@BeybladerLeone Try fixing up the grammar.I think I saw misspells still.Also,try to make it organized.
My Beyblade Story or Beyblade Ultimate Bey
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i said i wrote it on my psp and its kind of hard to spell stuff properly on it.
this wasn't written on my psp.
this wasn't written on my psp.
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Make the first chapter like this if you want.
Chapter 1
1000 years ago.
"Ha,you will never defeat my Destroyer you weakling" said Emperor Masen Kaktes
"I will not let you defeat me"muttered Zing Xapini.
The air was filled with sparks as two Beyblades clashed with enormous power.
"Go Angel"cried Zing as the Beys clashed again.
The Angel,as the Bey was called was taking a beating from the other Bey called The Destroyer.The BeyBattle would determine the fate of Marple Village.
"Okay,Destroyer use Black Flame Strike!"shouted Emperor Masen.
"Angel use Holy Wings!"shouted Zing.
As the two Beys clashed the energy between the two Beys was so enormous that there was a huge explosion.The stadium fiiled with smoke.
When the smoke cleared,Destroyer was defeated,laying still in the arena and Emperor Masen was nowhere to be seen...
The Present Day
A blader arrived at a Beyblade stadium with a confident smile playing at his lips.
@beybladerleone Okay I understand than why it was organized.But that up there should help you out ^.
Chapter 1
1000 years ago.
"Ha,you will never defeat my Destroyer you weakling" said Emperor Masen Kaktes
"I will not let you defeat me"muttered Zing Xapini.
The air was filled with sparks as two Beyblades clashed with enormous power.
"Go Angel"cried Zing as the Beys clashed again.
The Angel,as the Bey was called was taking a beating from the other Bey called The Destroyer.The BeyBattle would determine the fate of Marple Village.
"Okay,Destroyer use Black Flame Strike!"shouted Emperor Masen.
"Angel use Holy Wings!"shouted Zing.
As the two Beys clashed the energy between the two Beys was so enormous that there was a huge explosion.The stadium fiiled with smoke.
When the smoke cleared,Destroyer was defeated,laying still in the arena and Emperor Masen was nowhere to be seen...
The Present Day
A blader arrived at a Beyblade stadium with a confident smile playing at his lips.
@beybladerleone Okay I understand than why it was organized.But that up there should help you out ^.
thanks for the help