Beyblade Fanfiction: Phoenix Down

Phoenix Down: Teaser Chapter, a Beyblade Fanfiction

Story Link
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10030657/1/...er-Chapter

Hiya guys! Joyful_3

I just recently joined WBO and am really enjoying the site and forums. I thought maybe I would post a link to a new project I'm working on here in the Beyblade Anime/Manga thread to see what people thought. I'm currently working on a Fanfiction called, Phoenix Down. It will mainly focus on Kai Hiwatari and the Blitzkrieg Boys back from generation one beyblade. It will also include all the other teams from the anime/manga, as well as a few OC's. There will be lots of beybattle scenes and bitbeast action, as well as a more in depth look at the bad boy Russian team from season one Beyblade, and the well known Kai Hiwatari! I listed the story summary below, so if you want please check it out!

Let me know what you guys think about the teaser chapter. I really want peoples opinions and thoughts on my writing, criticism is welcome, anything to help me become a better writer. Reviews are also greatly appreciated!

(Story summary below!)

The Bladebreakers just won the World Championship and pretty much saved the world! Everything worked out great right? Wrong! With the tournament over and Voltaire’s plans ruined what will happen to the Blitzkrieg Boys? Kai will do whatever it takes to free his friends from the abbey, even if it means reliving the nightmares of his past.

(Also, I think it's alright for me to post this here in the anime/manga thread. I looked over the forum rules and couldn't find anything about posting Beyblade fan related stuff. If I did make a mistake though, and shouldn't of posted this here, I apologize in advance for any trouble caused, and completely understand if one of the moderators deletes this thread! Q_Q)
This belongs in the Your Creations forum. I will move it for you.


kidallm, if you read the rules, you need to add more content to your posts than that.
its a pretty good idea, with the fact that i havent watched gen one beyblade and i wont understand this story as much, i'll be sure to check it out! all the best of luck to you ladywulf, hope things work out with this!
(Jan. 19, 2014  3:19 AM)Jake Hagane Wrote: its a pretty good idea, with the fact that i havent watched gen one beyblade and i wont understand this story as much, i'll be sure to check it out! all the best of luck to you ladywulf, hope things work out with this!

Thank you so much Jake! Joyful_3
no problem, i love to see new stories on the forums and when I see a title that catches my attention i click it, and reading the OP just got me to think, "I just gotta read this!"
I hope chapter one comes soon!
Chapter 1 of Phoenix Down is up! Chapter 2 and 3 should be up later today as well! Let me know what you guys think!