A Battle of Destiny

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hey guys i know my story might not be written correctly and not be real events in it but i hope u like it but just to say there r only 5 chapters i will make more if people like it also i am new to the writing stuff so don't be rude to me it u hate it
Chapter I
One day, there was a wandering blader his name was Dalton his bey was Galaxy Pegasis. At first he was a blader that never thought of being in a team, because he thought he was the best blader in the world. The next day he went and joined a tournement, and entered it he made it to the end then lost. After his loss he realized that there were better bladers than him, so he desided to get stronger and face all challengers. Then he came across a blader by the name of Johnathon Johnathon challenged Dalton to a battle, Dalton said "bring it on I will win", so they got their beys ready it was Dalton's pegasis vs Johnathon's eagle. With the battle on the way Dalton realized dalton was strong, but the a random beyblade was launched in to the stadium, it was a Dark Gasher owned by Keegan. So the battle continued as the three went at it Dalton desided to go for gasher Dalton's pegasis sent gasher flying, but the Forgetting about Johnathon he started to turn away, and Johnathon took it as a chance to win the match and did. At the end of the battle Dalton picked up his bey and said "I'm sorry Pegasis" and went home and gone to bed.
Chapter II
The next mourning Dalton woke up with an idea to a team since he lost his battle to Johnathon, so he went and found Keegan and Johnathon locked in an epic battle. So Dalton waited for the battle to end, and then told them about the team he started. Johnathon said no at first, but Keegan said "ok I'm in". After hearing that Johnathon said "if u want me to join u will have to beat me at the world championships in four days" Dalton replied "your on and I will win, Because next time i lose i will quit beyblade forever". After making his promise he never lost again, and kept training non-stop. He believed if he wanted to be the best he could never quit training until the day before the tournament. But then Keegan convinced Dalton to rest and to give pegasis a brake, so he did and went to bed.
ChapterIII
When he woke up the next day he went outside to start his training again. As Dalton was training Keegan came up and asked Dalton for a battle Dalton accepted. So the battle begins with the two feirce bladers clashing head on then Dalton called for his special move "Galaxy Nove" he said. And so the battle comes to an end with Dalton the winner and Keegan the loser, but then Dalton walked over to Keegan and said to him "you have gotten stronger Keegan". After that being said the two started to walk around town and came across two bladers their names were owen and justin, so they had a tag battle. As the battle rages on johnathon is watching the battle without Dalton knowing that he is. Later after the battle ended Dalton told them about the team, so owen and justin asked if they could join Dalton said "sure". At the end of the day the four desided to stay at owens house, so they did. Then Dalton started to tell them about the world championships that he was going to be in then the rest desided to join the campionships as well and Dalton said " lets go for it but i won't lose". With two days before the championships they all desided to rest for a while and, so they did.
Chapter IV
When Dalton woke up the next mourning he found that his friends were gone, so he went to look for them. As soon as he found them he seen that they had been training all mourning, so he joined in with them. Meanwhile back at the park Johnathon was training too, because he knew that Dalton has gotten very strong. But back at Owen's house they have stopped training so they could take a walk around town and talk about the world championships. As the group was walking they ran into a beyblade gang that they knew nothing about. The gang said "you must battle us if we win we get your beyblade and your points got it". Justin, Owen, and Keegan all ran but Dalton stayed to fight he said "I will face you all alone, and if I win you have to return all of the beyblades and points you have taken". And as soon as the battle began Dalton seen a bey that he thought he has seen before it was Johnathon's Earth Eagle Dalton then swore to Save Earth Eagle and released his new special move called Galaxy Hurricane and all the beys went flying. Then he picked up Earth Eagle and Galaxy Pegasis and went to search for Johnathon. As soon as he found Johnathon he gave him Eagle back. When he got Eagle back he was happy and he said "thanks I owe you one" and Dalton replied "all will be repaid at the world championships". So the two turned away and headed home to take a rest before the championships the next mourning.
Chapter V
The next mourning Dalton woke up and headed straight for the tournament arena to see all of the great bladers that were there. After he got done walking around the tournament finally began. The first match Dalton was in was against Keegan. The battle began with both players shouting out "3-2-1 let it rip". With the first battle on the way Keegan used his special move right away, but Pegasis avoided it. After swiftly avoidind that attack Dalton called for his special move "Galaxy Nova" he yelled. Dalton's special move sent keegan's bey flying right out of the stadium and claimed victory. After winning all the other matches it was time for the finals Dalton vs Johnathon the battle begins. Dalton is the first one to make a move, but Johnathon countered Dalton's move even harder and sent Galaxy Pegasis into the air. As pegasis was in the air Dalton called for Special move Galaxy Nova, but eagle countered with it's special move earth destroyer. Dalton counters back with his othe special move Galaxy Hurricane and knocks eagle out for the arena and gets the victory. With Dalton the winner Johnathon desides to join Dalton's team and to become stronger with each other.


THE END

I hope u enjoied my story and thank u for reading it
Proper grammar, please D:
Chapters are way too short...
And it's actually very, very, very stereotypical, with no story telling power.
It's like I'm reading an expository essay, not a story Uncertain
Tips:
Use MS word!
Never take character requests (Except for names and beys, never take the personality, and even then, ask someone, don't let them ask you).
Give characters dialouge, and real personality.
Whenever someone new speaks, start a new line, ex:
"Hey" jo said
"Hey" bob said.
Like that.
That's all for now...
Woah don't be critical this is carping awesome.