NVM this story!

Great spelling and good use of vocabulary. But I think you need to work on your grammar and punctuation, and also your paragraphing. This will make the story easear to read, and also make it pook neat. Also, try to stick to one tense. There was a lot of switching from past, present and future. Hope this helps.

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Natsu smiles at his opponent, ready for combat. His reawakened spirit shines through his body, as he lights his fists. He jumps, as he breathes in the flames of hell itself, his lungs expanding rapidly... His 2 opponents stare in fear of their ferocious enemy and ready themselves...


Members I wish to battle:

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1. Switchblad3r
   
2. XKai_DranzerX
   
3. Bularieleone
   
4. Kyler_the best
   
5. Luck
   
6. Blitz
   
7. Manicben
   
8. Akio314
   
9. Rnold201
   
10. Kai-v
    
11. Shining God MS
    
12. Ryukiba
    
13. Hakumen
    
14. SoulNinja
    
15. AZL
    
16. UltimiteOrion
    
17. Ingulit
    
18. Ga'Hooleone
    

I try and help the WBO, so here's some important threads, and some important posts. I haven't been on for a while, so pm me on updates please!! [spoiler]

1. BEYWIKI
   
2. The beywiki project
   
3. Difference between duo and phantom
   
4. WBO community rules
   
5. Comprtitive MFB discussions
   
6. Build me a combo
   
7. Competitive Heavy Metal System Combos
   
8. Misconception of R vs R2F and possibility of LRF
   
9. Bey Marketplace
   
10. Beginner's guide to custom MFB construction
    
11. A new, Experimental RuleSet?!
    
12. RS vs RDF vs RB vs CS vs RSF
    

It's a little short... Other than that and grammar it's good! Keep going!

Thanks guys! This really happened to me in real life lol. That's why it was hard to make Chapter 1, but I got some other things to put in.