Mother/EarthBound the Bey story

Poll: how good was it so far

Good
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11.11%
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who cars about EarthBound/Mother
33.33%
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needs work
33.33%
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Total: 100% 9 vote(s)
Chapter 1 Ninten 198X
My name is Ninten, I'm a a boy who with my friends stopped a alien invasion a month ago.I'm walking down the streets of my home town, I see a blue light coming from the sky."What's that, it's coming right at me."I told my self.I got my baseball bat ready to hit it but right when it was about to hit me it just stopped."My name is Storm Pegasus 100RF,but you can call me Storm Pegasus."I heard the blue light tell me.Than Pegasus said "You must come with me or the will die, come to finish your destiny, take me and this Launcher." I grabbed the light and it was a top and a thing called a luancher use to make the Pegaus have some ppower. "Now come with me I will take you to many years a head to when the war is almost over."

Chapter 2 Ness 199X
I am Ness, I nearly finished this war versus Giygas, he currupted a boy around my age named Pokey who now lives forever. My dad Ninten also was a part of this war, he told me of our power. There's a another meteor falling in Onnet and thisd time it's about to hit me!It must be Buzz buzz I told my self.It stoped in front of me."I'm Galaxy Pegasus W105R²F, you have put a large dent into this war Ness." Said the blue object.Than I said"What do you want with me!" "You must help me save all of time!"Said Galaxy Pegasus. I've saved Earth why not time?
|yes its Ness that has been in the SSB series but he came from EarthBound|
warning huge Mother 3 spoilers in next chapter
Chapter 3 Lucas 209X
I'm walking to my Mother's grave for the first time since I woken the Dark Dragon. I stared to cry. There I was crying at my Mom's grave once again. Right then there was an explosion of blue light, it was hard to see though my tears but there's a horse like figure charging at me. "PSI Love!" I shouted. A pink beam hit the figure and it just turned into dust. The explosion turned in to a see though dome. I had touched my shoulder, I turned around and there she was. I almost stopped crying "Mom." I said in disbelief . "Yes it's me, you must have thought you would never be able to see me after Porky."she said "You must go on another quest, with these two, Ninten and Ness." she stared to talk again "Take this powerful top it will be your greatest power that you have, its name is Big Bang Pegasus. And also don't forget this, use it to give power to Pegasus, it's called a launcher. I must go, save all time you must go to the Dark Dragon. If not, you will kill every one who ever existed before there born!" then I said with the tears wiped off "I will." Than the dome dissaperd eith all that was left were two boys and Big Bang Pegasus.
Bad grammar in some places. Proper punctuation is needed as well.
And... As for the story...
"I stopped an alien invasion months ago"
"what's that, a blue light in the sky"
*ready's bat*
"hello I am a spinning top come with me or derp."

I just don't like the plot of the story. At all.
you need to now the story line of the Mother aka EarthBound games to understand this
it will be easier to understand if you watch a few episodes of this walkthough or this fan made movie

walkthough http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-M27IMRj-...re=related

fan movie http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F5gfykM4L...tion_39878
I don't believe I need to know the storyline of Mother to understand that it's just stupid for a spinning top to come out of the sky and talk to a person and give them a launcher...
(Nov. 24, 2011  12:30 AM)Raigeko13 Wrote: I don't believe I need to know the storyline of Mother to understand that it's just stupid for a spinning top to come out of the sky and talk to a person and give them a launcher...

Believe it or not, that's how my daku wofl and I met
I'll get chapters up at lese once ever 5 days
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No offense dude, but Chappy 2 is just a reworded version of Chap.1 10 years in the future. Lemme guess, in Chap. 3, Ninten's GRANSON has this:

*Walks on street*

*Blue Meteor comes

"WHOA!!! WHAT THE HELL KERBECS?!"

*Grabs laser*

"Dude, I iz Big Bang Pegasus..."
once I can find what year mother 3 is bassed in I'll start chapter 3
...So let me guess. It's about Lucas or Claus and Big Bang Pegasis. And it falls from the sky. Crossovers are okay, but cliche crossovers suck. This is beyond cliche.
(Nov. 26, 2011  2:35 AM)Temporal Wrote: ...So let me guess. It's about Lucas or Claus and Big Bang Pegasis. And it falls from the sky. Crossovers are okay, but cliche crossovers suck. This is beyond cliche.

I think it's actually Earthbound or Mother 1's plot, not Mother 3's. But still... ehhh.
(Nov. 26, 2011  2:35 AM)Temporal Wrote: ...So let me guess. It's about Lucas or Claus and Big Bang Pegasis. And it falls from the sky. Crossovers are okay, but cliche crossovers suck. This is beyond cliche.

Lucase wlaks into explosion were BigBang appers with Ness , Ninten, and the other pegasus basicly
vary good story but sorry idk when mother 3 takes place
(Nov. 26, 2011  2:37 AM)NoodooSoup Wrote:
(Nov. 26, 2011  2:35 AM)Temporal Wrote: ...So let me guess. It's about Lucas or Claus and Big Bang Pegasis. And it falls from the sky. Crossovers are okay, but cliche crossovers suck. This is beyond cliche.

I think it's actually Earthbound or Mother 1's plot, not Mother 3's. But still... ehhh.

I plan something similar to what he said but I'm making the way Lucause get's bigbang diffrent from the other 2 chapters to make it more exiding
Yes, because the idea is sooo different in the end. :\
it will get better as soon as I find the year mother 3 is bassed in
(Nov. 27, 2011  1:37 AM)GaHooleone Wrote: Yes, because the idea is sooo different in the end. :\

(Nov. 26, 2011  2:37 AM)NoodooSoup Wrote:
(Nov. 26, 2011  2:35 AM)Temporal Wrote: ...So let me guess. It's about Lucas or Claus and Big Bang Pegasis. And it falls from the sky. Crossovers are okay, but cliche crossovers suck. This is beyond cliche.

I think it's actually Earthbound or Mother 1's plot, not Mother 3's. But still... ehhh.

your thinking of EarthBound
grr it's so hard to find the year mother 3 is based in if anyone could tell me I could move on with this story
About 100 years after Earthbound.
Eh story is okay. My writing is hardly better but everything Rai said is true.



AND this is fiction because my posion Serpent only flew from the sky and derped....he did not give me a launcher.
I finally got chapter 3 done and tryed to make it so Lucas gets the bey but in a vary different way
I made the chapters 1&2 similar because the first 2 mother game are vary similar but Mother 3 is vary different from the rest of the series