ares's avatar looks great

Thanks

Plus Dragoon's Avatar

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Next Chapter's summary

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Chapter 6: Insanely Strong! Brutal Spiral!

Lui Shirosagi challenges Ben Sumeragi for a burst match! Despite Baldur's Indestructible defence, Luinor was able to move Baldur from the centre, but is it enough?

I guess the title is with Lui's favor

GenesisBlader · Jul. 14, 2021 3:57 PM

(Jul. 14, 2021 3:20 PM)Demon Belial Wrote:
(Jul. 14, 2021 1:32 PM)Valt Aoi01 Wrote: Thanks

Plus Dragoon's Avatar

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Next Chapter's summary

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Chapter 6: Insanely Strong! Brutal Spiral!

Lui Shirosagi challenges Ben Sumeragi for a burst match! Despite Baldur's Indestructible defence, Luinor was able to move Baldur from the centre, but is it enough?
I guess the title is with Lui's favor

bruh if lui wins i might murder free

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"If you fail to prepare, your prepared to fail." - Mark Spitz

Kiryu Kazuma · Jul. 14, 2021 5:58 PM

(Jul. 14, 2021 3:57 PM)BladeKingX Wrote:
(Jul. 14, 2021 3:20 PM)Demon Belial Wrote: I guess the title is with Lui's favor

bruh if lui wins i might murder free
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jk, i MiGhT dO sOmEtHinG mOrE iLlEgAl

I guess I'll make him win.

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Demon Belial · Jul. 14, 2021 7:25 PM

(Jul. 14, 2021 5:58 PM)Valt Aoi01 Wrote:
(Jul. 14, 2021 3:57 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: bruh if lui wins i might murder free
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jk, i MiGhT dO sOmEtHinG mOrE iLlEgAl

I guess I'll make him win.

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I haven't actually decided lol

A suggestion. Make the battle more longer

Kiryu Kazuma · Jul. 15, 2021 6:02 AM

Forget the thing I said about Gamma beys. I will make this an AU

Chapter 6 is out UnseenBurst if you're free, can you rate this chapter?

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Demon Belial · Jul. 15, 2021 2:18 PM

That marshmallow part lol

Kiryu Kazuma · Jul. 15, 2021 2:26 PM

(Jul. 15, 2021 2:18 PM)Demon Belial Wrote: That marshmallow part lol

I'm glad you liked it

GenesisBlader · Jul. 15, 2021 2:49 PM

i liked this episode to! it was really awesome and i thought lui won for a sec, until i saw that it said (Luinor bursts)

"If you fail to prepare, your prepared to fail." - Mark Spitz

Kiryu Kazuma · Jul. 15, 2021 3:35 PM

(Jul. 15, 2021 2:49 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: i liked this episode to! it was really awesome and i thought lui won for a sec, until i saw that it said (Luinor bursts)

Thanks!

And The first arc will end at Chapter 13.

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Demon Belial · Jul. 15, 2021 4:48 PM

Phi too? lol

Kiryu Kazuma · Jul. 15, 2021 5:49 PM

Chapter 7 is here

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It's a Lil bit short cuz I was running out of ideas