The Lifeless Blader: The Sequel [PLEASE CLOSE]

This is a sequel to 'The Lifeless Blader" a story my friend Damaged and I wrote. Please tell me how you like it.

Prologue

Chapter 1


Here is how you should make a character request.

Name:
Age:
Personality:
Bio:
Bey: (Can be made up)
Special Moves: (With decription)
(Jan. 04, 2014  10:33 PM)Onyx Piravteer Wrote: This is a sequel to 'The Lifeless Blader" a story my friend Damaged and I wrote. Please tell me how you like it.

Prologue



Here is how you should make a character request.

Name:
Age:
Personality:
Bio:
Bey: (Can be made up)
Special Moves: (With decription)
Just wondering, Why didn't you just stick to your old thread? You could of just changed the title of the thread.
Sorry I'm relatively new to the site I'll be sure to do that next time.
I got chapter 1 done!

It seems rushed. Try and add more detail.