LibraEagle's story Shadow Bladers

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Kyuubi-master's story made me want to make one too Stupid

Characters

Neo Clore
Gender-Male
Bey- Cyclone Griffon V125ES
V125 stands for Vortex it has 8 small blades similar to the one on T125 that create a air current.

Zarit Jun
Gender- Male
Bey- Aqua Pisces 145SD

Goral Saaf
Gender-Male
Bey-Death Hawk MD125WD
MD stands for Metal Defense and is coverd by metal.

Chapter 1

"3!"
"2!"
"1!"
"Let it rip!"
I watched as my bey Cyclone Griffon made contact with my friend's bey in midair knocking it out of the stadium easily.
"Come on Neo you always win!" Zarit complained.
"Maybe that's a sign you need to practice a little more" I said as my bey flew back into my hand.
"So are you entering the tournament tommorow?" I asked.
"Of course I am who wouldn't be" said Zarit.
I looked at the dark sky outside "Oh I better go home now see ya" I said
As I walked home I thought of the strategies I should use in the tournament.
"Shouldn't you be sleeping in bed little boy" I heard someone say behind me.
I looked back but there was no one there.
"Where are you" I said.
"Right here" the stranger said as he stepped out of the shadows.
His hair was spiky all over and he wore a red shirt and black pants.
Arrrre you a bladerrr" I said in a whimpering voice.
"yeah" he showed me his bey Death Hawk D125WD
"I will see you and your friend Zarit at the tournament tommorow"
"Bye Neo" he said as he walked away.
"Wait" I said "What's your name"
"It's Goral Saaf" "You better remember it" he snarled.
I ran home and jumped in bed. How did he know mine and Zirat's name.
Whoever he was I really didn't want face him in the tournament tommorow.

You can post your characters.
Post if you like it and I should continue
Why hasn't anyone replyed yet?
Try to expand it a little more.

Anyways here is My character.

Name: Infinity
Bey:Infinity Blaze 100WF
(Dec. 23, 2010  4:30 PM)究極のブレーダー Wrote: Try to expand it a little more.
Anyways here is My character.

Name: Infinity
Bey:Infinity Blaze 100WF

Do you mean make it longer?
(Dec. 23, 2010  4:32 PM)LibraEagle Wrote:
(Dec. 23, 2010  4:30 PM)究極のブレーダー Wrote: Try to expand it a little more.
Anyways here is My character.

Name: Infinity
Bey:Infinity Blaze 100WF

Do you mean make it longer?

Yeah.