[Fan Fiction]  Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu

(Jul. 30, 2021  10:27 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: We are gathered here today to celebrate the best bey that ever was created, Hydro Poseidon, he was a friend and companion, and dare I say, Family, he was slain at the hands of Vile Overlord crushing it against the wall and broke. Poseidon always gave guidance and was a good friend to us all, he taught us all the true meaning of Beyblade. *Cries*

*sadness*
*cries* Yes we're all here to celebrate him.... He was a friend a Rival and family...

UnseenBurst this is how I pictured Poseidon 's avatar https://www.bing.com/images/search?view=...tedIndex=9 when he broke
(Jul. 30, 2021  10:33 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: *cries* Yes we're all here to celebrate him.... He was a friend a Rival and family...

UnseenBurst this is how I pictured Poseidon 's avatar https://www.bing.com/images/search?view=...tedIndex=9 when he broke

That's very accurate, if I wrote on Wattpad I'd probably use that for its avatar.
(Jul. 30, 2021  10:27 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: We are gathered here today to celebrate the best bey that ever was created, Hydro Poseidon, he was a friend and companion, and dare I say, Family, he was slain at the hands of Vile Overlord crushing it against the wall and broke. Poseidon always gave guidance and was a good friend to us all, he taught us all the true meaning of Beyblade. *Cries*

*Cries* Hydro Poseidon will be remembered...
(Jul. 30, 2021  10:52 PM)BladeKingX Wrote:
(Jul. 30, 2021  10:27 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: We are gathered here today to celebrate the best bey that ever was created, Hydro Poseidon, he was a friend and companion, and dare I say, Family, he was slain at the hands of Vile Overlord crushing it against the wall and broke. Poseidon always gave guidance and was a good friend to us all, he taught us all the true meaning of Beyblade. *Cries*

*Cries* Hydro Poseidon will be remembered...

What was it's combo? I don't remember and I can't find it either
(Jul. 30, 2021  10:58 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote:
(Jul. 30, 2021  10:52 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: *Cries* Hydro Poseidon will be remembered...

What was it's combo? I don't remember and I can't find it either

I think it was Hydro Poseidon M1A Flood
(Jul. 30, 2021  10:27 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: We are gathered here today to celebrate the best bey that ever was created, Hydro Poseidon, he was a friend and companion, and dare I say, Family, he was slain at the hands of Vile Overlord crushing it against the wall and broke. Poseidon always gave guidance and was a good friend to us all, he taught us all the true meaning of Beyblade
*The Next Day*

Poseidon: I'm back
Chapter 36 has been found in the depths of the seas but by who? Smile
Please rate if you can or want to, I feel like this is one of my best chapters ever.
(Jul. 31, 2021  6:24 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Chapter 36 has been found in the depths of the seas but by who? Smile
Please rate if you can or want to, I feel like this is one of my best chapters ever.

I'll rate it.
I’ll rate after I read the chapter!
this chapter was awesome!

also the reason whyy i was so late to rate is because I was reading a harry potter book at the time
(Jul. 31, 2021  6:26 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote:
(Jul. 31, 2021  6:24 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Chapter 36 has been found in the depths of the seas but by who? Smile
Please rate if you can or want to, I feel like this is one of my best chapters ever.

I'll rate it.

(Jul. 31, 2021  6:29 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: I’ll rate after I read the chapter!

Go for it
UnseenBurst
Grammar: 4.1/5 I noticed some mistakes but not that much good job!

Characters: 5/5 I liked it you brought them to life just felt like we’re seeing less and less of Pam…

Diolouge: 4/5 So I felt like the switch with Valt then Percy was cool but I felt like the one with Valt was short…

Plot: 5/5 it was very easy to find out where they were and stuff!

Writing: 5/5 it’s nice and most likely to be understood by a 14 year old and under! Or more ages!

Length: 5/5 It was awesome it wasn’t super long which is good and you have everything you needed!

Over all: 28/30 You are getting way better! Keep it up!
Plot: 4/5, Valt is gonna challenge Oribe, which is great! (But it feels like it something similar happened in Turbo)

Dailouge: 5/5, I liked it.(The best part was "you can bet your deers on it").

Battle: 4/5, It was good, But Percy's match was a lil bit short.

Characterization: 4/5, Not bad I liked how you handeled Shu.

Overall 17/20, It was a nice Chapter.
(Jul. 31, 2021  6:51 PM)LegendJustice Wrote: UnseenBurst
Grammar: 4.1/5 I noticed some mistakes but not that much good job!

Characters: 5/5 I liked it you brought them to life just felt like we’re seeing less and less of Pam…

Diolouge: 4/5 So I felt like the switch with Valt then Percy was cool but I felt like the one with Valt was short…

Plot: 5/5 it was very easy to find out where they were and stuff!

Writing: 5/5 it’s nice and most likely to be understood by a 14 year old and under! Or more ages!

Length: 5/5 It was awesome it wasn’t super long which is good and you have everything you needed!

Over all: 28/30 You are getting way better! Keep it up!

(Jul. 31, 2021  6:53 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote: Plot: 4/5, Valt is gonna challenge Oribe, which is great! (But it feels like it something similar happened in Turbo)

Dailouge: 5/5, I liked it.(The best part was "you can bet your deers on it").

Battle: 4/5, It was good, But Percy's match was a lil bit short.

Characterization: 4/5, Not bad I liked how you handeled Shu.

Overall 17/20, It was a nice Chapter.

Thanks, both of you! I'll try my best to improve but still, thanks for the ratings
Nice chapter! and Brine fits very well too! But genesis valtryek does seems familiar...
(Jul. 31, 2021  7:03 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: Nice chapter! and Brine fits very well too! But genesis valtryek does seems familiar...

Yeah, Free had a Flashback of battling Valt in Evolution/God it was to kinda point out that Valt will always be the reckless fun kid type of person.

Chapter 37 The Bold Valkryie!
(Jul. 31, 2021  7:04 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 31, 2021  7:03 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: Nice chapter! and Brine fits very well too! But genesis valtryek does seems familiar...

Yeah, Free had a Flashback of battling Valt in Evolution/God it was to kinda point out that Valt will always be the reckless fun kid type of person.

Chapter 37 The Bold Valkryie!

Valkyrie? You sticking with the jp ver.?
(Jul. 31, 2021  8:07 PM)Kiryu Kazuma Wrote:
(Jul. 31, 2021  7:04 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Yeah, Free had a Flashback of battling Valt in Evolution/God it was to kinda point out that Valt will always be the reckless fun kid type of person.

Chapter 37 The Bold Valkryie!

Valkyrie? You sticking with the jp ver.?

No, Valtryek's a Valkyrie it's just a title

Try Imaging Shu babysitting Percy XD
(Jul. 31, 2021  7:04 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 31, 2021  7:03 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: Nice chapter! and Brine fits very well too! But genesis valtryek does seems familiar...

Yeah, Free had a Flashback of battling Valt in Evolution/God it was to kinda point out that Valt will always be the reckless fun kid type of person.

Chapter 37 The Bold Valkryie!
Not gonna lie, at the first time I thought it was "The Bald Valkyrie" lol
Chapter 37 has been found in the darkest Abyss.
(Aug. 01, 2021  6:38 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Chapter 37 has been found in the darkest Abyss.

  I think next major battle is going to be Oribe vs Percy and then Percy will challenge Valt to a title match or the other way around. Anyways nice chapter! 
  Oribe seems way less human than he is (If he is), I mean, He only wants to destroy beys, and win I guess.
WOOOOOOOO!!!! POISIDEN IS ALIVE AND VALT IS BACK TO THE CHAMPION!
So, I can't decide if I should do Japanese Vr Or English Vr so ima put it for a vote, the vote ends Wednesday if more people say Japanese VR then I'll do that, if more say English then I'll do that, don't be afraid to hurt my feelings lol I can handle anything so just speak your truth!
Hmm Wizard Guess! I'll vote now! Allow is it a public vote?