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Chapter One: Start.


As usual, the bey building the American Hot Spot was filled, bladers were launching beys everywhere, and the bey pit was making use of that, by selling random boosters, bey grips, and other merchandise. I was in one of the matches with my L Drago Explosion 85 LRF, with the foe owning a MF Libra 145F both beys sparking. I attacked the Libra, but the Libra kept bouncing the attack back.

“SPECIAL MOVE! FINAL DEFLECT!”, said the foe, just when my L Drago did a strong attack, and the force of my attack was great, but the Libra deflected it, and by luck, my bey was on the edge of the stadium, instead of going out of it.

“SPECIAL MOVE! TRIPLE FIRA!”, I said, and my L Drago shot three horizontal pillars of flame at the Libra, knocking it out of the stadium.

I was the best blader in the American Hot Spot’s orphanage, at the time owning 50 grand bey points, and for the age of 12, that’s something. Little did I know, poor, young Tyler, was going to have the ride of my life. I had found my L Drago Explosion in a meteor spot, and had it ever since, even now, 20 years later, I still own it, It’s still almost unbeatable. But anways, I was walking home, my red and black hair moving with the wind, and a guy shot a bey at me, so I launched my L Drago. The two blades pushed each other in a frenzy of sparks, then the guy detached his blade from my blade, and then rammed into it again, pushing it back to the edge of the sidewalk.

“What the hell man!?” I yelled at him, and he simply replies with

“I want your L Drago, my boss wants it baaaaaaaaaaaaaad.”

L Drago Zoomed into his blade, but the blade kept staying in place, and kept reflecting the strikes. The next part is fuzzy to me, all I know is that he beat my L Drago, and took 5 grand bey points away from me. He never took my L Drago though, I’m not sure why.

Later, I was at home, telling all my friends over the phone about it, after I was done, I heard a knock on the door. When I opened it, it was my friend Clifa who told me, really fast, that there was someone who tried the same thing to get her MF Wave Aquario 85 R2F.

“Strange, why would there be someone after normal beys, it’s not like they can cause an explosion taking out America and Russia in seconds? I said, still in thought, my eyes closed.

“Because yours came in a meteorite, mine in a tsunami.” Clifa frowned.

We were still talking late at night, and concluded, that theses beys weren’t your normal beys, no, were not using them right, somehow.
pretty good story, heres 4 very detailed characters


Name: Izuma Inzori
Name: Sonai Inzori
Name: Hatachi Inzori
Name: Rez Inzori
It sounds like it's in another story, since I never said anything about teams, and you really didn't describe the chars much, only their bey style and bey. I'm really sorry, but maybe you can make your own Fanfiction?
i already have my own fanfiction, search for S.B.B.I.A thats mine
Ahh, but sorry, I just can't put another entire plot there, and I have to edit so much stuff, I spent a day on this fanfiction, editing the hell out of it, trying to make it fit the plot in my head.

Besides, I'm working on my own novel, to get some money for me the moment i'm old enough to publish it.
name:Lief Feir (it pronounced as ''leaf fear'')
bey:destiny dragon ED145R2
bey description:the bey has three wing-like structure,this has the potential of upper,smash,and spike attack.its clear wheel has two dragons facing a clockwise direction.the face represent a golden dragon,which is similar to L-drago's
description of character:he loves to blade.he can fix any bey with any problems,even cracks,he never let it go.very skilled at beyblading,it seems that he never lost a fight to anyone,which makes him champion in his town.he's also very energetic,which causes a little clumsiness,nevertheless,he is a great blader
special move:parallel dimensions(bey glow gold,and seems to ''teleport'',one place o another,while hitting the opposing bey with lots of force)
looks:he carries a backpack,in which he places his equipment.he wears blue jeans,red sneakers,blue t-shirt.he wears a jacket,blue gloves,a red hat,and he wears glasses.he has a spiky hair'do,and also a strapper around his left arm

hope this is ok!
While not as detailed, it actually fits into the story, and I kinda am stumped on the idea of someone who can fix beyblades. I'll be working on my novel most of the time, so expect the next one a couple of days from now.
Well, heres chap two.

Chapter Two

A day later, we gathered in the park for a battle. Clifa’s pink hair was dirty, and I asked her what was wrong.

“Nothing, let’s just battle.” She said, anger in her voice.

“333…. 222…. 111…. GO SHOOT!” We both said at the same time, as it was the thing people did then, now it’s the same thing except with Let it Rip. The moment our blades left the launchers, they collided. Sparks flew, L Drago zoomed in on Aquairo, but Aquario dodged and attacked him. When this happened, a massive dragon flew over the stadium, and covered L Drago, and attacked. As a response to this, a young woman came out of nowhere, with a sword made of water. The two spirits collided, and when they disappeared, L Drago and Aquario were left clashing in a dance of parries and blows.

“SPECIAL MOVE! WATER CLONES!”

Aquario summoned a giant wave, and when it was over, ten clones of Aquario attacked me, keeping me in check.

“SPECIAL MOVE! HYPER EXPLOSION!” A giant explosion came out of nowhere, blasting all the clones into oblivion and finishing off Aquario.

“No…. No… NO!” Cllifa said, almost crying. I was thinking so many thoughts then, like why is she crying, but then, all of them was answered.

“Diamond Pegasis…. Finish the girl off!” said a man in an black robe. A blue beyblade came out of nowhere, attacking Cllifa,

“3-2-1 GO SHOOT!” Aquario attacked Pegasis, but nothing, the sparks flew and Aquario was doing special moves like crazy, and Pegasis was just standing there, and the RPMs were 5000, for Aquario, nearly half of it’s 9,999 starting spin rotations. Pegasis was at 20,000 RPM, 15,000 more RPM. Just when I stopped scanning the RPM, Pegasis did a swipe across Aquario, knocking Aquario to 0 RPM.

“3-2-1 GO SHOOT!” L Drago slammed into Pegasis, and in the moment, I wondered why I did that. But then, a strange vison appeared. It was two men, one with red and white hair, the other with red. The white headed man, had a bey, that he called: L Drago, and the red haired man had a bey called: Pegasis. The beys collided, and then I saw the same thing happening in real life, and by chance, L Drago found an opening, and rammed into Pegasis, knocking it out of the arena.

“Hm…. Pathetic. Nothing important.” And then I blacked out, and to this day, I have no idea how. It scares me, and I wish I knew how. I really, really want to know how. But anyways, when I woke up I was in my room with a deep gash, and someone above me, smirking.
If you don't mind, I'd like to make a request.
Name: Xalpine Hall
Bey:MF Iridium Cepheus ED145 MWD(Metal Wide Defense)
Gender: Male
Side:Good
Age: 17
Appearance: Xalpine wears a black hoodie with a red crown in the upper left corner. He wears black jeans, and black shoes. He has spiky red hair, and red eyes.
Height: 6'1"
Weight: 177 lbs
Type: Defense(Left Spin)
Bey Descripton:
Face: A Crown with Cepheus written under it
Energy Ring: The energy ring is black with three red lines running across it. It resembles eagle.
Fusion Wheel: Iridium is perfectly rounded, and is painted black. There are three crowns engraved into it.
Spin Track: A normal ED145.
Performance Tip: A metal version of wide defense.
Personality: Energetic and Talkative.
Special Move: Execution: Cepheus launches itself into the air, and brings itself down onto the opposing bey. Using its weight, Cepheus forces the face bolt loose, and the opposing bey falls to pieces.
Kay, maybe chapter four you'll appear after BBP, who appears at chapter three.
Well, here is chap three.



Chapter three.

The kid smirked, his spiky hair waving in the wind, and said “You just fought a Blade Zeus. The deadliest beyblade team in the world. You didn’t even beat him, he was just examining you. Diamond Pegasis is one of the world’s strongest beyblades, rivaling L Drago Explosion and Wave Aquario. It’s 4D like them. My name is Lief fier, and I fixed you up, as well as your L Drago. Opps!” He fell on the floor, but instantly got back up. “Anyways, I’ve seen your beyblade. It’s L Drago Explosion. The ultimate HWS beyblade, able to defeat most 4D beyblades. You must prove you can beat me however, to see if your worthy of it.


“THREE! TWO! ONE! GO SHOOT!” We both said in unsion. We were both in a abandoned Bey Pit stadium. Anyways, our blades left the launcher. His bey was as fast as mine. I observed his bey, it was like the spikes on the Legendary Talon Dragoon, except there was three. He instantly attacked my bey, but I dodged and attacked with greater force, sparks flying. I was pushing him to the end of the stadium, till he knocked me back, and attacked with even greater force. It went like that for a while.

Till Lief Fier yelled “PARAELL DIEMSIONS!”. His bey started teleporting, then hitting L Drago with great force.

“FIRAGA CHARGE!” I yelled, and then IT happened. I didn’t know where I came up with that, but L Drago, charged at Lief’s bey, fire surrounding it. Then, a giant explosion happened, leaving everything on fire, and the bey’s were still going at it, pushing each other like before, and everytime one gained an upper hand, they exploded again. I had never seen a match like this. A fierce dragon came out of nowhere, engulfing Lief’s bey, and another, a different one, engulfed L Drago. A song came into my head.

The time has come to break out,
I'm findin a win beyond a doubt,
Gone on the days of losin' ground
I'm takin it all to the next round!

I'm not goin down, I'm standin my ground,
You haven't seen the last of me,
Until I'm the best, an put to the test,
I'm lookin' for a victory!

I'm not gonna stop, till I hit the top,
It's the only place to be,
Prepare for the day, I'm comin your way,
You haven't seen the last of me.

I'm bringin the wind, I just can't be beat.
I'm not gonna fall, I wont accept defeat,
Gone on the days of losin ground
I'm takin it all to the next round!

I'm not goin down, I'm standin my ground,
You haven't seen the last of me,
Until I'm the best, an put to the test,
I'm lookin' for a victory!

I'm not gonna stop, till I hit the top,
It's the only place to be,
Prepare for the day, I'm comin your way,
You haven't seen the last of me.

I'm not goin down, I'm standin my ground,
You haven't seen the last of me,
Until I'm the best, an put to the test,
I'm lookin' for a victory!

I'm not gonna stop, till I hit the top,
It's the only place to be,
Prepare for the day, I'm comin your way,
You haven't seen the last of me!.


Then, the finishing blow happened. L Drago knocked Lief’s bey, which I know now is Destiny Dragon, out of the ring. After that, I fainted, and so did Lief.
Name: Xalpine Hall
Bey:MF Iridium Cepheus TH120 MWD(Metal Wide Defense)
Gender: Male
Side:Good
Age: 17
Appearance: Xalpine wears a black hoodie with a red crown in the upper left corner. He wears black jeans, and black shoes. He has spiky red hair, and red eyes.
Height: 6'1"
Weight: 177 lbs
Type: Defense(Left Spin)
Bey Descripton:
Face: A Crown with Cepheus written under it
Energy Ring: The energy ring is black with three red lines running across it. It resembles eagle.
Fusion Wheel: Iridium is perfectly rounded, and is painted black. There are three crowns engraved into it.
Spin Track: A variant of TH170 that can change change from 145 to 100, to 230.
Performance Tip: A metal version of wide defense.
Personality: Energetic and Talkative.
Special Move: Execution: Cepheus launches itself into the air, and brings itself down onto the opposing bey. Using its weight, Cepheus forces the face bolt loose, and the opposing bey falls to pieces.
I already read that, I said you would be in chapter 4...
I know. I'm not sure why that post happened.

What I meant to post was this:

Is L-Drago Explosion a 4D bey?
Actually, no, but it's evolved form, L Drago Finisher LMLW85XLRF is, as well as other beyblades that i'm planning, like Talon Dragoon LMLW85XLRF. (I know, same track and bottom, but entirely different wheels.)
So will most of the beyblades in this story be 4D?
I would like to make a character request

Age 12
Name Billy Draco
Bey Pyro Fico Change Armor Defense 145/230 Metal Flat Defense(Pyro Fico CHAD230/145 MFD) (Has upper when in attack mode attack mode is lower mode 145 when in 230 is charging for powerful attacks spins to the right 230 and 145 spins to the left MD metal defense would be 230 switches to MF when attacking also when MF has enough attack force Special move Burning assalt his tip catches on fire (but is fine) and attacks till they are in the middle of the stadium and circle like storm bringer getting closer while spining faster in his burning fire circle then strikes hard Pyro has upper attack points while being circuler and having stamina )

Personality:Is a pyro guy loves fire you ask him to go somewhere and he askes is their fire or beyblades there is a good guy and is a part of the beyblade clan Dracos and is the supposed wash out of them he is a nice guy that will do anything for friends amd is a passionate Blader
he willl be saying random stuff and has a horrible back story a fear of water a love a fire and red loves dragons (His last name is draco)
he wears Black Jeans that have fire on them just pictures shirt a red jacket with a dragon made of fire on the back

that should be all
After L Drago evolves, yes. I can disclose some, Claw Leone, Tsunami Aquario and Growl Kerbecs.

And also, sorry, but no can do, the bey is the only thing in large detail.
Ichiga Niguzaki
Icicle Phoenix RP100 HF/S
Icicle: 15 spikes facing outward
Phoenix: just the blue recolour of the phoenix CW
Reverse Pyramid 100: a 100 track that is shaped like an upside down pyramid
HF/S: just a regular HF/S
Special move 1: Icicle Storm: shoots a barrage of icicles at the opposing bey
special move 2: Arctic Rush: makes Icicle Phoenix reach subzero temperatures, then charge at the opposing bey
special move 3: Final Freeze: creates an illusion of the Arctic, and makes the enemy think that themselves and their bey are frozen solid, which prevents them from making a counter attack
Dark move: Darkness Blizzard: a more powerful version of Final Freeze, with a purple hue in the ice illusion

Ichiga is like a mirror of Ginga. he has blue hair, a red jacket and black shirt. personality: he was going down the same path as Ryuuga, until he realized that he wasn't getting anywhere by hurting people. so, he's happy and cheerful, but has a dark past he's trying to forget about.
Accepted, your gonna appear in chap ten, along with other requests till then.
Updated my character am i accepted now
Hello all, to make you wondering more, I present you with this. This is Tyler in his gold armor which he later wears in the final chapters.


[Image: tekecce985.png]

Just imagine his hair is black and red and is like Cloud Strife's.
Heres chapter vFour


Chapter Four

When I woke up, Lief was still unconscious, and L Drago was in the air, floating with importance. But it was different. It’s disks of rubber were curved, the size of the new two claws that were infront of them, and the fangs were bolder, bigger and made of metal. The bottom was wider, almost two times it’s previous width.
“L DRAGO FINISHER! GREAT GOD OF DRAGONS!” I roared, and the blade dropped into my hand. I had no idea what to do, my blade was new… but then it happened. A boy and Cllifa appeared, both with loaded launchers. Cllifa had a new bey as well. It had multiple large waves, flat down on the wheel, with a MBD145 and a WCS as well.
I asked who the boy was, they just said “Blade me… Blade meeeeeeeeeeeeeeee….” I loaded my bey, and we let them go, sparks flying. L Drago was zooming around my foes, going at least 50 MPHs. No one made a move till L Drago lunged at the boy’s blade, who smoothly dodged and knocked me back abit, then continued doing it till I avoided the attack and pushed him into Aquario. At this time I was wondering what happened to them… till I saw the symbol that the man with Pegasis had on their foreheads. I was thinking that they were possessed by something, till I saw powder in their eyes. That powder makes the person who gets it in their eyes weak and obeys the source. Aquario boosted into L Drago and sparks flew, getting in the way of my eyesight. Aquario was shooting large pillars of water at L Drago, as if it was doing a special move. The boy’s blade, who I dubbed Crowny and the boy Mc Crowns-A-Lot, was going to land on me, till I dodged out of the way, and it landed onto Aquario, knocking Aquario apart. Then, Crowny landed onto L Drago, but this time it didn’t disassemble, instead L Drago deflected the attacks. Crowny slammed into L Drago, knocking L Drago into the stadium wall and stopped in mid-air, not even spinning, then, the ‘Spin Steal’ came into effect, allowing L Drago to steal Crowny’s spin, and slammed into Crowny.
Carp... I forgot that it was chapter four, not five... the boy was your char. I think you could figure that out with "Crowny" and "Mc Crowns-A-Lot"