Here's my third story. I hope it's good. Please comment on what you think I put a lot of work into this.


Chapter One: Fall of wall Yaiko

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The story starts in a town known as "Prost" It's full of grass and lots of lakes' It's also a big town. They grow Cows and Pigs on farms. And it's a main tourist area.

But because of these monsters know as "Titans"the people here are fearful. So in order to protect them from them they built walls.

Yaiko, It's the first wall out of the three. Yaiko first, Yega second, and Urai third. The walls have been up for the past 150 years. It's too protect Human-Kind from these monsters known as "Titans".

A huge noise goes of. Everyone looks up. "NO, NO, NO, NO, NO, NO, NO, NO IT CAN'T BE." People think to them self. There's a huge Titan. Not just a normal size, but 15 times bigger. It destroys wall Yaiko. It then vanishes. Leaving behind Titans.


"Hurry up, move faster!" Says a soldier worried "Load the cannons! Get ready to fight! We got to leave town Prost"

"They're coming! Hurry up flee! They're going to kill us!" People scream frightened.

"What's coming to kill us? Tell me!" Says a puzzled boy.

A old man walks up to Erin

"Ha-ha young Erin, didn't you hear, the Titans are coming to eat us! They're going to chew through our flesh and bones. They're going to tramp on our heads, ha-ha. Say you don't have a blade to cut its weak stop do you? You know its neck?" Says a calm old man laughing.


"WHAT! How can you stay calm at a time like this, you old, crazy fool!" Erin says with an angry voice.

"Ha-ha, if I was you, I'd get out of here before they" Says the old man as he turns silent.

Our boy looks around, only to see a Titan! It has the old man in its mouth. It's eating through his flesh and bones. Just after he eats him, he turns around and starts to look at Erin



Erin's stunned. He thinks to him self: "I-I-I-I-I gotta get out of here! Ah, I can't feel my legs."


As the Titan picks up Erin and puts him in his mouth. The Titan feels something on its neck.

"Is, is that who I think it is?!" Erin thinks with a happy face.

"It's the captain of the Recon corps! But what is he doing here?"


The Titan falls to the ground. "Well looks like I did the job." Says the captain of the Recon Corps with a tiny smile on his face.


"Thank you, thank you. Are you really him? Captain Levi from the Recon Corps?" Erin asks.

"What are you saying? That I'm not him!" Levi says.


"No, no nothing like that. I'm just shocked you came here. In fact, what are you doing here. Weren't you meant to go on a mission?" Says Erin.

Levi kicks Erin to the ground. "Don't you ever tell anyone I was here. GOT IT!! Or I'll feed you to a Titan" Says Levi with a loud, angry voice.

Erin is in pain from being kicked. He replays: "Yeah, sure I promise." Erin says with a hurting chest.


Erin wonders what captain Levi is hiding, but for now, he knew he had to escape. Before another Titan got near him.


"EVERYONE MAKE YOUR WAY TO THE GATE. WE MUST ABANDON WALL YAIKO AT ONCE!" Says a soldier with a worried look on his face.

As Erin gets near the gate he looks up. It's another Titan. "Ahhhhh" Erin shouts.


As the Titan gets ready to eat him... But it's not just any Titan. It's the one that broke wall Yaiko. Erin screams "Ahhh" just as he enters the Titans mouth......

There are grammar and spelling mistakes, and it's a little hard to follow. Also, the setting isn't really described at all. They could be at Party City for all we know.

Just work on that and you should be good!

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“In the course of twenty crowded years, one parts with many illusions. I did not wish to lose the early ones. Some memories are realities, and are better than anything that can ever happen again.” -Jim Burden (My Ántonia)

Cliffhangers...

When will the next chapter be up? This is pretty cool. Yeah flea should be flee. Lol

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6 God is watching and I hope you're prepared to face him

Thanks Ultramarine. My teacher must suck. This was a story I wrote up for school and he told me it was OK, haha.

I updated the story a bit more. Thanks Kaizer, haha I just noticed. It might be up next week or sometime during the week.

Wait a sec, isn't this basically Attack on Titan? I only saw one episode...abridged, but the whole giant-Titan-eating-people thing is basically this.

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“In the course of twenty crowded years, one parts with many illusions. I did not wish to lose the early ones. Some memories are realities, and are better than anything that can ever happen again.” -Jim Burden (My Ántonia)

Yeah, but it's in a different set-up. Why is there a problem? Haha.

No problem, just wondering, haha.

Also did your teacher miss the mistakes? There aren't too many, but still, teachers should catch that stuff XP might wanna look out for them, but otherwise, it's good!

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“In the course of twenty crowded years, one parts with many illusions. I did not wish to lose the early ones. Some memories are realities, and are better than anything that can ever happen again.” -Jim Burden (My Ántonia)

Lol yeah I was thinking that, but couldn't recall the name so I didn't mention it.

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6 God is watching and I hope you're prepared to face him

I'll have to have a word with my teacher about this! Anyway thanks Ulramarin.