Project Eccles

Here's the first chapter in a story I revised and have been working on. I'll post more chapters soon, but first I want some feedback, how good/bad it its, what you don't like, what needs improvement, and overall constructive criticism.

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Chapters
Chapter 1: Project Eccles, the Well Oiled Machine

An introduction to the main characters and what they do for a living.
Chapter 2: A History Lesson
A little bit of history of the world the story is based in and key plot development.