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Chapter 1

Joe held his storm Aries tightly. He did not want to do anything that day. On cue, someone knocked on his bedroom door.
"hey joe want to go to bey stop!"His sort of annoying friend Alex said
"for the ten thousandth time,get a life."
"pretty please with a cherry on top?"
"If I go will you not ask me tomorrow ?"
"yes."
"fine."
So the pair walk through the busy city streets, 90% through the way the familiar sound of beys clashing is audible. The battle was between a sinister looking man and a innocent looking kid, around 6-7 years old.The beys are a rock Pegasus and a evil scorpio.
"Scorpio , special move, darkness black hole!" the man said in a booming and intimidating voice.
"no!" the kid yelled,and in a flash his bey had slept out.
"I'll take that now." the man proclaimed.
"not if I can help it." Alex yelled as he ran to the scene.
"oh really?" the man said as he held his launcher up.
3...
2...
1...
Let it rip!
"go thermal Pisces!"Alex said as his bey charged the man.But the plan completely backfired. Scorpio was like a wall and used pisces's speed against him, knocking Pisces out of the stadium.
"fine I'll do it." Joe complained .He took out his beylauncher and storm Aries.
Let it rip.
Aries easily took down Scorpio .
"do not think that this is the end." the man said.

Sorry for centering problem


Chapter 2 p1

"who was that guy?"Alex said.
"whoever he was, he ment business ."Joe replied sternly.
"let's help that kid."
"yeah."
"hey kid, are youOK?" joe yelled
"yeah I'm fine."
"who are you?
"my name is Jerry Thompson , and this is my rock Pegasus."Jerry showed Alex and joe the tatered bey.
"that doesn't look in good condition.maybe since a have a fair amount of points, I can another tip to replace that one."
"really?thanks a lot,ummm...""
"Joe."
The gang heads over to beystop, a place to get new beys a fix old ones. Products crowd the small walls. In the corner, there is a sign that says:parts, 100-1000 points.
"excuse me, how much does a ball tip cost?"Joe inquired.
"200 points." the aging clerk replied.
Joe bought the new tip to replace the fragmented tip on Jerry's rock Pegasus.
On the way out, Alex noticed a small flyer.
"hey guys, there is a tournament tomorrow. We should all go!"
"yeah,"
Grammar, Grammar, Grammar.
Never forget to use grammar.
Seems like a classic beystory (Nothing special so far, only 1 chapter, so...)
Too short, make it 1-2 pages in MSword.
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