lol Delta is always savage
[Fan Fiction] Beyblade Burst Bionic Battle
true that but what about fumiya he said that his litte sister and amane brother can fight
w\in sparkling where is delta that was always a mystery i meen drum/dante came back so what about delta
this is what Jayden from my fan fic looks like https://avachara.com/avatar/snapshot.php
(May. 14, 2021 4:00 PM)Strikegamerv6 Wrote: lol Delta is always savage
w\in sparkling where is delta that was always a mystery i meen drum/dante came back so what about delta
this is what Jayden from my fan fic looks like https://avachara.com/avatar/snapshot.php
Name: Asher Suzuki
Age: 11
Personality: Super friendly loves to battle friends he made his bey based on Apollo because he loved hearing stories about Apollo that his parents read him
Age: 11
Personality: Super friendly loves to battle friends he made his bey based on Apollo because he loved hearing stories about Apollo that his parents read him
(May. 14, 2021 7:44 PM)Strikegamerv6 Wrote: Name: Asher Suzuki
Age: 11
Personality: Super friendly loves to battle friends he made his bey based on Apollo because he loved hearing stories about Apollo that his parents read him
Nice
(May. 14, 2021 7:44 PM)Strikegamerv6 Wrote: Name: Asher Suzuki
Age: 11
Personality: Super friendly loves to battle friends he made his bey based on Apollo because he loved hearing stories about Apollo that his parents read him
im curios about justin
Name: Justin Aoki
Age: 11
Personality: Used to be shy as heck in till he met Asher Suzuki. Asher showed him how to step out of his shell even when he was being bullied. He built Janus based off a show that he and Asher used to watch Called Janus Vs Apollo. Asher and Justin are so close it's like they are brothers.
Age: 11
Personality: Used to be shy as heck in till he met Asher Suzuki. Asher showed him how to step out of his shell even when he was being bullied. He built Janus based off a show that he and Asher used to watch Called Janus Vs Apollo. Asher and Justin are so close it's like they are brothers.
nice i have never met anyone shy
Beyblade Burst Bionic Battle
Chapter 23
Time To Get Serious
Valt: We need to make a plan.
Me: How about I go first!!
Hyuga: But I wanna go first!!
Valt: Well we all have attack types so we have a big advantage!!
Me: Can I please go first!!
Hyuga: Fine.
Valt: Then it’s settled!!
(Would Team Valt come up to the stage your match is starting)
Me: Time to make my debut!!!
Announcer: Alright everyone we have a special match for you!!!! The BC Sol gang Vs The Attacking Musketeers!!!
Free: I’m going first.
Silas: Wait but--
(Free’s eyes flash dangerously)
Rantaro: *Gasps*
Valt: Go out there and win Asher!!!
Me: Oh I will!!
Announcer: Our first match will be Asher Suzuki Vs Free De La Hoya!!!
Me: Isn’t this cool we get to face off again!!!
Free:..
Me: You good bro?
(Free’s eyes flash dangerously)
Free: Get ready!!!
Me: *Gasps*
Ref: First battle!! Ready set!!!
Me/Free: 3 2 1 let it rip!!
Free: Start things off with Gyrate Break!!!
(Fafnir picks up serious speed, Fafnir sends Apollo flying out of the stadium)
Me: Apollo no!!
(Valt catches Apollo, Apollo bursts in his hand)
Ref: It’s Gyrate Fafnir with a ring-out finish!! Free claims one point!!
Free: Go get your bey!!!!
Me: Yeah.
Valt: Here you go!!!
Me: Thanks!! Have any idea why Free was so mad?
Valt: He’s not mad he’s focused. You should be too!!
Hyuga: Yeah you need to break your limits!!
Me: Got it!!
(I enter Hyper Resonance)
Free: You ready!!
Me: (No Comment)
(Free’s Thoughts) Finally, he’s in the zone!!
Ref: Second battle!! Ready set!!
Me/Free: 3 2 1 let it rip!!!
Announcer: Both beys start off strong!! Apollo and Fafnir start accelerating out of who knows where!!!
Me: Nexus Launch!!!
Free: Gyrate Break!!!
(Apollo dodges Fafnir)
Announcer: Apollo just dodges Fafnir with its high speed!!!
Free: Fafnir!!!
(Free enters Hyper Resonance, Fafnir enters Hyper Flare)
Apollo: Let’s go, Asher!!!
Me: Yeah!!
(I enter Hyper Resonance, Apollo enters Hyper Flare)
Free: Gyrate Claw!!!!
Me: Nexus Recoil!!!
(Both beys hit each other out of the stadium)
Me/Free: *Gasps*
Announcer: After they hit each other with the attacks of the century it ends in a draw!! Wait the referee has not made a call!!
Ref: Commence replay!!!
(Screen replays battle)
Me: Come on.
(Screen shows that Fafnir landed first)
Ref: It’s Phoebus Apollo with a ring-out finish 1 point!!
Hyuga: He broke his limits!!!!
Valt: That’s Asher for you!!
(Free roars)
Me: *Gasps*
Free: I am taking you down in the next battle!!!
Me: Not gonna happen!!
Ref: Third battle!! Ready set!!
Me/Free: 3 2 1 let it rip!!
Me: Nexus Force!!!
Free: Gyrate Break!!!
Announcer: Both beys start off accelerating out of this world!!
(Enormous Explosion occurs)
Me: Apollo!!!
(I enter Hyper Resonance, Apollo starts radiating Hyper Flare)
Harry: *Gasps*
Free: Fafnir!!!
(Free enters Hyper Resonance, Fafnir enters Hyper Flare)
Me: Nexus Whip!!!
Free: Gyrate Spin!!!
(Fafnir starts spinning faster)
Me: End this!! Nexus Recoil Impact!!!
(Apollo sends Fafnir flying out of the stadium)
Free: *Gasps*
Ref: It’s Phoebus Apollo with a ring-out finish. Asher Suzuki wins with a score of 2-1!!!
Me: I won!?
Valt: You sure did!!
Free: GG man you did it.
Me: You taught me how to stay focused during battle to become stronger!!
Free: Not my idea.
Me: Wait what?
Free: Valt knew you could become stronger but you needed to stay focused.
Valt: Nice job Free!!
(Free walks back)
Silas: I am going up to crush them!!
Free: Go get us the lead!!
Hyuga: Time to go zoom!!
Valt: Go out there and win!!
Announcer: Silas Karslile Vs Hyuga Hizashai!!! This battle is going to be sweet!!
Silas: You're not beating me again!!
Hyuga: I am going to break all my limits!!
Ref: First battle!! Ready set!!!
Silas/Hyuga: 3 2 1 let it rip!!
Silas: Satomb take the center!!!
Hyuga: Kabam!!!
Announcer: Satomb takes the center to brush off Hyperion’s wild flurry of attacks!!!!
Silas: I’m not going to lose!!!
(Hyperion hits Satomb off balance)
Silas: Satomb!!!!
(Silas enters Hyper Resonance, Satomb enters Hyper Flare)
Hyuga: What the!?
Silas: Jinx Drift!!!
(Satomb sends Hyperion flying)
Hyuga: Hyperion!!!
(Hyuga enters Hyper Resonance, Hyperion enters Hyper Flare)
Silas: Not gonna happen!! Roller defense!!!
Hyuga: Inferno Strike!!!
(Hyperion speeds up, Satomb bursts)
Ref: Inferno Hyperion with a burst finish!! Hyuga Hizashi wins!!
Announcer: Team Valt is now in the lead with 2 wins!! If they win the Tag Battle
Hyuga: I won!!!
Silas: Grrr!!!
Rantaro: Don’t worry we will win the Tag Battles!!!
Free: Rantaro and Silas you're going up.
Rantaro: I’m going to win!!!
Silas: Don’t lose!!!
Valt: So I’m going up but who’s going with me!!
Hyuga: Asher is!!
Me: *gasps*
Hyuga: You're going to do great!!
Me: Thanks Hyuga!!
Announcer: Alright for our tag battle we will be doing Valt and Asher!!
Vs Rantaro and Silas!! Let’s begin!!
Summary for Chapter 24
Chapter 23
Time To Get Serious
Valt: We need to make a plan.
Me: How about I go first!!
Hyuga: But I wanna go first!!
Valt: Well we all have attack types so we have a big advantage!!
Me: Can I please go first!!
Hyuga: Fine.
Valt: Then it’s settled!!
(Would Team Valt come up to the stage your match is starting)
Me: Time to make my debut!!!
Announcer: Alright everyone we have a special match for you!!!! The BC Sol gang Vs The Attacking Musketeers!!!
Free: I’m going first.
Silas: Wait but--
(Free’s eyes flash dangerously)
Rantaro: *Gasps*
Valt: Go out there and win Asher!!!
Me: Oh I will!!
Announcer: Our first match will be Asher Suzuki Vs Free De La Hoya!!!
Me: Isn’t this cool we get to face off again!!!
Free:..
Me: You good bro?
(Free’s eyes flash dangerously)
Free: Get ready!!!
Me: *Gasps*
Ref: First battle!! Ready set!!!
Me/Free: 3 2 1 let it rip!!
Free: Start things off with Gyrate Break!!!
(Fafnir picks up serious speed, Fafnir sends Apollo flying out of the stadium)
Me: Apollo no!!
(Valt catches Apollo, Apollo bursts in his hand)
Ref: It’s Gyrate Fafnir with a ring-out finish!! Free claims one point!!
Free: Go get your bey!!!!
Me: Yeah.
Valt: Here you go!!!
Me: Thanks!! Have any idea why Free was so mad?
Valt: He’s not mad he’s focused. You should be too!!
Hyuga: Yeah you need to break your limits!!
Me: Got it!!
(I enter Hyper Resonance)
Free: You ready!!
Me: (No Comment)
(Free’s Thoughts) Finally, he’s in the zone!!
Ref: Second battle!! Ready set!!
Me/Free: 3 2 1 let it rip!!!
Announcer: Both beys start off strong!! Apollo and Fafnir start accelerating out of who knows where!!!
Me: Nexus Launch!!!
Free: Gyrate Break!!!
(Apollo dodges Fafnir)
Announcer: Apollo just dodges Fafnir with its high speed!!!
Free: Fafnir!!!
(Free enters Hyper Resonance, Fafnir enters Hyper Flare)
Apollo: Let’s go, Asher!!!
Me: Yeah!!
(I enter Hyper Resonance, Apollo enters Hyper Flare)
Free: Gyrate Claw!!!!
Me: Nexus Recoil!!!
(Both beys hit each other out of the stadium)
Me/Free: *Gasps*
Announcer: After they hit each other with the attacks of the century it ends in a draw!! Wait the referee has not made a call!!
Ref: Commence replay!!!
(Screen replays battle)
Me: Come on.
(Screen shows that Fafnir landed first)
Ref: It’s Phoebus Apollo with a ring-out finish 1 point!!
Hyuga: He broke his limits!!!!
Valt: That’s Asher for you!!
(Free roars)
Me: *Gasps*
Free: I am taking you down in the next battle!!!
Me: Not gonna happen!!
Ref: Third battle!! Ready set!!
Me/Free: 3 2 1 let it rip!!
Me: Nexus Force!!!
Free: Gyrate Break!!!
Announcer: Both beys start off accelerating out of this world!!
(Enormous Explosion occurs)
Me: Apollo!!!
(I enter Hyper Resonance, Apollo starts radiating Hyper Flare)
Harry: *Gasps*
Free: Fafnir!!!
(Free enters Hyper Resonance, Fafnir enters Hyper Flare)
Me: Nexus Whip!!!
Free: Gyrate Spin!!!
(Fafnir starts spinning faster)
Me: End this!! Nexus Recoil Impact!!!
(Apollo sends Fafnir flying out of the stadium)
Free: *Gasps*
Ref: It’s Phoebus Apollo with a ring-out finish. Asher Suzuki wins with a score of 2-1!!!
Me: I won!?
Valt: You sure did!!
Free: GG man you did it.
Me: You taught me how to stay focused during battle to become stronger!!
Free: Not my idea.
Me: Wait what?
Free: Valt knew you could become stronger but you needed to stay focused.
Valt: Nice job Free!!
(Free walks back)
Silas: I am going up to crush them!!
Free: Go get us the lead!!
Hyuga: Time to go zoom!!
Valt: Go out there and win!!
Announcer: Silas Karslile Vs Hyuga Hizashai!!! This battle is going to be sweet!!
Silas: You're not beating me again!!
Hyuga: I am going to break all my limits!!
Ref: First battle!! Ready set!!!
Silas/Hyuga: 3 2 1 let it rip!!
Silas: Satomb take the center!!!
Hyuga: Kabam!!!
Announcer: Satomb takes the center to brush off Hyperion’s wild flurry of attacks!!!!
Silas: I’m not going to lose!!!
(Hyperion hits Satomb off balance)
Silas: Satomb!!!!
(Silas enters Hyper Resonance, Satomb enters Hyper Flare)
Hyuga: What the!?
Silas: Jinx Drift!!!
(Satomb sends Hyperion flying)
Hyuga: Hyperion!!!
(Hyuga enters Hyper Resonance, Hyperion enters Hyper Flare)
Silas: Not gonna happen!! Roller defense!!!
Hyuga: Inferno Strike!!!
(Hyperion speeds up, Satomb bursts)
Ref: Inferno Hyperion with a burst finish!! Hyuga Hizashi wins!!
Announcer: Team Valt is now in the lead with 2 wins!! If they win the Tag Battle
Hyuga: I won!!!
Silas: Grrr!!!
Rantaro: Don’t worry we will win the Tag Battles!!!
Free: Rantaro and Silas you're going up.
Rantaro: I’m going to win!!!
Silas: Don’t lose!!!
Valt: So I’m going up but who’s going with me!!
Hyuga: Asher is!!
Me: *gasps*
Hyuga: You're going to do great!!
Me: Thanks Hyuga!!
Announcer: Alright for our tag battle we will be doing Valt and Asher!!
Vs Rantaro and Silas!! Let’s begin!!
Summary for Chapter 24
Spoiler (Click to View)
(May. 15, 2021 8:49 PM)Strikegamerv6 Wrote: Beyblade Burst Bionic Battle
Chapter 23
Time To Get Serious
Valt: We need to make a plan.
Me: How about I go first!!
Hyuga: But I wanna go first!!
Valt: Well we all have attack types so we have a big advantage!!
Me: Can I please go first!!
Hyuga: Fine.
Valt: Then it’s settled!!
(Would Team Valt come up to the stage your match is starting)
Me: Time to make my debut!!!
Announcer: Alright everyone we have a special match for you!!!! The BC Sol gang Vs The Attacking Musketeers!!!
Free: I’m going first.
Silas: Wait but--
(Free’s eyes flash dangerously)
Rantaro: *Gasps*
Valt: Go out there and win Asher!!!
Me: Oh I will!!
Announcer: Our first match will be Asher Suzuki Vs Free De La Hoya!!!
Me: Isn’t this cool we get to face off again!!!
Free:..
Me: You good bro?
(Free’s eyes flash dangerously)
Free: Get ready!!!
Me: *Gasps*
Ref: First battle!! Ready set!!!
Me/Free: 3 2 1 let it rip!!
Free: Start things off with Gyrate Break!!!
(Fafnir picks up serious speed, Fafnir sends Apollo flying out of the stadium)
Me: Apollo no!!
(Valt catches Apollo, Apollo bursts in his hand)
Ref: It’s Gyrate Fafnir with a ring-out finish!! Free claims one point!!
Free: Go get your bey!!!!
Me: Yeah.
Valt: Here you go!!!
Me: Thanks!! Have any idea why Free was so mad?
Valt: He’s not mad he’s focused. You should be too!!
Hyuga: Yeah you need to break your limits!!
Me: Got it!!
(I enter Hyper Resonance)
Free: You ready!!
Me: (No Comment)
(Free’s Thoughts) Finally, he’s in the zone!!
Ref: Second battle!! Ready set!!
Me/Free: 3 2 1 let it rip!!!
Announcer: Both beys start off strong!! Apollo and Fafnir start accelerating out of who knows where!!!
Me: Nexus Launch!!!
Free: Gyrate Break!!!
(Apollo dodges Fafnir)
Announcer: Apollo just dodges Fafnir with its high speed!!!
Free: Fafnir!!!
(Free enters Hyper Resonance, Fafnir enters Hyper Flare)
Apollo: Let’s go, Asher!!!
Me: Yeah!!
(I enter Hyper Resonance, Apollo enters Hyper Flare)
Free: Gyrate Claw!!!!
Me: Nexus Recoil!!!
(Both beys hit each other out of the stadium)
Me/Free: *Gasps*
Announcer: After they hit each other with the attacks of the century it ends in a draw!! Wait the referee has not made a call!!
Ref: Commence replay!!!
(Screen replays battle)
Me: Come on.
(Screen shows that Fafnir landed first)
Ref: It’s Phoebus Apollo with a ring-out finish 1 point!!
Hyuga: He broke his limits!!!!
Valt: That’s Asher for you!!
(Free roars)
Me: *Gasps*
Free: I am taking you down in the next battle!!!
Me: Not gonna happen!!
Ref: Third battle!! Ready set!!
Me/Free: 3 2 1 let it rip!!
Me: Nexus Force!!!
Free: Gyrate Break!!!
Announcer: Both beys start off accelerating out of this world!!
(Enormous Explosion occurs)
Me: Apollo!!!
(I enter Hyper Resonance, Apollo starts radiating Hyper Flare)
Harry: *Gasps*
Free: Fafnir!!!
(Free enters Hyper Resonance, Fafnir enters Hyper Flare)
Me: Nexus Whip!!!
Free: Gyrate Spin!!!
(Fafnir starts spinning faster)
Me: End this!! Nexus Recoil Impact!!!
(Apollo sends Fafnir flying out of the stadium)
Free: *Gasps*
Ref: It’s Phoebus Apollo with a ring-out finish. Asher Suzuki wins with a score of 2-1!!!
Me: I won!?
Valt: You sure did!!
Free: GG man you did it.
Me: You taught me how to stay focused during battle to become stronger!!
Free: Not my idea.
Me: Wait what?
Free: Valt knew you could become stronger but you needed to stay focused.
Valt: Nice job Free!!
(Free walks back)
Silas: I am going up to crush them!!
Free: Go get us the lead!!
Hyuga: Time to go zoom!!
Valt: Go out there and win!!
Announcer: Silas Karslile Vs Hyuga Hizashai!!! This battle is going to be sweet!!
Silas: You're not beating me again!!
Hyuga: I am going to break all my limits!!
Ref: First battle!! Ready set!!!
Silas/Hyuga: 3 2 1 let it rip!!
Silas: Satomb take the center!!!
Hyuga: Kabam!!!
Announcer: Satomb takes the center to brush off Hyperion’s wild flurry of attacks!!!!
Silas: I’m not going to lose!!!
(Hyperion hits Satomb off balance)
Silas: Satomb!!!!
(Silas enters Hyper Resonance, Satomb enters Hyper Flare)
Hyuga: What the!?
Silas: Jinx Drift!!!
(Satomb sends Hyperion flying)
Hyuga: Hyperion!!!
(Hyuga enters Hyper Resonance, Hyperion enters Hyper Flare)
Silas: Not gonna happen!! Roller defense!!!
Hyuga: Inferno Strike!!!
(Hyperion speeds up, Satomb bursts)
Ref: Inferno Hyperion with a burst finish!! Hyuga Hizashi wins!!
Announcer: Team Valt is now in the lead with 2 wins!! If they win the Tag Battle
Hyuga: I won!!!
Silas: Grrr!!!
Rantaro: Don’t worry we will win the Tag Battles!!!
Free: Rantaro and Silas you're going up.
Rantaro: I’m going to win!!!
Silas: Don’t lose!!!
Valt: So I’m going up but who’s going with me!!
Hyuga: Asher is!!
Me: *gasps*
Hyuga: You're going to do great!!
Me: Thanks Hyuga!!
Announcer: Alright for our tag battle we will be doing Valt and Asher!!
Vs Rantaro and Silas!! Let’s begin!!
Summary for Chapter 24Spoiler (Click to View)
Free is not the type of guy who would say gg or go get your bey he would say good job of something like that besides that good job strike
(May. 15, 2021 9:47 PM)JJustice Wrote:(May. 15, 2021 8:49 PM)Strikegamerv6 Wrote: Beyblade Burst Bionic Battle
Chapter 23
Time To Get Serious
Valt: We need to make a plan.
Me: How about I go first!!
Hyuga: But I wanna go first!!
Valt: Well we all have attack types so we have a big advantage!!
Me: Can I please go first!!
Hyuga: Fine.
Valt: Then it’s settled!!
(Would Team Valt come up to the stage your match is starting)
Me: Time to make my debut!!!
Announcer: Alright everyone we have a special match for you!!!! The BC Sol gang Vs The Attacking Musketeers!!!
Free: I’m going first.
Silas: Wait but--
(Free’s eyes flash dangerously)
Rantaro: *Gasps*
Valt: Go out there and win Asher!!!
Me: Oh I will!!
Announcer: Our first match will be Asher Suzuki Vs Free De La Hoya!!!
Me: Isn’t this cool we get to face off again!!!
Free:..
Me: You good bro?
(Free’s eyes flash dangerously)
Free: Get ready!!!
Me: *Gasps*
Ref: First battle!! Ready set!!!
Me/Free: 3 2 1 let it rip!!
Free: Start things off with Gyrate Break!!!
(Fafnir picks up serious speed, Fafnir sends Apollo flying out of the stadium)
Me: Apollo no!!
(Valt catches Apollo, Apollo bursts in his hand)
Ref: It’s Gyrate Fafnir with a ring-out finish!! Free claims one point!!
Free: Go get your bey!!!!
Me: Yeah.
Valt: Here you go!!!
Me: Thanks!! Have any idea why Free was so mad?
Valt: He’s not mad he’s focused. You should be too!!
Hyuga: Yeah you need to break your limits!!
Me: Got it!!
(I enter Hyper Resonance)
Free: You ready!!
Me: (No Comment)
(Free’s Thoughts) Finally, he’s in the zone!!
Ref: Second battle!! Ready set!!
Me/Free: 3 2 1 let it rip!!!
Announcer: Both beys start off strong!! Apollo and Fafnir start accelerating out of who knows where!!!
Me: Nexus Launch!!!
Free: Gyrate Break!!!
(Apollo dodges Fafnir)
Announcer: Apollo just dodges Fafnir with its high speed!!!
Free: Fafnir!!!
(Free enters Hyper Resonance, Fafnir enters Hyper Flare)
Apollo: Let’s go, Asher!!!
Me: Yeah!!
(I enter Hyper Resonance, Apollo enters Hyper Flare)
Free: Gyrate Claw!!!!
Me: Nexus Recoil!!!
(Both beys hit each other out of the stadium)
Me/Free: *Gasps*
Announcer: After they hit each other with the attacks of the century it ends in a draw!! Wait the referee has not made a call!!
Ref: Commence replay!!!
(Screen replays battle)
Me: Come on.
(Screen shows that Fafnir landed first)
Ref: It’s Phoebus Apollo with a ring-out finish 1 point!!
Hyuga: He broke his limits!!!!
Valt: That’s Asher for you!!
(Free roars)
Me: *Gasps*
Free: I am taking you down in the next battle!!!
Me: Not gonna happen!!
Ref: Third battle!! Ready set!!
Me/Free: 3 2 1 let it rip!!
Me: Nexus Force!!!
Free: Gyrate Break!!!
Announcer: Both beys start off accelerating out of this world!!
(Enormous Explosion occurs)
Me: Apollo!!!
(I enter Hyper Resonance, Apollo starts radiating Hyper Flare)
Harry: *Gasps*
Free: Fafnir!!!
(Free enters Hyper Resonance, Fafnir enters Hyper Flare)
Me: Nexus Whip!!!
Free: Gyrate Spin!!!
(Fafnir starts spinning faster)
Me: End this!! Nexus Recoil Impact!!!
(Apollo sends Fafnir flying out of the stadium)
Free: *Gasps*
Ref: It’s Phoebus Apollo with a ring-out finish. Asher Suzuki wins with a score of 2-1!!!
Me: I won!?
Valt: You sure did!!
Free: GG man you did it.
Me: You taught me how to stay focused during battle to become stronger!!
Free: Not my idea.
Me: Wait what?
Free: Valt knew you could become stronger but you needed to stay focused.
Valt: Nice job Free!!
(Free walks back)
Silas: I am going up to crush them!!
Free: Go get us the lead!!
Hyuga: Time to go zoom!!
Valt: Go out there and win!!
Announcer: Silas Karslile Vs Hyuga Hizashai!!! This battle is going to be sweet!!
Silas: You're not beating me again!!
Hyuga: I am going to break all my limits!!
Ref: First battle!! Ready set!!!
Silas/Hyuga: 3 2 1 let it rip!!
Silas: Satomb take the center!!!
Hyuga: Kabam!!!
Announcer: Satomb takes the center to brush off Hyperion’s wild flurry of attacks!!!!
Silas: I’m not going to lose!!!
(Hyperion hits Satomb off balance)
Silas: Satomb!!!!
(Silas enters Hyper Resonance, Satomb enters Hyper Flare)
Hyuga: What the!?
Silas: Jinx Drift!!!
(Satomb sends Hyperion flying)
Hyuga: Hyperion!!!
(Hyuga enters Hyper Resonance, Hyperion enters Hyper Flare)
Silas: Not gonna happen!! Roller defense!!!
Hyuga: Inferno Strike!!!
(Hyperion speeds up, Satomb bursts)
Ref: Inferno Hyperion with a burst finish!! Hyuga Hizashi wins!!
Announcer: Team Valt is now in the lead with 2 wins!! If they win the Tag Battle
Hyuga: I won!!!
Silas: Grrr!!!
Rantaro: Don’t worry we will win the Tag Battles!!!
Free: Rantaro and Silas you're going up.
Rantaro: I’m going to win!!!
Silas: Don’t lose!!!
Valt: So I’m going up but who’s going with me!!
Hyuga: Asher is!!
Me: *gasps*
Hyuga: You're going to do great!!
Me: Thanks Hyuga!!
Announcer: Alright for our tag battle we will be doing Valt and Asher!!
Vs Rantaro and Silas!! Let’s begin!!
Summary for Chapter 24Spoiler (Click to View)
Free is not the type of guy who would say gg or go get your bey he would say good job of something like that besides that good job strike
So I added some intense Dioluoge because Free wanted to show him how to get serious so he was acting not actually serious
On ok 👌good job with this chapter
(May. 15, 2021 8:49 PM)Strikegamerv6 Wrote: Beyblade Burst Bionic Battle
Chapter 23
Time To Get Serious
Summary for Chapter 24Spoiler (Click to View)
This is my first ever rating so I might not do to well:
Plot 3/5: Overall the plot development has improved a lot but, this chapter did not have much effect of the plot. (And that's okay.)
Character 4/5: Again, major improvement. The reason you didn't get perfect was mentioned by JJustice.
Description 1/5: Pretty much no description.
Battles 3/5: Again, could use more description.
Dialogue 5/5: There was alot of good dialogue. WE NEED LESS GRRS.
16/25
Overall, not your best chapter.
alright here is my rating
plot 4/5 there was somthing about i just did not under stand
Character 4/5: on this one i agree with USN
Description 2/5: i did not get anything from it
Battles 4/5; i like the battles but some times they can be way to long
grammer 5/5: I LOVE THE GRRR
15/20
need a little improvement
plot 4/5 there was somthing about i just did not under stand
Character 4/5: on this one i agree with USN
Description 2/5: i did not get anything from it
Battles 4/5; i like the battles but some times they can be way to long
grammer 5/5: I LOVE THE GRRR
15/20
need a little improvement
Chapter 24's name has been revealed
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(May. 17, 2021 4:11 PM)Strikegamerv6 Wrote: Chapter 24's name has been revealedok i'm pumpedSpoiler (Click to View)
Chapter 24 is out!!!
All of you are free to rate
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All of you are free to rate
kk im gonna start reading it hope its good
(May. 17, 2021 6:51 PM)Strikegamerv6 Wrote: Chapter 24 is out!!! [Spoiler] Beyblade Burst Bionic Battle
Chapter 24
Guts Vs Strategy
Announcer: Valt Aoi and Asher Suzuki have the face of victory on their faces!!
All of you are free to rate
Here's my rating
Dialogue 4/5: It's good, but not great.
Plot 3/5: Not much happened besides the battles. It needs some spicing up.
Characters 5/5: They have a lot of character.
Description 2/5: The battles are descriptive but nothing else. How about describing the setting?
Battles 5/5: Excellent battles.
19/25
(May. 17, 2021 6:51 PM)Strikegamerv6 Wrote: Chapter 24 is out!!!Spoiler (Click to View)
All of you are free to rate
lets be honest i love it
(May. 17, 2021 7:03 PM)USN Wrote:Ok if you were to edit this what would you change or add so I can get a better Idea of what to do next time(May. 17, 2021 6:51 PM)Strikegamerv6 Wrote: Chapter 24 is out!!! [Spoiler] Beyblade Burst Bionic Battle
Chapter 24
Guts Vs Strategy
Announcer: Valt Aoi and Asher Suzuki have the face of victory on their faces!!
All of you are free to rate
Here's my rating
Dialogue 4/5: It's good, but not great.
Plot 3/5: Not much happened besides the battles. It needs some spicing up.
Characters 5/5: They have a lot of character.
Description 2/5: The battles are descriptive but nothing else. How about describing the setting?
Battles 5/5: Excellent battles.
19/25
(May. 17, 2021 7:06 PM)Strikegamerv6 Wrote:(May. 17, 2021 7:03 PM)USN Wrote: Here's my ratingOk if you were to edit this what would you change or add so I can get a better Idea of what to do next time
Dialogue 4/5: It's good, but not great.
Plot 3/5: Not much happened besides the battles. It needs some spicing up.
Characters 5/5: They have a lot of character.
Description 2/5: The battles are descriptive but nothing else. How about describing the setting?
Battles 5/5: Excellent battles.
19/25
That is an excellent question.
For the Plot, make something like a character getting injured.
Description, What does the arena area look like?
otherwise, your almost perfect.
K I will try to incorporate that
so fart so good you should try somehting like justin and asher get founded by a team
LOL FAR* i did not mean fart
LOL FAR* i did not mean fart
(May. 17, 2021 7:33 PM)USN Wrote:(May. 17, 2021 7:24 PM)Strikegamerv6 Wrote: K I will try to incorporate that
Thanks!
BTW I know I have had a lot of criticism, but I really enjoy your Fan-Fic! (:
It is not critsimism it is the feedback that's what good friends do (Yes your my friend to Justice)
Chapter 25 Summary/Name
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Thank you strike
And you can call me J when you not pinging me
And you can call me J when you not pinging me