[Fan Fiction]  Beyblade Burst Beyjitzu

(Jul. 08, 2021  6:52 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: Super Spryzen

(Jul. 08, 2021  6:52 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: Oh there's a Driver named Power afaik

ill change it

changed it!!!

Scratch Spryzen
This is getting off hand
Missile Spryzen

(Jul. 08, 2021  6:56 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: This is getting off hand

Yeah
(Jul. 08, 2021  6:56 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: Missile Spryzen

(Jul. 08, 2021  6:56 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: This is getting off hand

Yeah
I've edited it
Render Spryzen
(Jul. 08, 2021  6:56 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: This is getting off hand

ok, but if I pm the creator it wont come to him cause he has pm off.
(Jul. 08, 2021  7:00 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote:
(Jul. 08, 2021  6:56 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote: This is getting off hand

ok, but if I pm the creator it wont come to him cause he has pm off.
I was talking about making a spoiler
(Jul. 08, 2021  7:01 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote:
(Jul. 08, 2021  7:00 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: ok, but if I pm the creator it wont come to him cause he has pm off.
I was talking about making a spoiler

oh ok

Nani Spryzen
Chapter 19 is out!! I hope you enjoy it!!
good chapter
(Jul. 08, 2021  7:26 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: good chapter

Thanks, what was you're fave part?
(Jul. 08, 2021  7:31 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 08, 2021  7:26 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: good chapter

Thanks, what was you're fave part?

Fave part: When Helios talks to Hikaru and when Hyperion talks to Hyuga.
(Jul. 08, 2021  7:19 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Chapter 19 is out!! I hope you enjoy it!!

this chapter was good! my favorite part was when helios' gimmick activated and then he clashed with valtryek
Great chapter I was eating popcorn while reading it!
(Jul. 08, 2021  7:36 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote:
(Jul. 08, 2021  7:31 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Thanks, what was you're fave part?

Fave part: When Helios talks to Hikaru and when Hyperion talks to Hyuga.

(Jul. 08, 2021  7:36 PM)BladeKingX Wrote:
(Jul. 08, 2021  7:19 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Chapter 19 is out!! I hope you enjoy it!!

this chapter was good! my favorite part was when helios' gimmick activated and then he clashed with valtryek

I'm glad you guys enjoyed it!
(Jul. 08, 2021  7:36 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 08, 2021  7:36 PM)Dragon Blader Z Wrote: Fave part: When Helios talks to Hikaru and when Hyperion talks to Hyuga.

(Jul. 08, 2021  7:36 PM)BladeKingX Wrote: this chapter was good! my favorite part was when helios' gimmick activated and then he clashed with valtryek

I'm glad you guys enjoyed it!

yeah it was pretty awesome, now ima go post an episode on my fanfic
17) Spryzen Vs Spryzen!!!

18) Evil Ruler!! Vile Overlord!!

19) Protectors Of The Sun!! Aether Helios and Combust Hyperion!!!

20) Junior World Championships!!!

21) Roaring Dragon!! Wicked Balkesh!!

22) Flames from within!! Flare Salamander!!!

23) Shark Attack!! Monarch Forneus!!

24) Rampaging Dragon!! Rampage Luinor!!

25) Rootin For The Enemy!!
(Jul. 08, 2021  8:54 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: 17) Spryzen Vs Spryzen!!!

18) Evil Ruler!! Vile Overlord!!

19) Protectors Of The Sun!! Aether Helios and Combust Hyperion!!!

20) Junior World Championships!!!

21) Roaring Dragon!! Wicked Balkesh!!

22) Flames from within!! Flare Salamander!!!

23) Shark Attack!! Monarch Forneus!!

24) Rampaging Dragon!! Rampage Luinor!!

25) Rootin For The Enemy!!

Great Work!
Blader: Ryan Evenos
Persona: cocky
Age: 11
Appearance: Messy, Spiky, Black and Purple hair, 4'7
Bey: Tenebris Reaper (attack type, counterclockwise rotation, 2 bladed, chassis 3a (rage longinus chassis)

(Jul. 08, 2021  8:54 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: 17) Spryzen Vs Spryzen!!!

18) Evil Ruler!! Vile Overlord!!

19) Protectors Of The Sun!! Aether Helios and Combust Hyperion!!!

20) Junior World Championships!!!

21) Roaring Dragon!! Wicked Balkesh!!

22) Flames from within!! Flare Salamander!!! 

23) Shark Attack!! Monarch Forneus!!

24) Rampaging Dragon!! Rampage Luinor!!

25) Rootin For The Enemy!!
wow bro i actually made an aether helios lol. one of its moves is Swirling Aether
(Jul. 08, 2021  9:39 PM)TylerOfChaos Wrote: Blader: Ryan Evenos
Persona: cocky
Age: 11
Appearance: Messy, Spiky, Black and Purple hair, 4'7
Bey: Tenebris Reaper (attack type, counterclockwise rotation, 2 bladed, chassis 3a (rage longinus chassis)

(Jul. 08, 2021  8:54 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: 17) Spryzen Vs Spryzen!!!

18) Evil Ruler!! Vile Overlord!!

19) Protectors Of The Sun!! Aether Helios and Combust Hyperion!!!

20) Junior World Championships!!!

21) Roaring Dragon!! Wicked Balkesh!!

22) Flames from within!! Flare Salamander!!! 

23) Shark Attack!! Monarch Forneus!!

24) Rampaging Dragon!! Rampage Luinor!!

25) Rootin For The Enemy!!
wow bro i actually made an aether helios lol. one of its moves is Swirling Aether

Srry Ty but currently I'm not having any character contests

Chapter 20 is out!!
LegendJustice can you rate this chapter? I'll rate ur's later promise
(Jul. 08, 2021  9:43 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 08, 2021  9:39 PM)TylerOfChaos Wrote: Blader: Ryan Evenos
Persona: cocky
Age: 11
Appearance: Messy, Spiky, Black and Purple hair, 4'7
Bey: Tenebris Reaper (attack type, counterclockwise rotation,  2 bladed, chassis 3a (rage longinus chassis)

wow bro i actually made an aether helios lol. one of its moves is Swirling Aether

Srry Ty but currently I'm not having any character contests

Chapter 20 is out!!
LegendJustice can you rate this chapter? I'll rate ur's later promise

Nice! I'll rate in a while I'm on MK chat!?
i'll rate

Characters: 5/5 - You expressed the characters so well, I was able to fully understand their motives! Greatness!

Grammar: 5/5 - really?

Writing: 4/5 - It's great (but in my perspective some stuff looks a (bit) jumbled up) but only some stuff. Nice!

Length: 4/5 - This chapter wasn't your longest chapter, but definitely wasn't your shortest. Great job!

Plot: 5/5 - I understand how to plot progresses throughout the story very well. Awesome!

All 'n All (Total): 23/25 - Great job with this chapter, and keep on improving!
(Jul. 08, 2021  9:43 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote:
(Jul. 08, 2021  9:39 PM)TylerOfChaos Wrote: Blader: Ryan Evenos
Persona: cocky
Age: 11
Appearance: Messy, Spiky, Black and Purple hair, 4'7
Bey: Tenebris Reaper (attack type, counterclockwise rotation,  2 bladed, chassis 3a (rage longinus chassis)

wow bro i actually made an aether helios lol. one of its moves is Swirling Aether

Srry Ty but currently I'm not having any character contests

Chapter 20 is out!!
LegendJustice can you rate this chapter? I'll rate ur's later promise
Nice chapter, nothing too much, just an attachment for the driver and the first battle, but still nice
(Jul. 08, 2021  11:01 PM)Hollowmind8 Wrote:
(Jul. 08, 2021  9:43 PM)UnseenBurst Wrote: Srry Ty but currently I'm not having any character contests

Chapter 20 is out!!
LegendJustice can you rate this chapter? I'll rate ur's later promise
Nice chapter, nothing too much, just an attachment for the driver and the first battle, but still nice

Thanks, it was supposed to be one of those filer episodes if you get what I'm saying where nothing too important happens