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Well, after seeing Sparta/DrigerMV's post about their story from back in the day, it made me remember all the stories I had written. So, without further ado, let's get this started!
Remember when you were younger, and you thought your stories were "godly"? Looking at them now, you realize they weren't that good at all (or maybe they are o.O ) ! Share your stories with us, maybe you've improved! Or maybe you just want the tinglish, nostalgic feeling of remembering the day you wrote your story! We promise not to make fun of you :3
Attention! Due to the limit of spoilers allowed in one post, the rest of the stories will be continued here!
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Remember when you were younger, and you thought your stories were "godly"? Looking at them now, you realize they weren't that good at all (or maybe they are o.O ) ! Share your stories with us, maybe you've improved! Or maybe you just want the tinglish, nostalgic feeling of remembering the day you wrote your story! We promise not to make fun of you :3
Post your stories here! Please, if you can remember, post your age when you wrote it, to see how long ago it was written. You can also put notations/comments on your pieces, but make it either in smaller text, or a different color, so we know it's a note, and not part of the original story. Also, please don't edit/make a story and claim it was made a long time ago. We want to see real childhood work! 
Earn a spot in the OP if you submit at least two stories!
Earn a spot in the OP if you submit at least two stories!It's recommended to put your story in a spoiler, but if it's short enough, you don't have to.
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- NoodooSoup (Click to View)
The Cookie Express (Click to View)NoodooSoup - Age 9-11 (I had a hiatus)
Warning: Somewhat Long Story - Also Unfinished
Claudia and her 9 year old little brother, Chris were getting ready to go to sleep. Claudia thought that it was unfair that she, a 12 year old, had the same bedtime as a 9 year old which was her brother. She would try to sneak watching TV after bed, but Chris would always tell on her. One day (which was a miracle) Claudia sneaked watching TV after bed without Chris telling on her. But, she heard rumbling. She wanted to see what it was, but Chris would find out when he woke up in the middle of the night like always. The only thing Claudia could do was take Chris with her. She didn't want to because the fact that Chris was annoying. But, she did it. "Chrriiss... Chrriiss..." Claudia said silently to wake Chris up. Chris opened his eyes a teeny bit and asked in a sleepy voice "Why are you waking me up, Claud?†Claudia replied, "Well I heard a weird noise and I want you to come with me and don’t call me Claud..." Chris wouldn't budge. Then Claudia offered a buck fifty (haha, what the hell is this supposed to mean?) and a button. Chris had now budged! Chris put on his favorite Pokemon sweater. Claudia got the closest sweater. Ugh... it was the one with the crayon, brownie and marker stains reading "IM WITH STUPID" with an arrow pointing upward to her face. She doesn't know why her grandma bought her that. Oh wait... her grandma was wearing sunglasses instead of sight glasses. Chris and Claudia went to Rocky Road Park where they had followed the sound to. They saw a large train in front of them. There were glowing windows on the train. There was a small door in front of them leading to the inside of the train. Near it there were big letters reading "THE COOKIE EXPRESS". Claudia went in the door. Chris didn't want to go, but he didn't know the way back home so he just followed Claudia into the train. There were other children; runaway children and teens. The train ride was free and short. About 45 minutes. After that, there was a colorful portal. It looked like the Northern Lights. The train zoomed in at a speed of 75 mph. There was a huge flash of light and the next thing they knew they were in a sugar-full, anti-adult, kid-loving land. Everything a child loved. There was a creaky stop. Chris and Claudia stepped out of the bus into the icing/snow floor. Cup and Bowl boats floated in the caramel lake. Chris thought it must be hard for the boats to navigate in the caramel lake because caramel is so thick. Claudia wanted to explore the strange land more so she hopped on a bowl boat. Chris didn't know if the train was a round trip so he hopped on the bowl boat with her. The caramel lake was thick, but the current was hard enough to push the bowl boat at a speed of 15 mph. While the boat moved, Claudia saw lollipop trees, icing snow, marshmallow bushes and gingerbread houses. Chris dipped his finger into the caramel and put it in his mouth. "Mmmmm..." Chris said. "Hey, Claud. You want some?" Chris said. "No, I'm not really a sweet tooth. I'll have some later." Claudia said. Everything seemed normal until Chris felt rumbling and fell into the lake. Claudia tried to help Chris in but a big, huge figure popped out of the lake. It looked like a chocolate covered dragon with sharp claws. "AHHHHH!!"Chris and Claudia screamed. The creature was heading to them. Claudia and Chris tried to go the opposite way, but the current just pushed them closer to the dragon. Suddenly, Chris jumped off the bowl boat and tried to swim to the shore. "To the gingerbread house!" Chris yelled. The dragon was getting closer. Claudia was getting closer. The next thing Chris heard was "CHRIS!! AHHHH!!†Claudia was in the lake, struggling to get to shore. The dragon had flipped the boat over. Chris reached out his arms, struggling to get his sister on shore. "Hold on... Hold on" Chris begged grasping Claudia's arms. Chris pulled Claudia up to the shore... just in time for the dragon! "Come on, Claud! Hurry up!" Chris yelled. Once Claudia was on the shore, she and Chris ran to the gingerbread house. A loud ROOAARR hit their ears at the moment they stepped in the door. The icing snow floor was making it hard to run. "I think were safe in here" Chris said crouching in the corner. "Hello? Who's there?" a voice said. "Uhhh... Claudia and Christopher Kline. Are you going to hurt us?" Claudia said clearing her throat. "Of course NOT!" Claudia picked herself up, holding Chris' hand. "Is that dragon going to break your house? Or eat it?" Chris asked. "WHAT?! A DRAGON! NO WAY! NO WAY!" the voice said. The voice was getting closer. In its place was a tannish, cookie-like, thin gingerbread man. "Well... forgetting that awful dragon, my name is Cook. Nice to meet you" the gingerbread man said. "I've lived here quite a while and I've never seen a dragon before." Cook said. "Well now there is!" Claudia said. "I know a safe place in this land. It's about... ummm, 13 miles away!" Cook said. "Let's go!" Chris said. Chris, Claudia and Cook stood guard. "C'mon" Chris said pointing the signal. They crouched on the ground, crawling away from the dragon. The dragon was starting to catch Cook's eye. Then it grabbed Cook! "Help! Help! Help!" Cook screamed. "Don't worry! I'll save you Cook!" Chris screamed. Claudia helped Chris pull one of the lollipop trees off the ground. They threw the tree into the dragon's left nostril. The dragon let go of Cook in a loud ROOAARR. "Cook, no!" Claudia screamed. She ran to Cook trying to catch him. He landed on the ground with a thump. Chris ran up to Cook. "Please be okay... please." Chris said, placing his hand on Cook's chest. "Its okay, Chris. No need to worry." Cook said, standing up. (quick recovery, much?) "Let's go on before anyone else gets caught up with that dragon." Cook said. While they were walking, Cook found some licorice rope and a lollipop tree. "Hey! Let's use it as a slingshot!†Cook said. They tied one end of the licorice rope to the ground. Then they pulled the end of the lollipop tree and tied it to the rope. "Get on!" Cook said. Claudia and Chris stepped on the lollipop. Chris' feet stuck on the lollipop. He struggled to lift his feet off the lollipop. Cook placed the palm of his hands on the end of the rope which was tied to the ground. With his hands still on rope he walked to the lollipop. "Hold on to each other!" Cook said grasping Claudia's hand. He untied the rope. The children, Claudia and Chris, held on tight. They flew in the air, at a frightening speed. "Where are we going?!" Claudia yelled out. "To Cookie Palace!" Cook screamed in a pleasentful yell. "But what about the hiding place?!" Chris said trying to yell through the powerful breeze. "Do not worry! We will speak to Queen Candice and King Licorice! They will help us for sure!" Cook said. The closer they got, the bigger Cookie Palace was. Cookie Palace was beautiful. There was about 1,276 acres including the garden and the backyard. Chris still held on tight to Claudia's hand. They landed in the main garden closest to the main entrance. Claudia spit out some grass out of her mouth. "Ewww!" Claudia said. "C'mon, let's go in!" Cook said. Cook, Chris and Claudia walked to the 20 floor palace. The door was about 4 yards long. There was a speaker near the door, a doorbell and a small camera. Cook pressed the doorbell. "Hello, who is it?" a voice spoke out of the speaker. "Cook Gingers and Claudia and Christopher Kline. We are here to see the Queen and King. May we speak to them?" Cook said looking at the camera. "Do you have an appointment?" the voice said again. "No... But we MUST speak to the Queen and King!", Cook said. "Fine, carry on.†the voice said. The door was now wide open. Claudia, Chris, and Cook stepped into the palace. It was filled with security guards dressed in red and white suits. Their red and white suits were covered with a peppermint scent. The security guards did not move, even if you poked them. Then, Chris tried to talk to one of the guards. "Where is the King and Queen's room? Are they in there? Where are they?" Chris asked the security guard. "Let me escort you and your friends..." the security guard said. Chris told Cook and Claudia to follow the guard. The guard walked through the purple and gold painted hallways. One room said "THE ROYAL KITCHEN". "Cool! Can we go in there?" Claudia said. "I thought you wanted to see the King and Queen..." the guard said. "Well we will do that later, sir. This is what Claudia requests." Cook said. "At your request." the guard said. The door had a fingerprint scanner. The guard placed his left thumb on the scanner. The solid gold door opened. Steam and gas flew out of the room. The room was filled with machines and chefs. "Mmmm... what is that smell?" Claudia said sniffing the air. She followed the smell to one very new machine. There was a clear, glass, small window on the machine. With this window you could see what the machine was doing. Inside the machine, there was cookie dough. The machine was kneading the cookie dough. "Hey! That's Cookie Cake!" Claudia exclaimed. The machine proceeded to the next step. It put the cookie dough in a cake mold. The mold was shaped like the King's crown. The next step the machine moved on to was baking. The machine had light speed baking technology. The cake was done baking in about two minutes. "Mmmm... that looks so fluffy..." Chris said licking his lips. The cake came out of the machine. A worker, dressed in a tannish suit with brown polka dots, like the other workers, took the cake. The uniform was similar to a chocolate chip cookie. The worker took the cake to a machine. The machine was labeled KING/QUEEN SLOT. Claudia looked up at the security guard and asked him "Why is that worker putting the cake in the machine? Is it not already done?".â€He is delivering the cake to the King or Queen." the guard said. "Let’s go..." Cook said. "To where do you request?" the guard asked. "May we please go to the Royal Sports Room?!" Chris shouted out in pleasure. "Yes we may..." the white and red suited guard said. Claudia, Cook, Chris and the guard walked outside of the room. But before leaving, Chris took a small pillowy piece of a Cherry Berry Cotton Candy Cookie. "Mmmmm..." Chris said with his mouth very watery. Claudia noticed what he said and she turned back. "What are you doing Chris?" she said looking back. "Nothing..." Chris said but because of the cookie in his mouth when he said nothing it sounded like he said "nushing". Claudia just turned away ignoring him. He was relieved that she didn't notice. Once they walked outside, the yummy sugary smells of candy, cookies, cake and the finest pasta in the world had faded away. Chris had loved those smells and he had kind of missed it in a way. As they walked, Chris looked at all the signs on the big doors that said stuff like "THE ROYAL DINING ROOM" and "THE ROYAL LIBRARY". Then, as they walked calmly through the halls, Claudia noticed something. A smell. Something of much cleanliness and delight. Almost even recognizable as the sprays and soaps used to clean sinks and stuff like that. The mint smell had faded away. A large door ended the hallway. The smell peeped under the door. A sign that read “THE ROYAL SPORTS ROOM†lay on the door. The security guard opened the door with a gesture. He bowed at Claudia and said, “Ladies first…†As usual, Chris jumped right in front of Claudia and ran into the room. The room was only a large blue mat and six buttons on the wall that read: Baseball, Soccer, Tennis, Football, Basketball and Ice Sports. “This is it?! This blue mat is the Royal Sports Room?! This stinks!†Chris exclaimed in shock. “Of course not!†the security guard said. He walked over to the buttons on the wall. “What would you like to do?†he said calmly. Chris shook his head and thought. “Hmm… How about Basketball?†he said. The security guard shook his head. He placed his forefinger over the button that read Basketball. Four baskets appeared. The floor changed to look like a basketball court and there were two basketballs on the floor. “Whoa! But now let’s try…†Chris said. “Ice sports!†Claudia exclaimed. The security guard pressed the Ice Sports button. The floor changed into ice. There was a large scoreboard on the wall. There was a bench with a fence around it in a dugout. Five Ice skates, ten hockey skates, two hockey pucks, ten hockey sticks and five boys’ and girls’ jackets where in the dugout. “Awesome!†Claudia yelled. She ran up to the pink pair of skates with the lavender fluff on the edge. “This is perfect!†she yelled putting them on. The guard smiled at her gently. Chris frowned at the guard. “I don’t want to play Ice Sports any more. Would you like to play a game of Tennis?†Chris complained. The guard pressed the Tennis button. The floor changed and Claudia fell on her skates. “Umm… I was still skating!!†she yelled rubbing her bottom. Chris rolled his eyes. There were bleachers on the side with two tennis rackets, tennis shoes and three tennis balls. Chris put the blue and white tennis shoes on (blue is his favorite color) and grabbed the blue and white tennis racket. Claudia put on the red and black tennis shoes and grabbed the red and black tennis racket. She threw the tennis ball in the air. “My serve!†Claudia called out. “Fine!†Chris replied smiling. Claudia swung the racket and hit the ball. Chris bounced it back and Claudia bounced it back and so on. The ball bounced for about a minute until Chris swung and missed. “I… I was distracted! No fair!†he whined stomping his tennis shoes into his puddle of tears. Claudia ignored his baby behavior and walked over to the buttons on the wall. “I think I’ll play… Soccer!†she yelled. She slammed her hand on the button that read Soccer. Chris’ tear puddle disappeared as the floor turned grassy. The walls stretched out and there was a net on each side of the room. On the grass lay six pairs of cleats (three red and black pairs and three blue and white pairs), six uniforms, two pairs of goalie gloves and masks, and three soccer balls. “Let’s play!†Claudia yelled. She grinned because she was clearly better than Chris at soccer. “Well let me get first kick since your better than me… Hey! Where’s my team?†Chris yelled. The security guard smiled and pressed a button on his watch. The door opened and four robots- two in each team color- marched in. “Meet your teammates!†he said. The red and black robots marched over to Claudia’s side. One of them went to the wide net and picked the goalie gloves and masks from the grassy terrain. The black and white soccer ball bobbled over to Chris’ grass stained sneakers.
The horror, the horror! Shield your eyes from this! So many grammatical mistakes, tense changes, and no paragraphs. It's pretty funny to read the outrageous plot, though.
The Super Automatic Smoothie Machine (Click to View)NoodooSoup - Age 7
Once upon a time in a town called Grappleville, there lived a young boy named Ben. Ben was in the fifth grade and he was ten years old. Ben's father was an inventor. He invented a way to bake a cake without using an oven, but using only a simple microwave and a generator. Ben also had four best friends: Marco, Jenny, Vincent, and Jeramy. They were also in the fifth grade. One day their teacher Ms. Caramel gave them an assignment. You had to work in a group of two-five people and make any kind of invention of anything you liked. Ben, Marco, Jenny, Vincent, and Jeramy decided to work together. Ben said, "How about chocolate?". Ben and Jeramy raised their hands for the idea. Then, Marco said "How about icecream...". Marco and Vincent raised their hands for the idea. Suddenly, Jenny shouted, "I've got it! Smoothies!". All of the five children raised their hands. They started to work right away. Ben got all of the items they needed to make the smoothie machine from his dad (A.K.A, The Super Automatic Smoothie Machine). Jenny went to the store to buy fruit like, strawberries, rasberries, bananas, but not pineapples because Jeramy was alergic to them. Marco and Vincent looked for ice and milk in their apartments while Jeramy was stuck getting chocolate chips. Ben and his dad put the machine together and added an engine. The machine was small, about the size of a coffee machine. Everyone else sorted the ingredients. Then, they were ready to put the ingredients into the machine. After a while, two cups filled with fruity and chocolatey smoothies popped out on the platform on the machine. Jeramy and Jenny tasted the smoothies and they were delicious! The children cheered for their job well done. On the due date of the assignment, Ms. Caramel tried the machine to see if it worked. then she tried the smoothie. She gave them an A+ for the Super Automatic Smoothie Machine.
Probably the first story I've ever written that I remember and have saved.
Sugar Rush! (Click to View)NoodooSoup - Age 10
Warning: Unfinished.
Billy Sheen hurried over to the table. His curly, dark, brown hair flopped over his green eyes. He glanced over to the table to see his little brother Phoenix sitting on his chair. Phoenix was holding a blue certificate that read, “To Phoenix Vick Sheen for Excellence in Mathematicsâ€. Phoenix grinned at Billy holding the certificate in his face. Billy ignored him at sat in front of the roast beef at the table. He sniffed the steamy air and saw his mother coming to serve him. Phoenix brushed his wavy blonde hair out of his sweaty forehead. “Ugh! Phoenix! You’re sweating on the food!†Billy yelled blocking his face of sweat. “Just a force of habit…†Phoenix snickered continuing to brush his hair. Billy rolled his eyes and reached into his pockets, He pulled out a king sized Mr. Goodbar. His face scrunched into a smile. Then, he suddenly realized his nose was directly at the bar and his mother and Phoenix were staring at him angrily. “Billy, Billy, Billy… Caught you again…†Phoenix smirked glancing over to his father which was walking towards the table. “Billy! How many times did I tell you not to eat candy before lunch?†Billy’s father said dropping his suitcase and loosening his tie. His heavy stomps silenced the crowd at the table. The bushy brown eyebrows on his tan face widened. Billy crouched under the table to prevent his father’s long talks about rights and wrongs. He slowly chomped down on the nutty surface of the Mr. Goodbar. “Hi! How’s my all-star Phoenix doing? And where’s my champ Billy?†his father said hugging Phoenix like a giant teddy bear. “Umm… down here, dad…†Billy said popping out from under the table. His smile subsided into a shrill frown. “Now Billy, what’s the matter, champ?†his father asked curiously. Billy stuffed the unfinished bar in his pocket causing an abyss of chocolate in it. When he reached his hand out of his pocket, a melted mess was on it like milk on cereal. He struggled to eat the chocolate so his parents wouldn’t notice. “You didn’t answer my question, champ,†Billy’s father said, sounding irritated. His mom cut a piece of roast beef and slapped it on his plate. The greasy meat made a clap as it landed. Drops of grease flew like raindrops across Phoenix’s face. Billy struggled to keep his loud laughter shut. Phoenix’s eyes watered as he stomped all the way to his moist room. “Billy! I HATE YOU!†he yelled halfway across the room. “Whoa… That’s reeeaaal harsh…†Billy moaned. His father rolled his eyes at Billy. “Today my crew and I invented something new… But its only been tested on bats. The bats were fine after the test. But, don’t try me… Nobody EATS THE INVENTION!†he said. Billy’s mind wasn’t on his father’s words- They were on the Mr. Goodbar in his pocket. He jabbed his fork into the roasted beef on his plate. “Rice?†he said. His mother took a large spoonful of yellow rice and put it on his plate. “Wait…†Billy said getting up to go to kitchen. He took the sugar container and took it to the table. The tiny sugar grains fell atop his rice and meat. “Billy! You just ruined perfectly good food!†his mother yelled. Billy shook his head in disbelief and stuffed the food into his drooling mouth. “See?†he said while rice was spluttering out his mouth. His father rolled his eyes again. Billy angrily stood up to go to a private place- his father’s laboratory. He looked at the main desk- covered with disk-like colorful candies! “Yeeeessss!†he yelled. Billy grabbed one of the candies and devoured it whole. He felt a tingling shock in his body. Then, a larger shock. “Ahhhhhhh!†he screamed. The shock made Billy thump to the ground. “I… I feel weird…†he said to himself getting up. He screamed when he saw his face in the mirror. His curly, brown hair had turned into white, spiky hair. His outfit had changed too, with a blue headband and costume. “This is a definite problem…†Billy murmured. Until he saw a case with a gumball filled gun. On his right hand a Multi Choco Beam was strapped on. The item was filled with CHOCOLATE bullets. “Daaaadddd!†he yelled aloud. His father’s loud stomping filled Billy’s ears. The large metal door opened and Billy took cover. Billy hid behind a large file cabinet. “Billy! What have you,†Billy popped out from behind the cabinet. “Oh… my… gosh…†his father said looking at Billy. “What happened, champ?!†he said dropping his suitcase. “Dad… what happened to me?!†Billy whined. “I… I don’t know… did you eat the candies?†his father said sadly.
A lot better than I remembered, haha.
I have more, which I still need to find. I had two series' too, titled Sammy the Secret Agent Squirrel (2/3 stories), and My Bummer Vacation (2.5 stories). Expect more horrible stories from me!
- Sparta (Click to View)
Star Wars: Two Jedi Knights: Friends and Enemies! (Click to View)Sparta - Age 9
Introduction:
It is the time of the Old Republic, and the battle of Geonosis is near. More Jedi are needed. Jedi were sent out to get more reinforcements, one to Tatooine, where 2 twins lived…
Chapter 1:
Clash! 2 metal lightsabers banged against each other. The twins, Brandon and Kevin were having a battle with their metal tubed fake lightsabers.
“I bet ya I’ll win!†Kevin yelled over the noise.
“No way!†Brandon yelled back.
“I’ll bet you a hundred credits I’ll win!†Kevin screamed as the battle roared on.
“You’re on!†Brandon yelled back, over the roar of the fake sabers. Suddenly, Kevin directed the saber toward Brandon’s legs, but Brandon jumped over the hard, metal saber!
The battle continued, each time their blades hit, the sparks would shoot up like shooting stars and after float around like fire flies dancing. Then, Kevin aimed for Brandon’s head, but Brandon ducked his head just in time! Brandon tried it but Kevin blocked it. All of a sudden, Kevin thrusted his saber at Brandon! He tried to react quickly, but it was to late. The cold metal saber hit Brandon and he knew he had lost. Brandon gave up his only 100 credits, disappointedly. He knew he’d never win a battle against him.
That night, their dad woke Kevin up and said, “Kevin, you have to go.â€
“Where?†Kevin asked.
“To the orphanage,†Dad replied. Kevin quietly packed his stuff. “Bye Bran,†Kevin whispered before he left.
As the door closed, Brandon woke up. He looked around. Kevin was nowhere to be found.
Chapter 2:
The next morning Brandon asked his dad where Kevin was. “He ran away.†His dad replied.
“Why?†Brandon asked.
“I don’t know, he just did,†his dad replied trying to change the subject.
Exactly a year later at dawn, Brandon’s dad said “leave now to the orphanage, droid ships are coming!â€. So Brandon packed his things and thought about something “hey dad, won’t you be leaving also, to get away from those droids?†Brandon asked.
“nope I can take ‘em†his dad said in his tough voice. Brandon gave a weak smile.
Meanwhile, at the orphanage, Kevin was sitting in a pen, or as people called it, “the cribby houseâ€. Anyway, Kevin was practicing with a toy, blue plastic saber when suddenly a woman came. “What in the world is this beast!?†the woman (who was about 98 years old) said.
“Be quiet old hag!†Kevin yelled in a deep, dirty voice.
“I never liked you anyway!†the woman clearly stated.
“Can someone make this woman shut!?†Kevin cursed under his breath.
Then, for no reason at all, the woman ran away screaming “help, this boy’s an ugly thing! I’m telling your mother!!â€
“I don’t care, ‘cause my mother died right after I was born!, which was when exactly the new standard year!!†Kevin roared back. When Kevin turned around to practice more, he saw someone he thought he’d never see again.
Chapter 3:
“Brandon, my bud!†Kevin screeched in delight as he threw his arm around his old twin. “take this back†Kevin said as he took 100 credits out of his pocket. “no, keep ‘em, you won ‘em fair and square†Brandon said “fine I’ll keep 50 of them, but you keep the other 50, ok?†Kevin asked “deal†Brandon said, so he took back 50 of his own credits.
That night, at midnight, an alarm whent off and Kevin woke up. “great, war’s coming here,†Kevin muttered as he woke Brandon up. “What’s wrong?†Brandon asked as he got out of his bed “w-w-war is c-coming†Kevin whimpered as he too, got out of bed.
Suddenly something caught Kevin’s eye, a metal object with little buttons on it “it’s metal so it’ll somewhat keep us alive!†Kevin said in his head as he picked up the object, Suddenly a Tuscan Raider came to kill them! It was brownish-tanish with a chocolate coloured toga. He smelled like dried blood and even looked like he’d been attacked by a million moistfarmers (A/N: I have no idea…) Suddenly he lounged screaming “huh-huh-huhng-huh!â€! “I hope this works Kevin said as he pushed a red button on the tube of metal, and it did, A light blue streak shot out of what Kevin and Brandon realized to be a real saber, what ment is that it cuts things off people and things, not just stings them. So Kevin Charged the tuskin, but it pulled out a metal pointed stick and Kevin looked at Brandon and he new what he had to do, so he forward flip toward Kevin and took the Saber right out of Kevin’s hands “hey wh-“ Kevin started but he was to amazed to finish. Brandon aimed for the legs…missed. Brandon tried to stab…to late! Tuskin moved to the right. Brandon went for the head stab…Tuskin reared hgis head backwards just in time, Brandon jumped up and tried to stab from behind…a hit! The Tuskin was glued to the spot and couldn’t move. “that’ll leave a mark†Brandon said as he took the Saber out of the tuskins body.
Suddenly, a man came over and said “we could use a good jedi like you, son!†“but my twin beat me in a saber battle, can he come to?†Brandon asked politely. “Alright then, you may both come, but you need to hurry, the ship is over there, there is little time to spare†he stated.
Chapter 4:
“Where are we going?†Brandon asked as they aborded the ship. “Well, first we’re going to Corasant. Then we’re going to Geanosis,†the Jedi replied. “We’re going to Corasaunt!†Kevin exclaimed. Brandon knew Kevin had always wanted to go there. That was the home of the Jedi Knights of the Galactic Republic.
“I already have some parts. I tell you how to make them. Don’t add the little details right now. Do them later. You’ve got to hurry. We’re almost out of time,†he said. “What are we making?†Brandon asked. “We’re making lightsabers,†Kevin said. “Good job,†said the man, “My name is Chris.†What did you do Kev?†Brandon asked. “I don’t know,†Kevin replied. “He used the force,†Chris answered. “You’re both going to need it where we’re going.â€
Chapter 5:
“Where are we going?†Kevin asked. “To a greatly dangerous war,†Chris whispered. “But, why did you need us?†Brandon questioned. “And why will we need the force?†Kevin asked. “We need you as Jedi because it’s the beginning of a war, plus a Bounty Hunter, so many Jedi Knights will die in this war,†He rushed.
“Then how do you know we’re not gonna die?†Kevin asked. “We don’t. But we need you,†Chris replied. “Then we’d clearly be safer on Tatooine,†Brandon stated. “No. If the druids win, they’re going to try to destroy Tatooine,†Chris firmly stated. “Fine,†Brandon complained.
“Hey, I see Geanosis!†Kevin exclaimed. “Well, get ready then. May the force be with you,†Chris sincerely said.
“Get ready, Dooku, my children are coming, now as Jedi,†their dad, the Emporor menicingly said. “I will master. I’ll destroy every Jedi Knight, and with druids and clones it should be easy,†Count Dooku replied to his master. “Let the battle begin.â€
- Aura (Click to View)
The Sorcerer (Click to View)Aura- Age ??
Bang!
"Still can't get that charm right!" said Modo. Modo did the levitation charm wrong. The levitation charm was the most simplest charm there was.
Modo was a sorcerer. There are sorcerers, there are enchanters and there are warriors. Sorcerers are the most powerful of them all. They could do charms and they could control the four elements. Which was fire, water, earth and air. But Modo was a beginner. Only masters can control the elements. Modo was an orphan. The orphanage he was in had the meanest owners. They didn't know he was a sorcerer. He tried to do charms on them but it would never work.
Modo was a twelve year old boy. He had fair hair. He wore a small bag which he carried a beginner charm book inside. He had pointy long ears. Almost as if he was an elf. His hair was spiky and had a fiery look to it. The orphanage was dark and gloomy. When you went in the entrance, all you saw is a big, dark hall. Each one had a dormitory. It had over five-hundred boys. They got fed porridge once a day in the afternoon. Modo hated porridge but it was the only thing he could eat.
He ended up in the orphanage after his parents died by an assassin trying to kill Modo when he was two. Modo's parents died trying to protect him. The assassin was trying to kill Modo because there was something special about him.. Modo just couldn't figure out what was so special about him. He couldn't do charms, he couldn't do things that other kids could. He just couldn't figure out what was so special about him.
Modo tried and tried but he couldn't get the levitation charm right. He was trying to move his bag which he left on the floor, but accidentally he lifted one of the floorboards. He knew he was in trouble but he was sort of happy that he got the levitation charm right. He heard footsteps coming towards the dormitory. The door flung open. There was a chubby old man standing in the doorway. It was Mr. McGann, the owner, looking angrier than ever. He walked over to the lifted floorboard. He took out some old dusty book. He threw it at Modo. "You're trying to hide your old book in the floorboard!" shouted Mr. McGann. Modo knew it wasn't his. When
Mr. McGann walked out of the dormitory, Modo looked at the front cover. It said: "Advanced Charm Book". Modo opened the book. At first there was nothing, but then there was a flash of light and then it said: "Time Traveling". Modo read on. There were charms for shape-shifting, charms for flying and even charms for dancing.
Modo then heard a voice, a very angry voice. "Lights off!" He would have to finish reading in the morning.
In the morning, he was getting dressed, when he couldn't see himself in the mirror, only two adults regally dressed. The woman had a long, white cloak and a diamond ring. The man wore a black cloak and had necklace with some sort of diamond or jewel.
The lady started talking: "Hello, my son." Then the man whispered to Modo: "We will meet again at a more appropriate time." And they then disappeared. Modo was very confused. But then an idea struck him! It was his parents! And know he knew something was up.
After months and months of memorizing the charms, Modo was ready to try the time traveling charm. He said it. It all went dark and then he was in the middle of a forest. Modo was very scared. He must of went before the orphanage was built. He looked in his bag. The book was gone. Then he noticed he had a hole in his bag. He couldn't remember the charm. All he knew was the levitation charm. He heard a rustling in the trees. He heard it get closer and closer. He knew no charm to protect him. But then it came out. It was only a bird. He heard another sound but it was a strange sound. A sound he had never heard before. It sounded like a whistle but deeper. It got louder and louder. He saw a hole being burnt in the bush. It was a baby dragon. It had a long snout, it had a scaled back and it had two not-so big wings. But when a baby comes there's always the mother. And the battle was on!
Modo ran and ran, but he came to a dead end. He put out his hand. And somehow a protective shield stopped the dragon. Modo thought it was him doing it but then he saw another sorcerer. He was doing it. And he said a charm and the dragon was gone. But before he could thank him, he was gone.
Modo had just seen an assistant de mestre, which is heblin, which is the sorcerer language. It means master sorcerer. He must of been training for years. He must of been Forta El Gran. His name means Strong The Great. He was the greatest sorcerer of all time.
Modo was walking for about a day, when he came to a lake. He was walking over to the lake when a pebble came right for him. Modo put out his hand to stop it from hitting his face, but it never hit him. Modo opened his eyes. The pebble was floating in the air. Modo moved his hand. He was controlling the element earth. He took a drink and he was off.
After walking for a while, he came to a house. He knocked on the door, but no one was there, so he went in. But it wasn't a normal house. It was an enchanted house. He was back in the orphanage. As if nothing ever happened.
Attention! Due to the limit of spoilers allowed in one post, the rest of the stories will be continued here!
"Yeah we're all going the same way down. I'm just trying to write it all down." - The Airborne Toxic Event
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I just didn't know whether you wanted it in the OP or not 
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