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(Apr. 17, 2011  7:52 AM)Hope Wrote: Shurono Cygnus flew out of the stadium it's track and tip broken.
''No!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!''cried Fearus as his body disentegrated into black powdery dust.

LOLZ it broke lolz
Sorry had to make Jake win somehow.
(Apr. 17, 2011  8:01 AM)Hope Wrote: Sorry had to make Jake win somehow.

yah i know lolz BUT IT BROKE LOLZ
''Thanks Adam''Jake said.
''Don't worry it was nothing''.
Another note was their and it read.
The next blader will meet you at dawn near the old temple,make sure your there.


Should i continue writing?
(Apr. 17, 2011  8:12 AM)Hope Wrote: ''Thanks Adam''Jake said.
''Don't worry it was nothing''.
Another note was their and it read.
The next blader will meet you at dawn near the old temple,make sure your there.


Should i continue writing?

yeah u should
The bey yet again transformed into a human but this time a girl known as Fericousha.
''Thank you so much for rescuing me'' Fericousha said.''How can i repay you.
''You can be me retinue along with Adam'' Jake said pleased with himself.
''Ok thanks and you know what my bey's Plasma Nova E145 SL, the E standing for Evouloution as my track changes.
Jake deciding to get some sleep ran back home and promised to meet Adam and Fericousha again at dawn
AWSOME
i love the story
keep writing
Beep!!!!!!Beep!!!!!!!!! The alarm clock rang.
''Woah'' Jake cried jumping out of bed in the dim light.
He ran immediatly to the old temple and was surprised to see Fericousha and Adam already there.
''Don't move!'' snarled a voice from behind a shadow.
As he suddenly stopped he relised Adam and Fericousha were tied up and gagged to an old tree.
''Verse me and if you win you'll have the chance to see your friends and mother again,but if you lose you will lose your prized bey.
''Bring it!'' Jake said almost confidently.
3.2.1 Let it Rip!!!!!!!!
No-one reading it should i continue?
Im reading it and it
LOVE it
its one of the best storys i have read on this site
im reading it
and itsa awsome
im reading it
I'm continuning this story!
The collison shocked the ground as Poison Medusa Gattyakied the opposing bey with tremondous force.''Come on!'' Adam and Fericousha cried. The revoulotions of Screech Harpy were getting slower by the second.''Special Move Screaming Harpy!'' He cried as his bey let out one long annoying screech!
Sorry if it seems that I am antagonizing you, but you really have to make these longer. This is literally like reading two sentences for a chapter. At least, at least, a paragraph.