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Poll: Do you like this story?

I LOVED IT
61.11%
22
It was good
22.22%
8
meh
11.11%
4
story, what story
5.56%
2
Total: 100% 36 vote(s)
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May. 30, 2011  9:00 PM
 
Name:Torn Hayatoru
Bey:Berserk Underground EternalClaw185 StingSharp[EC185 SS]
Special-move;Underground Attack:Bey digs into the ground and then jumps out of the ground under the Opp.-Bey and then he attacks on all sides
Personality:kind of aggressiv,mean but he has his nice sides
Bey-description:
FaceTongue_outic.of a black Driller
Clear Wheel:full of small shineing Spikes
Metal WheelConfusedtorm like Wheel
Track:like EternalDefense just with Claws
TipConfusedharp-like butits full of chemicals(that get used in the special move to dig)
May. 31, 2011  10:00 AM
 
woah woah woah. calm dwn with the characters
May. 31, 2011  6:00 PM
 
i was also thinking about that but when i saw them do three more then i could also make one moreConfused
Jun. 01, 2011  11:49 AM
 
(May. 30, 2011  7:05 PM)sonicsora123 Wrote:
(May. 29, 2011  5:39 PM)Poison pegasus Wrote: Name:zane
BeybladeConfusedniper giros
Special Move:burning shot
Personality:furious in battles
Bey Explanation:Facebolt:gun with ammo around the gun
Clear wheel:Black and has little ammo picture in the left and right side
Metal wheel:very fat metal wheel similar to basalt horogium
spin track:165
tip:UWD/S(Ultimate wide defense/stamina)
Character Description:After alot of time in beybattles,zane realizes the black hole.....He wants to stop it.But instead the cold fire invites him to their group.....He trains there and he was given orders to destroy a guy named demarko.........

a wolfurious bey
Name:gordo
BeybladeGrineath alphena
Special Move:fury wolf death bite!
PersonalityConfusedtrong.But serious (not in mood for any fun)
Bey Explanation: facebolt wolf face...
clearwheel white
metalwheel:Fang like around all the metalwheel
spintrack:75
tip:XHSF(Xtreme hole semiflate

Perfect. but can i make XHSF just XSF or something and UWD/S just UWD

Yeah sure no problem aslong as you liked the bey.
(May. 31, 2011  6:00 PM)The Scorpion Wrote: i was also thinking about that but when i saw them do three more then i could also make one moreConfused

Yeah...I should stop making character for 2 chapters >.>
Jun. 01, 2011  1:22 PM
 
Hm sorry didnt mean to cludder u with charchters. Nice story dude Joyful_2 its veeery interesting in a sorta werid way with the ghosts and all Joyful_2
Jun. 01, 2011  2:42 PM
 
no prob. i can handle it. im just saying it would be nice. anyway the next chapter will be up soon. so will chapter8
Jun. 01, 2011  4:50 PM
 
Hey Soni(my Nickname for you if it is okSmile)is it ok if you change her Name from Kadel to Kadela?
Jun. 01, 2011  7:45 PM
 
(Jun. 01, 2011  4:50 PM)The Scorpion Wrote: Hey Soni(my Nickname for you if it is okSmile)is it ok if you change her Name from Kadel to Kadela?

errrrrrrm so a clearly male character is now a girl. okay then let me think... wait a sec. why would we do that?
(May. 30, 2011  9:00 PM)The Scorpion Wrote: Name:Torn Hayatoru
Bey:Berserk Underground EternalClaw185 EternalDigSharp[EC185 EDS]
Special-move;Underground Attack:Bey digs into the ground and then jumps out of the ground under the Opp.-Bey and then he attacks on all sides
Personality:kind of aggressiv,mean but he has his nice sides
Bey-description:
FaceTongue_outic.of a black Driller
Clear Wheel:full of small shineing Spikes
Metal WheelConfusedtorm like Wheel
Track:like EternalDefense just with Claws
TipEeeternalSharp just as a drill
can i make it underground beserk
Jun. 02, 2011  9:17 PM
 
(Jun. 01, 2011  7:45 PM)sonicsora123 Wrote:
(Jun. 01, 2011  4:50 PM)The Scorpion Wrote: Hey Soni(my Nickname for you if it is okSmile)is it ok if you change her Name from Kadel to Kadela?

errrrrrrm so a clearly male character is now a girl. okay then let me think... wait a sec. why would we do that?
(May. 30, 2011  9:00 PM)The Scorpion Wrote: Name:Torn Hayatoru
Bey:Berserk Underground EternalClaw185 EternalDigSharp[EC185 EDS]
Special-move;Underground Attack:Bey digs into the ground and then jumps out of the ground under the Opp.-Bey and then he attacks on all sides
Personality:kind of aggressiv,mean but he has his nice sides
Bey-description:
FaceTongue_outic.of a black Driller
Clear Wheel:full of small shineing Spikes
Metal WheelConfusedtorm like Wheel
Track:like EternalDefense just with Claws
TipEeeternalSharp just as a drill
can i make it underground beserk

Firstly: sorry,i got muddled up here Pinching_eyes_2
Secondly:sure you can do that
Jun. 03, 2011  8:14 AM
 
(Jun. 02, 2011  9:17 PM)The Scorpion Wrote:
(Jun. 01, 2011  7:45 PM)sonicsora123 Wrote:
(Jun. 01, 2011  4:50 PM)The Scorpion Wrote: Hey Soni(my Nickname for you if it is okSmile)is it ok if you change her Name from Kadel to Kadela?

errrrrrrm so a clearly male character is now a girl. okay then let me think... wait a sec. why would we do that?
(May. 30, 2011  9:00 PM)The Scorpion Wrote: Name:Torn Hayatoru
Bey:Berserk Underground EternalClaw185 EternalDigSharp[EC185 EDS]
Special-move;Underground Attack:Bey digs into the ground and then jumps out of the ground under the Opp.-Bey and then he attacks on all sides
Personality:kind of aggressiv,mean but he has his nice sides
Bey-description:
FaceTongue_outic.of a black Driller
Clear Wheel:full of small shineing Spikes
Metal WheelConfusedtorm like Wheel
Track:like EternalDefense just with Claws
TipEeeternalSharp just as a drill
can i make it underground beserk

Firstly: sorry,i got muddled up here Pinching_eyes_2
Secondly:sure you can do that

thanks scorpion
another thing eds is already a real tip so can you pls change it
Jun. 04, 2011  11:58 AM
 
(Jun. 03, 2011  8:14 AM)sonicsora123 Wrote:
(Jun. 02, 2011  9:17 PM)The Scorpion Wrote:
(Jun. 01, 2011  7:45 PM)sonicsora123 Wrote:
(Jun. 01, 2011  4:50 PM)The Scorpion Wrote: Hey Soni(my Nickname for you if it is okSmile)is it ok if you change her Name from Kadel to Kadela?

errrrrrrm so a clearly male character is now a girl. okay then let me think... wait a sec. why would we do that?
(May. 30, 2011  9:00 PM)The Scorpion Wrote: Name:Torn Hayatoru
Bey:Berserk Underground EternalClaw185 EternalDigSharp[EC185 EDS]
Special-move;Underground Attack:Bey digs into the ground and then jumps out of the ground under the Opp.-Bey and then he attacks on all sides
Personality:kind of aggressiv,mean but he has his nice sides
Bey-description:
FaceTongue_outic.of a black Driller
Clear Wheel:full of small shineing Spikes
Metal WheelConfusedtorm like Wheel
Track:like EternalDefense just with Claws
TipEeeternalSharp just as a drill
can i make it underground beserk

Firstly: sorry,i got muddled up here Pinching_eyes_2
Secondly:sure you can do that

thanks scorpion
another thing eds is already a real tip so can you pls change it

is SS(StingSharp)okay?Tongue_out
Jun. 04, 2011  1:42 PM
 
SS is fine but what does it do
Jun. 04, 2011  2:25 PM
 
Wow.Your story should have even more viewers!
Jun. 04, 2011  5:09 PM
 
In chapter 6 you put doesnt leave 2 times. Doesnt leave Dosent leave your concious . Hope i helped u a lil xD
Jun. 05, 2011  8:21 PM
 
(Jun. 04, 2011  1:42 PM)sonicsora123 Wrote: SS is fine but what does it do

Read the Special Move DescriptionSupaburn
Jun. 05, 2011  9:37 PM
 
OMG I completely forgot I have to send you a drawing of cheese! Ok, I'm on it!!!!

EDIT:
Jun. 06, 2011  6:38 PM
 
(Jun. 05, 2011  9:37 PM)Sparta Wrote: OMG I completely forgot I have to send you a drawing of cheese! Ok, I'm on it!!!!

EDIT:

What type of Cheese?Lips_sealed
Jun. 06, 2011  7:05 PM
 
(Jun. 06, 2011  6:38 PM)The God of Beys Wrote: [quote='Sparta' pid='671164' dateline='1307306232']
OMG I completely forgot I have to send you a drawing of cheese! Ok, I'm on it!!!!

EDIT:

wow Chocked_2
i can make my brand new Cheddar Aries now. A bey thats good for your colon.
also can u pleeeeeaaaaase post some predictions
Jun. 08, 2011  6:37 PM
 
(Jun. 06, 2011  7:05 PM)sonicsora123 Wrote:
(Jun. 06, 2011  6:38 PM)The God of Beys Wrote: [quote='Sparta' pid='671164' dateline='1307306232']
OMG I completely forgot I have to send you a drawing of cheese! Ok, I'm on it!!!!

EDIT:

wow Chocked_2
i can make my brand new Cheddar Aries now. A bey thats good for your colon.
also can u pleeeeeaaaaase post some predictions

are you talking to me or to Sparta??
Jun. 10, 2011  3:22 PM
 
oh and when is chap.8 finished?
Jun. 11, 2011  1:21 PM
 
(Jun. 08, 2011  6:37 PM)The God of Beys Wrote:
(Jun. 06, 2011  7:05 PM)sonicsora123 Wrote:
(Jun. 06, 2011  6:38 PM)The God of Beys Wrote: [quote='Sparta' pid='671164' dateline='1307306232']
OMG I completely forgot I have to send you a drawing of cheese! Ok, I'm on it!!!!

EDIT:

wow Chocked_2
i can make my brand new Cheddar Aries now. A bey thats good for your colon.
also can u pleeeeeaaaaase post some predictions

are you talking to me or to Sparta??

EVERYONE just post them
(Jun. 10, 2011  3:22 PM)The God of Beys Wrote: oh and when is chap.8 finished?

now
Jun. 11, 2011  1:25 PM
 
ch-7 is nice ha ha kadel's mistaka was a serious one by the way how they will escape from the prison

advice- give a name to evil org. a classic name will be good
Jun. 11, 2011  1:43 PM
 
(Jun. 11, 2011  1:25 PM)xlr8 Wrote: ch-7 is nice ha ha kadel's mistaka was a serious one by the way how they will escape from the prison

advice- give a name to evil org. a classic name will be good

thnx
the name of the evil org is cold fire. it is in the text
they have escaped from the prison. or have they
PS did u like chapter 8
Jun. 17, 2011  3:16 PM
 
say Soni how many Chapters are there gonna be?
Jun. 17, 2011  4:50 PM
 
(Jun. 17, 2011  3:16 PM)The God of Beys Wrote: say Soni how many Chapters are there gonna be?

about fifteen to twenty more. dont worry. i can now post alot more quicker
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