Bey Series - The Four Pillars, Chapter 5 is up! Review Please!

Poll: How good is my story

Awesome
20.00%
3
Quite Good
33.33%
5
OK
33.33%
5
Bad
13.33%
2
Total: 100% 15 vote(s)
Awesome and thanks!Smile
Oh yeah. Ryu will be doing a super cool thing in the tournament.
Awesome cant wait to read about it!Smile
Sorry for all the delay. The last two days were really busy. I am working on the chapters so 8 should be up by tomorrow.
Update... Because of three long battle in stew chapter it should be up tomorrow.
(Sep. 02, 2013  10:06 PM)jacolal Wrote: Update... Because of three long battle in stew chapter it should be up tomorrow.

Great ok I can wait.
Well... I've posted chapter 8 and I have made it extra long, apparently more than 2 pages on word which is a good thing.
Longest chapter so far, I think, and THE BEST for me!
I'm working on chapter 9 right now, and thanks!
Not sure how long it is, but chapter nine is up.
Sorry for earlier I should have had more appreciation for your work.
No problem, I'm sure it was an accident, and if it wasn't, then it shows that I just need to improve.

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Well... great work so far, by the time you read this, I'll have read chapter 10, IT IS AWESOME.
I know... I'm hoping it is good. And I am happy to say that I will continue this story as a series.
Sorry for double post, but chapter 11 is up. And credit to some of the story goes to Rnold201 and XkaidranzerX, for making this character (Ace).
I've got one character I will give you them Friday night
Um... might need it before that. I only need one...
Your character. You asked me for
Just read some of it. There are a few grammar mistakes, such as using "are" instead of "our," and putting a space between a quotation mark and the first word.
Overall though, chapter length is pretty good, as is the writing. I'll vote once I'm done reading the whole thing.
Thanks.. It's not letting me edit on my phone but I'll try tonight.
Sorry for double post, but chapter 12 is up in the OP. I hope you like it. Credit to the mysterious man/ Yumaro goes to Xkai_DranzerX
Awesome story so far! I can't wait for the next chapter.
Thanks, chapter fourteen should be up tomorrow.
I love the new chapter!Smile
I'm starting to sound like the main character Im loving this and ryukiba pop me ip