Renji VS toshirou Renji:your weak like the others. Toushirou:hmf im the instrument of your destruction. Renjinough talking lets fight. yaaaaaaaaa!!!!!! shouted both of them with their swords clashing ahhhhhh Renji:I will not lose. Toshirou:we,ll see about that. All of a sudden Toushirou disappeared Renji:Great thats all I needed. Next thing you know a swords in Renji Toushirou:Who wins know. Renji:But how could you of beaten me so easly I cant fe,ll my body im struggling to talk but how has my time come it cant be. Toushirou:Well it just has.



to be continued

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What the...I dont even....
Theres so many things you need to improve with that..
1)Its spelled souls

2)Put line breaks after each character speaks

3)"Renji:how has my time come it cant be.
Toushirou: Well it just has."

Seriously? Thats the ending? Wow.

Your stories suck.

They're not even stories. They're just insane rambling of non-sensical shouting. No logic, no emotion, no character, no developpment.

Why the bloody hell would Renji be fighting Toshiro?! Why don't you explain that before making a three lines-long battle scene that makes no sense?!

Make sense, damn it!!

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Renji VS toshirou Renji:your weak like the others. Toushirou:hmf im the instrument of your destruction. Renjinough talking lets fight. yaaaaaaaaa!!!!!! shouted both of them with their swords clashing ahhhhhh Renji:I will not lose. Toshirou:we,ll see about that. All of a sudden Toushirou disappeared Renji:Great thats all I needed. Next thing you know a swords in Renji Toushirou:Who wins know. Renji:But how could you of beaten me so easly I cant fe,ll my body im struggling to talk but how has my time come it cant be. Toushirou:Well it just has.



to be continued

cough......cough.........."crazy".....cough.......

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