English Metal Fight Beyblade Comic, explosion battles, the dark nebula & pegasis

Ginga: Metal Bey City is a great place for battling *hyoma appears*
Hyoma: Ginga, i want a rematch when u defeated me the last time
Ginga: Sure thing, ur gunna lose
Hyoma: *Gets out his Clay Aries* so u think so? ive been training
Ginga: *puts Pegasis on launcher*
Hyoma: *puts Aries on launcher*
Ginga & Hyoma: 3, 2, 1, GO SHOOT!
Hyoma: Go Aries!
Ginga: Pegasis, Go! *Kenta appears*
Kenta: *looks at sagittario* Wat are u doing ginga?
Ginga: Kenta? is that? oh it is u! are u watching?
Kenta: Wat?
Ginga: Go Pegasis!
Hyoma: Aries, Sheep horn throw!
Kenta: *goes to B-Pit and calls madoka* MADOKA!!!
*Dark Nebula Castle*
Doji: Merci, have u located where ginga is?
Merci: Master, We are going to check out Storm Pegasis's Secret *Ryuuga Apears*
Doji: Ryuuga! wat are u doing here?
Ryuuga: so, picking up data from ginga eh? perfect, absultutaly Perfect
*B-Pit*
Kenta: can u do some matenince on Sagittario?
Madoka: Sure thing kenta, *puts sagittario on scanner* sagittario has some scratches, not big, but bad, very very bad.
Kenta: I hope sagittario does get fixed
*5 minutes later*
Madoka: Kenta! im done!
Kenta: *gets sagittario* wow! its just like sagittario was new, thanks madoka!
Madoka: no problem kenta.
*Battle*
Ginga: Pegasis, Shooting star attack!
Clay Aries: *Moves away from pegasis*
Hyoma: Aries, Sheep horn throw!
Clay Aries: *Hits pegasis on clear wheel and throws pegasis back up*
Ginga: Wat?
Storm Pegasis: lands on ground with low stamina
Ginga: Thats impossible!
Hyoma: time to finish this off, Aries, Go low!
Clay Aries: *Goes fast, hits pegasis in track*
Ginga: Wat????
Kenta: Wat??? u lost aganst hyoma? *kenta automaticly launches sagittario* Sagittario, Flame Claw!
Hyoma: Wat is that, Kenta? is that u?
Kenta: thats right, im kenta
Hyoma: where?
Kenta: im up here
Hyoma: Aries, Sheep horn throw!
Kenta: Sagittario, Flame Claw!
Sagittario & Clay Aries: *Explosion*
Hyoma: i dont stand a chance against this stamina
Clay Aries: *Loses*
Hyoma: *Picks Up Aries* wat? *Tsubasa appears*
Tsubasa: i work for the WBBA and i am in dark nebula to see wat they are up to.
*at WBBA*
Blader DJ: time to see this battle! be hold, Hikaru Hasama *People Cheer* Versues Kyoya Tategami! *People Cheer again*
Hikaru: 3
Kyoya: 2
Hikaru: 1
Kyoya & Hikaru: Go Shoot!
Hikaru: Go Aquario! Infinity Assult!
Kyoya: Go Leone!
Wind Aquario & Rock Leone: *hits sooo hard that it makes a big explosion and explosion blows dust everywhere*
Kyoya: Go leone, Lion gale force wall!
Hikaru: Aquario! *loses*
Kyoya: *catches leone* i win.
Benkei: *Cheers the most* Kyoya Won, Kyoya Won! *Goes to bey park*
*At bey park*
Kenta: Sagittario! Flame claw!
Benkei: Dark Bull, Bull Upper!
*Dark bull defeated*
Kenta: Alright! defeated ur dark bull in 1 hit!
*Resturant*
Ginga: 1 tripple beef burger please!
Worker: heres your order sir
Ginga: *takes burger* thanks! *eats burger* that was delichious
*dark nebula castle*
Doji: alright we have all of pegasis's secret
Merci: alright.

End of comic
This.... Is a script. (No duh)

Why can't you DRAW this comic before calling it so?
Also, it's pretty horrid. Might want to change the dialogue. Also spellcheck.
Not enough story, just battles everywhere. I found it odd how Tsubasa appeared out of nowhere and told them his plans.
Sorry. Confused
Night is right. There are too many battles and the places keep shifting. Nice try to make a story, though. I kind of like it.
Whos Merci? Is it the guy that has Poison serpent?
(Nov. 12, 2010  9:32 PM)earthleone234 Wrote: Whos Merci? Is it the guy that has Poison serpent?

FacePalm...

Daidoji/Doji's Computer. You don't watch the anime, do you?