Bey Story

Poll: do you want more?

Yes
66.67%
6
Maybe
33.33%
3
No
0%
0
Total: 100% 9 vote(s)
Mom: Hey Horigu Get Up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Horigu: Huh what????????
Mom: Were here!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Today a new blader just came to Bey City.
His name is Horigu. He may become the strongest blader yet.

Horigu: Yea! Im home!
Mom: Now dont run!
Horigu: Ill be in my room!
Mom: Ok now dont forget to watch your dad on TV tonight!
Horigu: I wont!

As you can see Horigu's Dad is the beyblade champ!

Horigu: Huh Whats this! Its a box! With a note!

Dear Horigu,

You have been my son for 12 years now. I think Id like you to have this. Please care for it forever.

Signed,
Dad.

Horigu: Wow! Lets open it! Woah!!!!!!!! Its a Bey! Its called Distruptor Earthos!
Mom: Did you see the package?
Horigu: You knew!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Mom: Yep!!
Horigu: Well Im Going outside to test it!

To be continued...

Hey so howd ya like that!

Awesome right

I need two Yes votes to continue
Not exactly 'Awesome', more like decent.
I put in Maybe because its like you copied the Pokemon series thing on the video game <Off Topic sorry...
well two maybe's equal one yes
Horigu: Hey you wanna battle?
Blader: Huh me?
Horigu: Ok!

3, 2, 1, Let It Rip!

Whoa! Earthos a stunning first attack!
The opponents bey Orso is losing balance!
Orso regains balance!
Earthos makes tons of attacks one by one!
Orso is almost done for!

Horigu: Speical Move! OV Drive! Advanced Speical Move! OV Drive Trail Blazer!

Orso broke in to a million pieces!

Horigu: Yea we won!
Blader: Darn!!!!
Horigu: Hey whats your name?

Pause! If you want to be in the story post now!
yes pwiz! i would <3 to be in it! could it be alpha (the stranger) from my story!
Play! The new Blader shall be known as Alpha!

Blader: My name is Alpha and its nice to meet you!
Horigu: Well then Alpha, Would you like to hang along with me for awile?
Alpha: Ok! Oh and can you train my Orso?
Horigu: Sure!

Alpha joined Horigu on his awesome adventure!
What could be next?

Mystery Blader: Hmmm... The Bladers known as Horigu and Alpha...


Now who is the mystery blader and why is he a mystery?
Find out next time!

Let it Rip!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Most epic thing evaz!!!! ;3;
Horigu: Hey ive got a better idea than training your bey! Ill give u a brand new bey!
Alpha: Oh Yea!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Horigu: Hmmmm... Cyber Pegasus, Rock Leone... Ahha! Here it is! Dark Trickmaster!
Alpha: Yes!
Mystery Blader: Hmmm...
Horigu: Hey did you here somthing?
Mystery Blader: Yahhh!!!!!!!!!!!
Horigu: Ahhhh! Who are u!
Mystery Blader: My name is Takara! Takara Tomy!!!!!!!!
Horigu: Say What!!! Your Takara Tomy!!!!
Takara: Yes and I would like to battle you Horigu!

3, 2, 1, Let it rip!!!!!!!!!!!!

Takara: The one who wins has there bey tranformed. The loser has to give up one of his beys!

Takara's Beyblade Omega L Drago is going at light speed!

Horigu: Special Move! EarthQuake!!!! Advanced Move! Earth Quake Battle Crusher!

Awesome! The arena is breaking into pieces!!

Takara: Ha! Special Move! Jet Blaster!!!!!!!!!!!

Huh? Takara's beyblade is floating over the arena! With a jet blast under it!

Takara: Attack!!!!!!

L Drago is right over Earthos! Blasting the fire at it!

Horigu: NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

L Drago Won!!!!

Takara: Now pay up!
Horigu: Here take it!
Takara: What! A Cyber Pegasus! Rrrrrraaahhh!!!! Well I can still evolve it!

Cyber Pegasus Turned Into Blastiod Pegasus!!

Who is Takara and why does he have magical powers to evolve beyblades?
Find out next time!

Let it rip!!!!!!!!!!!!
If I may make a critique, this thing seems like a script. It also seems to me awfully like "Pikachu used Thunder! It's super effective! Blastoise used Earthquake! It's super effective! Pikachu is knocked out! Blastoise wins!" The story is interesting, but dialouge and and "Combat" seem to carry the story. If you cold fix this, it would be much better.