Dranzer MS article!

Bit Protector (BP): Dranzer Emblem
The Bit Protector of this Beyblade is the Dranzer Emblem. It is the first mold version of Bit Protectors. It is the loosest mold.

Attack Ring (AR): Spiral Upper
Weight: 20 grams
Spiral Upper, like Metal Upper, features two slight ramps and, when spinning (in this case, left), has a small amount of upper attack. However, because of the height of the RC provided (Manual Change Core), this does not work effectively. But, when paired with a shorter RC, such as Grip Flat Core or Grip Flat Core (Ultimate Mode), it can utilize its upper attack. The upper attack produced is average, though, and is outclassed by many other upper attack ARs, such as Circle Upper and Samurai Upper.

Molds:
When Dranzer MS was first released the 'head' of the Spiral Upper AR was somewhat fragile and broke from frequent use. Later Takara fixed this problem.

Weight Disk (WD): Circle balance
Weight: 15 grams
Circle Balance is a weight disk that is well suited for all purposes, thus the name. For more information, please see Circle Balance.

Running Core (RC): Manual Change Core
Weight: 2 grams
The Manual Change Core is definitely one of the Dranzer series' most unique and interesting part; it has the ability to switch from Attack mode to Endurance mode and vice versa by pushing up or pulling down the tabs on the side of the RC. In Endurance mode, the running core will usually stay in the center of the stadium with little movement. In attack mode, the running core will have quick, aggressive movement patterns. However, both modes are flawed: Endurance mode loses its balance when its spin velocity lowers and Attack mode usually throws itself out of the stadium because of its high speed and low ability to change direction. Hasbro tried to fix Takara’s Endurance mode problem by changing the shape of the RC tip. This helped it retain its balance, but sacrificed its overall spin time dramatically.

Other Versions:
5 Saints Beasts Booster: Proto-Grey
HMS Booster Act 4: Red

Overall:
While Spiral Upper gave some upper attack, it is now outclassed by many other Attack-oriented ARs. Manual Change Core can give some entertaining and fast KO’s but is too unreliable to be used in any competitive situations. There is little reason to buy this Beyblade except for collection purposes.
Uhm, once again good work for how hard you probably worked on this, however there are still multiple errors in this. There are grammatical errors as well as the running core being a "useful" part.
He never said it was a useful part to use, you've taken what he has said out of context. He's said it was one of the most usefull parts out of the dranzer blades.
This is certainly a good effort, and I'm sure that someone could build off of this, but as it stands right now, I don't think it truly fits in grammatically with the rest of Beywiki.

Thanks for doing this. Smile
Can you tell me where the grammar errors are, please? Thanks for the feedback, guys.
(Jun. 26, 2010  11:02 AM)Sora. Wrote: Bit Protector (BP): Dranzer Emblem
The Bit Protector of this Beyblade is the Dranzer Emblem. It is the first mold version of Bit Protectors. It is the loosest mold.

Attack Ring (AR): Spiral Upper
Weight: 20 grams
Spiral Upper, like Metal Upper, features two slight ramps and, when spinning (in this case, left), has a small amount of upper attack. However, because of the height of the RC provided (Manual Change Core), this does not work effectively. But, when paired with a shorter RC, such as Grip Flat Core or Grip Flat Core (Ultimate Mode), it can utilize its upper attack. The upper attack produced is average, though, and is outclassed by many other upper attack ARs, such as Circle Upper and Samurai Upper.

Molds:
When Dranzer MS was first released the 'head' of the Spiral Upper AR was somewhat fragile and broke from frequent use. Later Takara fixed this problem.

Weight Disk (WD): Circle balance
Weight: 15 grams
Circle Balance is a weight disk that is well suited for all purposes, thus the name. For more information, please see Circle Balance.

Running Core (RC): Manual Change Core
Weight: 2 grams
The Manual Change Core is definitely one of the Dranzer series' most unique and interesting part; it has the ability to switch from Attack mode to Endurance mode and vice versa by pushing up or pulling down the tabs on the side of the RC. In Endurance mode, the running core will usually stay in the center of the stadium with little movement. In attack mode, the running core will have quick, aggressive movement patterns. However, both modes are flawed: Endurance mode loses its balance when its spin velocity lowers and Attack mode usually throws itself out of the stadium because of its high speed and low ability to change direction. Hasbro tried to fix Takara’s Endurance mode problem by changing the shape of the RC tip. This helped it retain its balance, but sacrificed its overall spin time dramatically.

Other Versions:
5 Saints Beasts Booster: Proto-Grey
HMS Booster Act 4: Red

Overall:
While Spiral Upper gave some upper attack, it is now outclassed by many other Attack-oriented ARs. Manual Change Core can give some entertaining and fast KO’s but is too unreliable to be used in any competitive situations. There is little reason to buy this Beyblade except for collection purposes.


The mistakes should be fine now, or at least better.

As Daegor42 wrote in another topic, "it's" is the contraction of "it is", while "its" means 'belonging to it'.
Wow, I... Really didn't expect that. Thanks Kai-V!
http://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-Dranzer-MS--7929

Hm, looks like we have a competition on our hands...
(Jun. 28, 2010  11:57 AM)Sora. Wrote: Wow, I... Really didn't expect that. Thanks Kai-V!
http://worldbeyblade.org/Thread-Dranzer-MS--7929

Hm, looks like we have a competition on our hands...

no competition =]
when i wrote that the article hadn't been edited or
anything for awhile so i thought i would give it a go
since Dranzer MS is my favorite blade.
=]
good article. some minor tweaking is needed though. grammer and such
(Oct. 27, 2010  8:11 PM)Leonwind Wrote: good article. some minor tweaking is needed though. grammer and such

Are these comments necessary? You should consider at least giving suggestions and examples as to where he's gone wrong.