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[Fan Fiction]  Beyblade burst apocalypse(15+) (part 7 ongoing)

Oct. 14, 2020  1:43 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:40 AM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: These beys are cool and all, but there’s no way it’s beating mine. My bey can shape shift and it can change rotation mid battle. It’s not even burst so good luck on beating it. It does have an unique ability and that’s that it has a hidden blade on it’s underside that comes out whenever it’s hit for the perfect counterattack.

Bet it can't beat my nuclear explosion bey, that literally detonates 10 seconds after launch, blowing up every bey within a 50 yard radius and turning them into dust.

Did I forget to mention you can't stop it?

Oh yeah, and it also has an almost black hole gravitation from the moment it's launched, so no running to the skies or leaving the battle with your bey intact.
Oct. 14, 2020  1:44 AM
 
Maiden is alright, but have you seen my Antireproguanjanihl? Its literally glued together and has a solar panel attached to the tip so it never stops spinning. Not only that when I scream " Antireproguanjanihl Love Train" It creates a giant barrier and whatever bey that comes within a 1 mile radius of it, even outside of battle, will shatter. Best part: the barrier is invisible. Also Its completely rubber and metal, can make clones, stop time, rewind time, skip time, and reset a battle. It was also given to me by God himself. Good lucks trying to beat this kids. Forgot to mention, it can also never break due to a spell I cast on it after obtaining the crown of the Crimson King.
Oct. 14, 2020  1:45 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:43 AM)Valtryek Aoi Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:40 AM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: These beys are cool and all, but there’s no way it’s beating mine. My bey can shape shift and it can change rotation mid battle. It’s not even burst so good luck on beating it. It does have an unique ability and that’s that it has a hidden blade on it’s underside that comes out whenever it’s hit for the perfect counterattack.

Bet it can't beat my nuclear explosion bey, that literally detonates 10 seconds after launch, blowing up every bey within a 50 yard radius and turning them into dust.

Did I forget to mention you can't stop it?

Oh yeah, and it also has an almost black hole gravitation from the moment it's launched, so no running to the skies or leaving the battle with your bey intact.
Bet it can't beat my universe bey. It controls the whole universe and can make the other bey explode in 0.000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000001 seconds.
Oct. 14, 2020  1:45 AM
 
Bro maiden is the strongest beyblade in existence in this fanfic.
Oct. 14, 2020  1:47 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:45 AM)GreenK9148 Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:43 AM)Valtryek Aoi Wrote: Bet it can't beat my nuclear explosion bey, that literally detonates 10 seconds after launch, blowing up every bey within a 50 yard radius and turning them into dust.

Did I forget to mention you can't stop it?

Oh yeah, and it also has an almost black hole gravitation from the moment it's launched, so no running to the skies or leaving the battle with your bey intact.
Bet it can't beat my universe bey. It controls the whole universe and can make the other bey explode in 0.000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000001 seconds.

Then I'll have to go beyond that with my nuclear universe level explosions that happen even before the battle starts. No bey in the universe would be allowed to spin, speed, or shine in any dimension.
Oct. 14, 2020  1:48 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:47 AM)Valtryek Aoi Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:45 AM)GreenK9148 Wrote: Bet it can't beat my universe bey. It controls the whole universe and can make the other bey explode in 0.000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000000001 seconds.

Then I'll have to go beyond that with my nuclear universe level explosions that happen even before the battle starts. No bey in the universe would be allowed to spin, speed, or shine in any dimension.

Well, my bey can make urs not explode, soooooo
Oct. 14, 2020  1:48 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:45 AM)kai edits Wrote: Bro maiden is the strongest beyblade in existence in this fanfic.

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Oct. 14, 2020  1:49 AM
 
Your bey is not even in the fanfic and stop spamming my fanfic thread
Oct. 14, 2020  1:49 AM
 
Well, kokonut can defeat it in 0
seconds
Oct. 14, 2020  1:51 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:49 AM)kai edits Wrote: Your bey is not even in the fanfic and stop spamming my fanfic thread

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Oct. 14, 2020  1:51 AM
 
Stop spamming. Your beys are not even in the fanfic. Either write something related to the fanfic or get out. Not to be rude
Oct. 14, 2020  1:52 AM
 
Guess what? We're secretly telling you Maiden is overpowered. You didnt hear this from me though.
Oct. 14, 2020  1:53 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:52 AM)Eclipse Force Wrote: Guess what? We're secretly telling you Maiden is overpowered. You didnt hear this from me though.

Ok thanks? Maiden is my creation after all and I made it myself
Oct. 14, 2020  1:54 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:53 AM)kai edits Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:52 AM)Eclipse Force Wrote: Guess what? We're secretly telling you Maiden is overpowered. You didnt hear this from me though.

Ok thanks? Maiden is my creation after all and I made it myself

I'm not forcing you to change, just saying your story will be trash if Maiden stays this way.
Oct. 14, 2020  1:58 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:54 AM)Eclipse Force Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:53 AM)kai edits Wrote: Ok thanks? Maiden is my creation after all and I made it myself

I'm not forcing you to change, just saying your story will be trash if Maiden stays this way.
I will make maiden balanced
Oct. 14, 2020  2:16 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:45 AM)kai edits Wrote: Bro maiden is the strongest beyblade in existence in this fanfic.

Well you see, this is another point. There are so many plot holes. Like this. If Maiden is the strongest Bey, then why does it lose? Explain.
Oct. 14, 2020  2:16 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  2:16 AM)CheetoBlader Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:45 AM)kai edits Wrote: Bro maiden is the strongest beyblade in existence in this fanfic.

Well you see, this is another point. There are so many plot holes. Like this. If Maiden is the strongest Bey, then why does it lose? Explain.
Shun can't control maiden yet
Oct. 14, 2020  2:19 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:40 AM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: These beys are cool and all, but there’s no way it’s beating mine. My bey can shape shift and it can change rotation mid battle. It’s not even burst so good luck on beating it. It does have an unique ability and that’s that it has a hidden blade on it’s underside that comes out whenever it’s hit for the perfect counterattack.

(Oct. 14, 2020  1:40 AM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: These beys are cool and all, but there’s no way it’s beating mine. My bey can shape shift and it can change rotation mid battle. It’s not even burst so good luck on beating it. It does have an unique ability and that’s that it has a hidden blade on it’s underside that comes out whenever it’s hit for the perfect counterattack.

Ok my bey is a ghost it can do whatever it wants.
Oct. 14, 2020  2:19 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  2:16 AM)kai edits Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020  2:16 AM)CheetoBlader Wrote: Well you see, this is another point. There are so many plot holes. Like this. If Maiden is the strongest Bey, then why does it lose? Explain.
Shun can't control maiden yet

That literally doesn’t matter. The strongest Bey should be able to win, right? Because if Shun is at least half of what you make them seem, then Maiden should be able to win every battle. Many plot holes, not very good grammar, and not very compelling characters or a plot line. That’s my short review, but I can go slightly more into depth.
Oct. 14, 2020  2:21 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  2:19 AM)CheetoBlader Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020  2:16 AM)kai edits Wrote: Shun can't control maiden yet

That literally doesn’t matter. The strongest Bey should be able to win, right? Because if Shun is at least half of what you make them seem, then Maiden should be able to win every battle. Many plot holes, not very good grammar, and not very compelling characters or a plot line. That’s my short review, but I can go slightly more into depth.
Then you want to write this? Maiden is a hard bey to control since it has a mind of its own
Oct. 14, 2020  2:21 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:43 AM)Valtryek Aoi Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:40 AM)6Jupiter5 Wrote: These beys are cool and all, but there’s no way it’s beating mine. My bey can shape shift and it can change rotation mid battle. It’s not even burst so good luck on beating it. It does have an unique ability and that’s that it has a hidden blade on it’s underside that comes out whenever it’s hit for the perfect counterattack.

Bet it can't beat my nuclear explosion bey, that literally detonates 10 seconds after launch, blowing up every bey within a 50 yard radius and turning them into dust.

Did I forget to mention you can't stop it?

Oh yeah, and it also has an almost black hole gravitation from the moment it's launched, so no running to the skies or leaving the battle with your bey intact.

But my bey is a ghost
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:45 AM)kai edits Wrote: Bro maiden is the strongest beyblade in existence in this fanfic.

No it isn’t cause mine is a ghost
Oct. 14, 2020  2:25 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  2:21 AM)Golden Freddy Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:43 AM)Valtryek Aoi Wrote: Bet it can't beat my nuclear explosion bey, that literally detonates 10 seconds after launch, blowing up every bey within a 50 yard radius and turning them into dust.

Did I forget to mention you can't stop it?

Oh yeah, and it also has an almost black hole gravitation from the moment it's launched, so no running to the skies or leaving the battle with your bey intact.

But my bey is a ghost
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:45 AM)kai edits Wrote: Bro maiden is the strongest beyblade in existence in this fanfic.

No it isn’t cause mine is a ghost

Your bey is not in the fanfic yet
Oct. 14, 2020  2:26 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  2:16 AM)CheetoBlader Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020  1:45 AM)kai edits Wrote: Bro maiden is the strongest beyblade in existence in this fanfic.

Well you see, this is another point. There are so many plot holes. Like this. If Maiden is the strongest Bey, then why does it lose? Explain.

No mine is strongest lol
Oct. 14, 2020  2:26 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  2:21 AM)kai edits Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020  2:19 AM)CheetoBlader Wrote: That literally doesn’t matter. The strongest Bey should be able to win, right? Because if Shun is at least half of what you make them seem, then Maiden should be able to win every battle. Many plot holes, not very good grammar, and not very compelling characters or a plot line. That’s my short review, but I can go slightly more into depth.
Then you want to write this? Maiden is a hard bey to control since it has a mind of its own
No. I have better things to do. Like write my fanfic. And, if it’s the strongest, but has a mind of it’s own that prevents it from doing to prove it’s the strongest, then is it really the strongest? And anyways, it keeps saying that it wants more power, so I can infer that it wants to use the power. So if Maiden is the strongest, and wants to use power, then what’s stopping it? After all, you did say it has a mind of it’s own.

And also, all this random spam? It’s gotta stop guys. It’s annoying, goes against the rules, and is disrespectful to kai edits, who put time into making their fanfic.
Oct. 14, 2020  2:28 AM
 
(Oct. 14, 2020  2:26 AM)CheetoBlader Wrote:
(Oct. 14, 2020  2:21 AM)kai edits Wrote: Then you want to write this? Maiden is a hard bey to control since it has a mind of its own
No. I have better things to do. Like write my fanfic. And, if it’s the strongest, but has a mind of it’s own that prevents it from doing to prove it’s the strongest, then is it really the strongest? And anyways, it keeps saying that it wants more power, so I can infer that it wants to use the power. So if Maiden is the strongest, and wants to use power, then what’s stopping it? After all, you did say it has a mind of it’s own.
Shun's is fighting the fact that she wants to win without maidens power
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