One Way [Non Beyblade Story]

Here's my third story. I hope it's good. Please comment on what you think I put a lot of work into this.


Chapter One: Fall of wall Yaiko
There are grammar and spelling mistakes, and it's a little hard to follow. Also, the setting isn't really described at all. They could be at Party City for all we know.

Just work on that and you should be good!
Cliffhangers...

When will the next chapter be up? This is pretty cool. Yeah flea should be flee. Lol
Thanks Ultramarine. My teacher must suck. This was a story I wrote up for school and he told me it was OK, haha.

I updated the story a bit more. Thanks Kaizer, haha I just noticed. It might be up next week or sometime during the week.
Wait a sec, isn't this basically Attack on Titan? I only saw one episode...abridged, but the whole giant-Titan-eating-people thing is basically this.
Yeah, but it's in a different set-up. Why is there a problem? Haha.
No problem, just wondering, haha.

Also did your teacher miss the mistakes? There aren't too many, but still, teachers should catch that stuff XP might wanna look out for them, but otherwise, it's good!
Lol yeah I was thinking that, but couldn't recall the name so I didn't mention it.
I'll have to have a word with my teacher about this! Anyway thanks Ulramarin.