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BeyBlade: Metal Hazard!!!

Poll: What do you think?

Its good, keep working on it.
60.00%
3
Um, I'll have to wait for more information on it.
40.00%
2
Dont waste your time.
0%
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Jan. 03, 2011  9:31 PM
 
UPDATED

I am working on a short story with my friends called BeyBlade: Metal Hazard. It is about the adventures of a boy named "Lan Oromaru" and his BeyBlade "Tailed Kyuubi." Lan hears about a tournament in America so he and his friend Jou go to the US to train for the American tournament. There, they meet Yumatto and his Bey "Rocket Bee."
Lan battles Yumatto but in the battle, Kyuubi gets damage a lot. Lan wants to quit blading but Jou tells him that you cant always win. Lan gets back into blading and enters a local tournament. In the tournament they battle a ton of Bladers but in the end it Lan VS Akari. Akari uses her Bey Holy Angel. Lan wins and befriends Akari. Lan, Akari and Jou form a group called the "Hazards." They train for the next tournament and the net battle with Yumatto. More to come...
It is still in the work but I have some of the ideas down.

- Tailed Kyuubi SS105MF ( Surrounding Spikes 105MetalFlat ) (ATTACK)
- Boulder Golem 145DB ( 145DefenseBall ) (DEFENSE)
- Rocket Bee B145FS ( Barrier145FlatSharp) (Balance)
- Holy Angel HS125F ( HolyStaff125F ) (ATTACK)
- Lan uses Kyuubi, Jou uses Golem and Yumatto uses Bee

Let me know if you guys want me to keep working on this. Thanks.

Working Plot:



[Image: TailedKyuubiSS105MFParts.jpg]
[Image: TailedKyuubiSS105MF.jpg]
[Image: BoulderGolem145DBParts.jpg]
[Image: BoulderGolem145DB.jpg]
Jan. 03, 2011  9:32 PM
 
Meh! It sound alrigt!
Jan. 03, 2011  9:33 PM
 
(Jan. 03, 2011  9:32 PM)ShadowZoroark Wrote: Meh! It sound alrigt!

Thank you for the reply, I am adding more stuff right now.
Jan. 03, 2011  9:33 PM
 
it seems alright but the story is what matters. ill wait for that
Jan. 03, 2011  9:36 PM
 
i like the name!
Jan. 03, 2011  9:38 PM
 
Tailed Kyuubi the thing that came in to my head was NARUTO!
You should change the name and be more original. As for the drawings you should get photoshop or something for it to look better! Wink

Goodluck - Beyunit
Jan. 03, 2011  9:41 PM
 
can you change the SS part? just cause i have the exact same part...
Jan. 03, 2011  9:42 PM
 
dude nice keep up the work!! : )
Jan. 03, 2011  9:47 PM
 
(Jan. 03, 2011  9:38 PM)Beyunit-DL Wrote: Tailed Kyuubi the thing that came in to my head was NARUTO!
You should change the name and be more original. As for the drawings you should get photoshop or something for it to look better! Wink

Goodluck - Beyunit


Kyuubi is a part of Japanese Culture: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kyubi
(Jan. 03, 2011  9:42 PM)TheFusionRuler Wrote: dude nice keep up the work!! : )

Thank you for the kind words.
(Jan. 03, 2011  9:41 PM)Nwolf Wrote: can you change the SS part? just cause i have the exact same part...

Um, maybe. I'll have to think about it.
(Jan. 03, 2011  9:33 PM)Vulcan R2F Wrote: it seems alright but the story is what matters. ill wait for that

I have some of the story up now!
I just added Boulder Golem and more of the story!