Beyblade: Origins [Not like Plasctic or MFB]

I think it could be a little neater. I got lost in some of it... Also, it's kinda long, don't you think?

I still think it's fairly good, just those little things...
Ok thanks. I might revise a little today.
Should I post book 2 on here? Page 65 is the farthest I've gotten btw they are short pages. Anyway, do you guys think I should?
I should close this if no one posts on it.