This is only the beggining

A few months ago, JC heard about "Beyblade."Everywhere he went there was something about beyblade.He walked up to a shop that sold beyblades.He looked at the other side of the window and did not want to waste his money on beyblade because he thinks they are just tops that battle eachother.He decided to walk home.On the way, his friend ran up to him and said "C'mon JC, lets battle!"JC replied "Sorry, I don't have a beyblade."Then his friend said "You should really get one.Sorry but, I have to go now."They both said "Bye!" to eachother.JC continued to walk home.He was at the front door of his house now.He opened the door with a house key.As JC walked inside his house he exclaimed "I'm home!" JC walked upstairs into his room.He said to himself "I have made a final decision.", "I am going to buy a beyblade"

um, It needs a lot of work. Its just a generic Beyblade story...sorry

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Um, this is okay. But can you make it less...random? I mean everything is kind of mashed together and the story isn't very coherent. And can you use proper grammar so its less confusing?

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Um, this is okay. But can you make it less...random? I mean everything is kind of mashed together and the story isn't very coherent. And can you use proper grammar so its less confusing?

I'll try on the next chapter.

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Post: #10

name:kevin hagata
bio:a nice,caring,and protective(of his friends but excepically of his bey he will not even let someone touch it) 12 year old boy who's bey contains a terrifing power(it a good power but it is very terrifying because it is so strong)he wears black jeans,black shirt with a pegasis symbol HE IS A GOOD GUY
bey:shooting star pegasis(the second clear wheel version)aw85r2f
special move:shooting star overdrive
the bey goes around the oppenent in a circle and gets covered in a black energy that has little specks of sliver that looks like stars and the track gets covered in black fire and hits them six times from all sides but on the 6th hit my bey hits the spin track and send them flying upward then pegasis jumps up smashs them down to the ground and then pegasis goes straghit down and the metal wheel and track hits the face bolt
.aw85 stands for attack wings 85 so its pretty much uw145(killer beafowls track) except the track height is lowered and the sides of the have spikes on them also it is made of metal.also the wings on the track come right to the end of the metal wheel and on my command and during my special move the wings get covered with black fire .the metal wheel is pretty much vulcan except each of the wings has 3 slighty curved spikes and in bewteen the spaces of the spikes about 3 millimeters below that space are slighty curved spikes that are set the exact oppsite way.lastly during battle pegasis can swich from left spin to right spin.
beyblade bio:has tremdously super amazing smash attack and aw85 shreds anything that touchs it(except for me and my friends) also can i be a main charcter

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Post: #10

name:kevin hagata
bio:a nice,caring,and protective(of his friends but excepically of his bey he will not even let someone touch it) 12 year old boy who's bey contains a terrifing power(it a good power but it is very terrifying because it is so strong)he wears black jeans,black shirt with a pegasis symbol HE IS A GOOD GUY
bey:shooting star pegasis(the second clear wheel version)aw85r2f
special move:shooting star overdrive
the bey goes around the oppenent in a circle and gets covered in a black energy that has little specks of sliver that looks like stars and the track gets covered in black fire and hits them six times from all sides but on the 6th hit my bey hits the spin track and send them flying upward then pegasis jumps up smashs them down to the ground and then pegasis goes straghit down and the metal wheel and track hits the face bolt
.aw85 stands for attack wings 85 so its pretty much uw145(killer beafowls track) except the track height is lowered and the sides of the have spikes on them also it is made of metal.also the wings on the track come right to the end of the metal wheel and on my command and during my special move the wings get covered with black fire .the metal wheel is pretty much vulcan except each of the wings has 3 slighty curved spikes and in bewteen the spaces of the spikes about 3 millimeters below that space are slighty curved spikes that are set the exact oppsite way.lastly during battle pegasis can swich from left spin to right spin.
beyblade bio:has tremdously super amazing smash attack and aw85 shreds anything that touchs it(except for me and my friends) also can i be a main charcter

i dont know.can you? lol

i mean may i

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i mean may i be a main charcter

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i mean may i

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i mean may i be a main charcter

yeah

no offence but these are worse than my storys

no offence but these are worse than my storys

this is only the beginning of the story

Ok story but i kinda agree with NightWolf.also is it ok if i make a character
Name:Christian(he prefers friends call him C-Dub)
Bey:Thermal Eagle 145 MetalHoleFlat...Special Move:Aerial Ace... Eagle attacks 10 times head on then jumps up and smashes the opponents bey.

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