[Fan Fiction]  Beyblade Burst: Demonic/Cross Fight

(Oct. 04, 2021  12:30 AM)Lucha Burst Wrote:
(Oct. 03, 2021  11:55 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Why is everyone copying me?! Lol XD

because wattpad

ah yes, wattpad
(Oct. 08, 2021  5:14 PM)LJ-Blader Wrote: Chapter 4 is now called

Tag Team! The Twin Heirs of BC Sol
Hollowmind8 you should probably be interested in this.

But I'm already interested DJ 2002
Chapter 3
The World Tour Begins! Trip to BC Sol!

(Oct. 11, 2021  2:52 PM)LJ-Blader Wrote: Chapter 3
The World Tour Begins! Trip to BC Sol!


Cool, I wonder who that girl at the end is.
About the chapter, I'd say 83/100. (not really in the mood to explain every detail, but you should polish the dialog a little bit (Freyr dialog is good), but nothing really that big)
Chapter 4

Hope everyone enjoys this chapter! I loved writing it!

The Twin Warriors are here!

Characters
Beys
My life got very busy recently so I haven’t been able to write much. So sorry! I am still writing though. Here is the final two arcs for cross fight! :)

Arc 3 Team World Tour!
Episode 15: Teams are Formed! Train to be the Best!
Episode 16: Predator vs. Prey! Pt. 1
Episode 17: Predator vs. Prey! Pt. 2  
Episode 18: The Prophecy! Pt. 1
Episode 19: The Prophecy! Pt. 2
Episode 20: Phoenix’s Revelation!
Episode 21: Dragons in Space? Pt. 1
Episode 22: Dragons in Space? Pt. 2
Episode 23: Five Star Fight! Pt. 1
Episode 24: Five Star Fight! Pt. 2
Episode 25: Darkness Rises Pt. 1
Episode 26: Darkness Rises Pt. 2
Episode 27: The Final Match Up! Pt. 1
Episode 28: The Final Match Up! Pt. 2

Arc 4
Episode 29: The Snake Pit’s Scheme
Episode 30: Evil Force Awakens!
Episode 31: Siblings Squabble!
Episode 32: The Mercenary’s Hunt!
Episode 33: Masters of the Underworld!
Episode 34: Shadows of Destiny Pt. 1
Episode 35: Shadows of Destiny Pt. 2
Okay guess what!

Chapter 5
The Heroes of Legend! Achllies vs. Ares!

(Dec. 03, 2021  2:48 PM)LJ-Blader Wrote: Okay guess what!

Chapter 5
The Heroes of Legend! Achllies vs. Ares!

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Ok so, on the beginning Abigail had Achilles, but in the battle she had Ares... Wat?
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Not in the mood to do a full rating thing, I'd say it is a good chapter, but you can always improve. 7.919/10
Don’t you love auto correct? I will change it…

All fixes!
(Dec. 03, 2021  2:48 PM)LJ-Blader Wrote: Okay guess what!

Chapter 5
The Heroes of Legend! Achllies vs. Ares!


This Chapter was really cool not going to lie. A Battle between Sisters and Ares seems like it'll be a really cool Bey. Percy reminds me of one of my Fanfic Characters but I can't put my finger on it Anyways it was cool to see Vlain and Percy to come watch the match and both of their inspiration to make their Beys was really good. Sorry for the short review but this chapter was cool, it could've been stretched out a bit but so far really good! 7.5/10