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The leopards revenge.

May. 16, 2011  7:03 AM
 
Prologue

The beys collided in a flash of red and orange.
‘’Special move, Hunting Peacock!’ He said with anger deep within his voice.
‘’Stay firm Beat Lynx’’ I cried hoping for the best.
Just as my voice cracked down a collision echoed around the stadium, a flash of purple and yellow burst out into the dim light.
‘’Yes!’’ I cried and ran to the door before he could challenge me again. As I stepped out the door I was surprised by the amount of reporters and journalists there for just one battle. As quick as a flash I put my bey away as I could see some people ready to fight me for it. I sprinted through the crowd to the car and quickly drove off.
I got back home and pressed on the doorbell. There was no reply. I pressed it again it was silent, too silent and when I clicked it the last time I felt a hand clasp on my jaw. I tried to scream but no sound came out.


I take character requests and should I continue?Eee
Should I continue?
May. 16, 2011  7:37 AM
 
dude it's nice and continue it's good and here is my character request

name; joy fermandes
bey; vortex orion
special move; vortex super strike
May. 16, 2011  7:39 AM
 
Cool what do you want him to be ;eg Enemy, Friend or random person.
Chapter 1
The room was dark and gloomy as if the sun's flames were put out. I tried to escape his grasp but it was to strong. He loosened his grasp as he reached for his phone.
''I've got him''he said.
The voice that replied surprised me,''Good we'll meet at sunset and if you lose him before then, there shall be consequences''
I heard the man gulp.After a few minutes I could tell he was getting restless.I knew it was now or never to escape so I loosened the ropes and crept up to my room.
''Come back you little creep!''he cried as I slammed my door shut.
And that was when I looked out my window.
May. 16, 2011  8:32 AM
 
(May. 16, 2011  7:39 AM)Hope Wrote: Cool what do you want him to be ;eg Enemy, Friend or random person.
Chapter 1
The room was dark and gloomy as if the sun's flames were put out. I tried to escape his grasp but it was to strong. He loosened his grasp as he reached for his phone.
''I've got him''he said.
The voice that replied surprised me,''Good we'll meet at sunset and if you lose him before then, there shall be consequences''
I heard the man gulp.After a few minutes I could tell he was getting restless.I knew it was now or never to escape so I loosened the ropes and crept up to my room.
''Come back you little creep!''he cried as I slammed my door shut.
And that was when I looked out my window.

a team mate and a good friend
May. 16, 2011  8:35 AM
 
Good story hope!
Hope you continue it at school
May. 16, 2011  8:47 AM
 
Is it good?
May. 16, 2011  8:49 AM
 
(May. 16, 2011  8:47 AM)Hope Wrote: Is it good?

yes it is dude
May. 16, 2011  9:21 AM
 
One of the better stories I have read on the wbo. Good job. The prologue could be chapter 1 though considering it is actually part of the story but it doesn't matter too much (that is just me being fussy).
May. 16, 2011  9:37 AM
 
Yeah I tried to make it better then my others.
May. 16, 2011  9:40 AM
 
(May. 16, 2011  9:37 AM)Hope Wrote: Yeah I tried to make it better then my others.
Not just your stories, everyones stories.
May. 16, 2011  10:04 AM
 
Oh well thankyou very much!
Chapter 2 will be up tommorow
May. 16, 2011  11:26 AM
 
my charector request is
Name:Ryan horutaro
bey:aqua ketos
bey type: blalance
special move:aqua strike
and can my charector become one of the main charectors
May. 16, 2011  6:31 PM
 
Good story!May I make a request?
Name:Tutt Kuman
Age:18
Looks:Golden eyes, golden shirt, blue and yellow pants and sandles.
Personality:Funny, wise, loyal, stands up for himself and his friends, an EPIC blader, will do anything to protect his little brother.
Bey:Ancient Pharaoh R(a)145 R(ock)
Ancient:A better version of poison, and painted in non chipping gold paint.
PharaohGaspverlapping mummy bandages.
R(a)145:Like U145 only more wings.
R(ock):Well, a piece of rock.
He is a Friend!
Can he be a main character?If so, yes!
P.s has a girlfriend!If you want me too I can do a description of her!
May. 17, 2011  7:28 AM
 
Awesome I will fit them in.
Also would you mind describing his girlfriend.
Chapter 3
A ladder made out of cloth was hanging out of the window swaying in the wind.
''Wha???'' I thought, ''How did that happen?''
''I'll get you!!' the man cried charging at the door.
Without a second thought I quickly clambered over the window sill and climbed down the ladder. A parked black Holden was waiting outside my house.
''Oh great'' I said to myself, '' There's more people trying to kidnap me.
And that’s when I heard the sound. It started off as a small whirring sound like a fly but then I could see it's mosquito like body descend into my garden.
'' Far out!!!'' I said,'' How any more people want to kidnap me!''
As the Blackhawk landed some men in black uniform came out yelling '' Get him!''
Without any hesitation I ran into the cars boot.
''Welcome to the club'' a man said,'' I'm Tutt Kuman and this here is Ryan Horutaro''
May. 17, 2011  8:08 AM
 
<3 the story so far
PM me when you have posted a new chapter

Name: Ray
Bey: Ray Electro 80 R2F
Bey Desc: Black Ray metal wheel with a yellow clear wheel. the 80 is yellow and R2F is black at the plastic part with a yellow rubber tip. Electro is a bit like scorpio but with zig zag lightning on it.
Char desc: very energetic, excited easily and really good at beyblading cus he practices all the time. everyone underestimates him. quite short
Age: however olld the average age is for good guys in the story
May. 17, 2011  8:27 AM
 
Thanks that means a lot.
I'll PM you when it's up.
He can also be a member...
May. 17, 2011  9:34 AM
 
Can you pm me the chapters to please.
May. 17, 2011  9:41 AM
 
Chapter 4
‘’Who are you’’I said.
‘’We are the beysavers’’ Tutt replied strongly.
‘’What are the beysavers?’’
‘’They are a group of people who rescue bladers in danger of the Armageddon’’
‘’ What is the Armageddon?’’
‘’Enough questions buddy or we’ll drop you off back there.’’
I stopped talking immediately as I could tell he wasn’t joking. He drove us to the beyground where you practice battling.
‘’Get out!’’ Ryan screeched out as he yanked the door open.
‘’Why are we at the beyground?’’
‘’Just follow me, ok’’Tutt said.
We walked into the beyshop where we trade parts and Tutt said’ ’Shop 334, here’s the key.
She took the key gratefully and walked up to the box that read 334, then as quick as a flash she lifted the number up to reveal a keyhole, and she placed the key inside.
‘’You’re ready’’ she said, ‘’ but what are you buying now?
‘’The usuals a few RF’S and a new RS’’ Tutt replied before we could butt in.
We walked over to the door labelled 334 and stepped in.
‘’Wow’’ was the only thing I could manage to say.
May. 17, 2011  9:48 AM
 
It appears that this story has 2 chapter 3s.
May. 17, 2011  10:04 AM
 
Sorry I apoligise fro that but all characters will be put in so make some more.
May. 17, 2011  10:44 PM
 
Chapter 5 will be up today.
May. 18, 2011  6:54 AM
 
His gf's description is:
Name:Alex Smith
Age:17
Bey:Basalt Lynx GB145 WB
May. 18, 2011  8:44 AM
 
Chapter 5
The walls were covered with posters of tournaments and new beyblades yet to be released.
‘’Is that Titan Hercules 80 TS?’’ I asked.
‘’Yup’’ he said, ‘’ All the new beys are designed here’’.
‘’Welcome’’ A man said from behind the desk, ’’Take as long as you like to look around’’.
I gazed at the posters why what seemed like hours.
‘’can you please come here’ ’the same man who talked to me earlier said.
I sluggishly walked over to the office where he was sitting.
‘’You are in very grave danger’’ he said calmly,’’ You know the bey you have? ’He continued.
‘’Yeah’’I replied.
‘’Its power level is off the limit’ ’it could kill thousands if you wanted to’’.
‘’Wow’’ I thought amazed, ’but my dad bought for me!’’
‘’ You may find this a little distressing but your father was a, well a’’
‘’Just spit out ok!’’
‘’He wasn’t who you think he was actually a spy’’
‘’A spy?’’ what kind of crude joke is this?’’
‘’No I’m serious everything you know about him was false’’
‘’Even his name? ’I asked holding my tears.
‘’Yes’’ he says,’’ His name was actually Jay’’
May. 19, 2011  8:05 AM
 
and hope can my charector be the good guy and maybe you could say that the beysavers are the bad ones and my charector saves your charector then they try to capture you and can my charator speak more often
May. 19, 2011  8:07 AM
 
Ok sure.
I'm starting to think i'll scrap this story as its bad.