Sonic and the mystery of The Time Warrior

Sonic and the mystery of The Time Warrior

Chapter 1 - The beginning of the end
"You'll never win Eggman" shouted Sonic. He was battling Eggman in space(like most of the times), but this time Eggman had a secret weapon like none before. He was planning to use that very same weapon to drain all of Sonic's powers, but Sonic didn't know that, instead he too focused on defeating Eggman. "Take your best shot" said Eggman calmly,
"Okay then, you asked for it" responded Sonic and as he charged towards Eggman, Eggman revealed a shiny blue button and pressed it. The blue button revealed his true weapon, "Behold the Egg Sucker, MWA-HAHA-HA!!" exclaimed Eggman as he shot a laser beam towards Sonic.
"Oh no, what is happening to me? Why am I losing all of my powers?" said Sonic desperately, the Egg Sucker was transferring all of Sonic's powers to yet another machine a strange portal.

The portal began lighting up and then all of sudden there was a big BANG, a strange creature came out from the portal and said "Finally the time has come, you shall pay Nero, you and the whole world!". Eggman asked the being "Who are you? And what are you, a ally or a foe?" He just replied "Spiron the Eagle, and I'm not your ally nor your foe, just someone passing through" While Eggman and Spiron were discussing whether or not to conquer the world together, Sonic was falling down to Mobius and thinkingabout how he lost. "Sonic...SONNNIIICCC!!"
"Wha...Oh no, huh, where am I?" Said Sonic confused
"You're home Sonic" replied Tails, "You were knocked out for quite a while". Sonic had fallen back down to his home planet, Mobius. He told Tails about what happened during his battle with Eggman while they were travelling to a small village full of chao to meet up with Knuckles, when they reach the village Knuckles asks "So you lost, did you Sonic? That's new"
"Yeah so what, compared to you, I'm still the best around" responded Sonic.

And so, Sonic was doomed since Eggman got his powers , also he met someone quite weird, Spiron the Eagle.

I was thinking of naming my second chapter "A blast to the future"
Um...uh...well... How do I put this? Oh yeah; THIS IS A BAD STORY! When you switch who's talking, you need to make a new paragraph. You have countless grammar mistakes, and I'm not 100% sure what it is that I'm reading. Not as bad as some of the stories here, but still bad.
I hate to be rude, but this is horrible
Hrm...how can I put this? Sonic is not a franchise that can be made into a fan fiction easily. Eh, it is pretty bad. Not much can be done to save this one.
I agree, the grammar is bad, no flow, and WAY TOO CHOPPY. sorry for being a rather harsh mate, but you really need to fix this.

Trust us, we've been here, done this and we failed, miserably, till of course, Sparta, Temporal, Raigeko13, TITAN, Nwolf, and maybe me? started writing with one goal, quality that shines. If you need help, PM me, I will if i have the time.


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